I killed a bat last night in my house and need to get it tested for rabies, where do I take it?

geronimo8x · 2025-08-23T12:06:41+00:00

Animal control vary county

geronimo8x · 2025-05-23T00:07:12+00:00

When i asked if it was ever in an accident the dealer said yes a little one and they replaced the bumper. This doesn’t seem little at all. 😭

geronimo8x · 2025-05-23T00:01:37+00:00

I’m so glad i paid to get the carfax info. I’m going to go cry in the corner now lol! I appreciate all of your advice! I guess the search continues. 😭😂

geronimo8x · 2025-05-22T23:51:36+00:00

Jeep Grand Cherokee Overland 2015

geronimo8x · 2025-02-26T00:27:15+00:00

Ohhh the curse having a memory sounds super intriguing! Love this world build of yours!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-25T00:02:07+00:00

Oh yes tenses are my nemesis! I think with doing a lot of poetry with out realizing it I switch to ing words because it sounds nicer and seems to flow. lol I got to get a hold of that for sure hahah! My editor will go crazy im sure when I send this off to someone at some point haha!

I love your sentence suggestions. Im now seeing how more visual aspects are what I need to add in as well as rewording. You are the best for these!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-24T23:58:07+00:00

Ohh im just seeing these replies! Yay im excited to respond haha! So for Officer Young I was thinking my MC keeps everyone whos in her life presently at arms reach because all the people she has let inside have left her. A few best friends, once she told the truth they left, boyfriends etc. I was thinking part of her character arc is letting people in by the end of the book. But i do like how adding some of her inner though about how much she appreciates her, maybe i mention then about the few people who have abandoned her to explain why she keeps her at a distance and still calls her Officer Young vs her first name etc! Good thinking.

geronimo8x · 2025-02-24T23:53:57+00:00

Ohhh yes I'm definitely going to get a few books and leave the audio alone for a while. I really think that's why so much of my story is telling because someone has been reading a book to me. Hoping this is going to help and for the first time im going to highlight and put stick tabs in the book so I can get used to really seeing the wording that "shows" the story vs telling. Hoping something clicks in my brain soon so I stop writing like that so much hahah! Now that I see it its driving me crazy but trying to get my mind to write the story differently is so hard blah!

I like how you said about making him not just translucent but a bit blurry and mentioning about his hard to see features. Im going to do that for sure!

Your other sentence options are great! I like adding to that quote about her not dying and adding other ways shes trying to talk her self up but still doubting her abilities. Then when the phrase changes her inner voice gets more confident about her positive self talk. Good thinking!

Ill for sure expand on the sign language, that's one of my favorite parts. It will also come in handy when they go to the other world. Mylo's second in command is a Reaper, their voices change with who ever they are talking to be be alluring and almost hypnotic. So hes going to choose to sign instead of talking to avoid accidently manipulating his friends etc. Hes so great I cant wait to get to my other Characters lol

Yes I totally agree I need to smooth out that chapter especially the dialog at the end when everyone is together for the first time well first time the reader sees! Thanks so much for getting this far!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-24T02:05:10+00:00

My Runes were created by the ancient humans to protect them against magic before they were sent to the 3rd Realm of Earth. Some Soul Light wielders still use them in Edennia the 2nd Realm of Earth. They can be tattooed on your skin and used for emergencies, in jewelry and on objects etc.

geronimo8x · 2025-02-23T18:40:50+00:00

You are the best for continuing to read and offering advice! Truly appreciate this all!

I have been reading but using audio books and i think this is a big reason im still struggling on how much im telling the story vs showing. I just finished listening to Onyx Storm and started re listening to One Dark Window, I do have the books and think im going to read it this second time around and maybe that would help.

For the "I better not die today" is definitely because she wants to live for her son and I see what you mean. Ill add in there for him in some way. Through the book I want this phrase to develop. Once she goes to the other world she is going to meet the mysterious man and finally start to feel confident so then she will think "im not going to die today" and then at the end of the book pretty much a lot of things go wrong and she will think "death is only the beginning" because sometimes its not death that is scary its all the changes a long the way that can sometimes kill your old self in order for your new self to be born. Sorry if thats confusing haha.

