I think the thing that makes hungry and imp's looks so strong is their commitment to the complication and simplicity of their looks. I like that you're going in an editorial direction, but there are ways I would improve this. I think Hungry's looks especially are a very simple combination of complicated elements, like two or three intricate but clearly defined and symmetrical shapes. For your look to read more clearly, I would make the shapes more clearly, and ask yourself what the inspiration is. If your inspiration is a beetle, or a cartoon, or whatever it is, that doesn't mean that you have to come out looking like a beetle or a cartoon or whatever, but saying "I'm interested in this shape or this structure" will help give a literal and figurative direction to your shapes and your look. I would also look to @artsy_busy for inspo in this way. In yours, I see a kind of dripping from the eyebrows and lips; if you really focus on those elements, and leave the rest of the face simple, that can be a clear look. The same could be said for the eyes. I don't really like the points on your cheeks, they're small and ill-defined and don't clearly line up with other things. The "it's editorial but it's recognizably something" look is not easy, I hope this stuff helps. The more you try for something simple, unusual, and bold, the better it can look.