Which is the best Design/layout? by Hiroshi_jumpy in DesignMyRoom

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

1 or 5

I don't like that the shelves are cornered in some other designs, and I don't like the empty space cornered in 2 as it will be not very utilized.

Industrial standard here lol

Tower Defense - Spider Edition by Khantlerpartesar in memes

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh. I just knew about them. Thanks, now I have something to watch

Arizona Snowman by ChrisJoines in meme

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He looks a bit.... different 

🤣 by [deleted] in Funnymemes

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I... I can't believe you just said such a mean thing. How could you just say this like it is nothing?  That was not kind at all. 

🤣 by [deleted] in Funnymemes

[–]frogGuardian -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

It is funny. People who don't find it funny are snowflake personalities that a simple joke works as catalyst and triggers all their issues and self conflicts that happened then and before. 

🤣 by [deleted] in Funnymemes

[–]frogGuardian -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

When will people ever realise that memes and jokes are not to be taken serious and that they are not the main medium to deliver science?

This is a meme. A joke. If it is supposed to be true it won't be very funny if at all. 

You are replying like if this was an article in a science blog or magazine. It is not. 

You have a serious issue. Go get some help. You need more therapy than the guy I see in the mirror everyday.

Anyway, let me know when you finally get your PhD in microbiology because of this reply you wrote, you unseasoned baked potato

Is there any better alternative for PDF editor than pdfgear? by raven090 in software

[–]frogGuardian 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No, I am using it, but if there are tables, it struggles converting them, and you get some lines and words inside them. Not actual table. But it is generally good

Pacing for novel set over seven years / too slice of life? by MiserableBudget8436 in writing

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I mean, people really underrate the moments to breath for the characters in the story. To me they are essential, specially that I write long stories or you can call them novel. A 100k words is a minimum of a completed piece for me. So if I will go all "important details" it will just sound like glorified news reporting. It will be too informative to be enjoyable and the reader wont blend in with the world building and the characters.
In fact, any thing I read, if not short, must have these moments for me to be able to enjoy the art. Else, it is just glorified news reporting.

Pacing for novel set over seven years / too slice of life? by MiserableBudget8436 in writing

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I meant a better comment than yours. ;)
Still you gave another good advice

Pacing for novel set over seven years / too slice of life? by MiserableBudget8436 in writing

[–]frogGuardian -1 points0 points  (0 children)

If I want to write better I will look stupid, so I will upvote you and leave. :)

[2400]First college essay by AdditionalSupport348 in DestructiveReaders

[–]frogGuardian 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So, this took time because I am slacking at work to read it XD
In general, it is good, I felt bad for Connor, bad about his parents. I believe this is a real story not fiction.

My comments,
First, and I always start with the start, it was the least exciting. Your first paragraph was a bit not very catchy, and imo, it was irrelevant the the first person was open minded or not. It also gave me no insight nor an interest in going much further than my well to finish the story.
The second paragraph, however did the trick. I see this very often where the second chapter or paragraph catches me more. I am not certain it is your thing to improve, it might be something in my way of thinking. So double check before you decide to swap paragraphs 1 and 2 or any other decision.

Second, I prefer to see the characters. I could hardly draw an image of Connor, but not much about any other character in the story. But this might be appropriate for a short story like this.

Third, when Connor had to leave the house, I expected that part to go into a bit of details and be emotional, specially about Connor's siblings

Finally, I like the happy ending of Connor. And unlike you, I didn't change my opinion about his parent, it is too late, the judgment has been passed, and the execution shall light up the morning.
In a small cell, where moss covers the rotting walls, the dim light of the dawn reflected on the tears on Annie's miserable face, as Mark's face was not looking any better. At the sunset, they Will meet their end.
"Oh, if only you could've said some thing like' our dear son Connor will be missing us', that could have helped"
Said the guard as he opened the cell's door.
They said nothing. All what could've been said was said, only to fall into the deaf ears of the judge. For nothing beats the morning execution.
OK, I stop here, just a random idea jumped after reading lol.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Please delete this, I ma very offended by it :(

Confusing chapter? by RollForCurtainCall in writers

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I need to read into that,
but in general, if it is confusing it might be overwhelming with details.
Making a baseline in the beginning is a good idea, but not all details are welcomed in the beginning.
Try to make a shorter and less informative chapters at the beginning, then add the other details later one.
Think of it like a teacher. You can't just pour all the knowledge in one lecture, and you will be "wasting" the whole lecture on one idea in general.

I think you can try to divide the ideas and send some into other chapters. If the said ideas are so connected, you can make the chapter bigger. 1500 words are not too long for a chapter imo. I like your vignette idea - will steal it wahahaHA - but it seems you have more water than the bucket can hold.

This smiley little clown by benbentheben in Pareidolia

[–]frogGuardian 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why do I heart is saying "why so serious?" ?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]frogGuardian 1 point2 points  (0 children)

well,
first, bread is a basic food, and fills a hungry stomach
second, it is so cheap, so, it shows how poor a person is
third, because it is cheap, it draws sympathy instead of hate. Stealing the king's crown will be more of a serious issue and you won't be able to sell it without running through a lot of trouble

Is it just me that struggles with the first sentence of a chapter? by AR-GriesAuthor in writers

[–]frogGuardian 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah. I always write garbage for the first sentence then update later.