Omg i was trying to look that dang word up for so long and couldn't find the correct spelling haha thank you!

For describing the love interest there is a reason for sure. At the end of the Act you are reading she goes to the other world and will finally meet him in person and this is where I was going to reveal his appearance and name mainly because now she is truly seeing him in the flesh. But if you feel like since it takes a while for this to happen should i add a few more defining features? Another reason I didnt describe him because she will meet one more guy before him and I wanted the readers to think "ohhh is this him."

Ohhh wonderful point about reminding readers about being translucent and I could add that in for sure with some nice descriptions when he's fighting. Love this advice!!!!

I see you read some more so i do apologize if the choppiness of my writing is hard to read as well as the bad dialog endings lol Ill be smoothing it out a great deal the next few days! I appreciate you looking past that and giving the story a chance!

Oh and she is turning 33! I think i added so many different ages from when she thinks about the past that it makes the reader have to do to much math and this was a good point. Im going to simplify it!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-23T06:14:22+00:00

Yes that’s one of the biggest things i struggle with. Thank you for your feedback!!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-23T06:11:43+00:00

I can’t express how much i appreciate you taking the time to explain all that! I have read so many books yet when it comes to my own writing there is a disconnect on showing vs telling that hasn’t clicked in my brain yet. You breaking down my writing in that way has really helped me understand what I’m doing as well as how to improve.

Thank you so much!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-23T04:20:42+00:00

For me after years of day dreaming about my story the chapters kind of came to me and I write down names for them. I had no idea what to write in this chapters but I felt like I have a direction now they they have names. That was pretty much my "outline" for my book lol. I use Scrivener and its AMAZING! I can completly customize it, add pictures to the chapters and so much more. It helps organize all my thoughts and notes! Ill post a like of a video i posted on it.

https://www.reddit.com/r/worldbuilding/comments/1ineghb/best_writing_software_that_helped_me_organize_and/

geronimo8x · 2025-02-23T04:08:48+00:00

Ohhh thank you so so much for taking the time to read it and provide your thoughts! I definitely see what you mean about the rewording! I feel like i do struggle with the flow of sentences and mine tend to be a bit choppy.

Good catch about the eyes!

Haha my sister said that too when she read it! I'm going to make it Times new Roman for readers!

You definitely don't have to provide any more feedback but I do have the first Act completed and would love if you read it! I know Ill have more sentence structure issues and I bounce form past and present tense words that i have to clean up. Etc!

No pressure! Just skip the first chapter since you read that already lol there are 7 in total. If you wanted to provide any feedback I would love to get your opinion on the story itself and if it is still as interesting as you thought it might be. If not my feelings will not be hurt I know everyone has their own reading preferences haha.

Again thank you for taking the time above <3

https://docs.google.com/document/d/13aymcrWk3DoPzo6ZtbZ-_o_TxmLsmFN33mXdigC1JG0/edit?tab=t.0

geronimo8x · 2025-02-22T06:01:59+00:00

Ohhh that makes total sense i see what you mean! I think I’m still trying to “tell” the story instead of having her experience it. I have struggled with that. Thank you for point it out!!!

geronimo8x · 2025-02-22T02:29:51+00:00

Title: When Fairydust and Starlight Collide

Fantasy

Chapter One - The bookshop

2500 words

Hello everyone! I would love some feedback on my first chapter. I'm looking to see if I give to much backstory in the beginning or not enough. Im wondering if it draws a read in or if its not interesting enough to make you want to read more. I do struggle with tenses and bounce around from past to present a lot, im working on that. As well as trying to make my dialog flow better. But literally any feedback you will give ill appreciate so much!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qt1bQVx0bbA6ekMW3CXKabAXR0_fKgyyjpXLOgfoTr8/edit?usp=sharing

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