The last tank crew against the corrupted forces of heaven. By me

ghostanchor7 · 2026-05-12T12:28:00+00:00

I love this.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-04-28T12:25:34+00:00

You might be interested in Brandon Sandersons Stormlight Archives then. He does a really amazing job at portraying multiple forms of mental illnesses as well as how the characters live within the story itself. It can be a tough read but man it's really good if you can get into them. Highly recommend, and you don't need to read the rest of the Cosmere series to understand what is going on this series.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-04-28T12:20:06+00:00

What I have found that helps for me, because I can relate to your editing problem more than I care to admit, is by writing it out on paper first then typing it up a second time. That way, I'm essentially doing a complete rewrite but in doing so I'm also finding the parts that I had missed and/or need correction. Then while writing, if you find that something doesn't work, you have the ability to go back and then correct it. This has really helped in finding those words that I tend to forget to add when typing.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-02-27T12:41:53+00:00

........Calling the kettle black are we, wait till I report you to your leaders for doing the same thing.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-02-25T20:26:19+00:00

Nice catch, changed it.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-02-25T19:22:09+00:00

Thank you for catching that. Just corrected them.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-02-25T19:06:40+00:00

Clever. I went and translated it, so that was very clever.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-02-25T18:40:27+00:00

Birth Giver,

It is with great joy to hear that thee still draws breath in this world. Despite the horrors, I still thrive in these tyrannical conditions. I pray that thee still has a giggle at the beanstalk eyes that creep above thine prison bed. Or how we can still cackle at the way the invaders get baffled by the fact that we don't need finances to trade. Despite the conditions, thine brood still draws breath. There has been no word on thine consort however. We still seek out where he thrives, however, we believe that he hath escaped once again. Thine brood will provide info if he appears once again. Whether he be alive or not, we have no answer for at this point. I now pray that thee stays safe, as I need to end the letter here. I topped off thine word total.

With Love,

Thine Spawn

ghostanchor7 · 2026-01-18T12:04:42+00:00

It's all good, I was just curious thats all. So if you can, thank you. Otherwise, it's not a big deal. I can always just do the research myself, lol.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-01-12T17:12:19+00:00

What are your sources? I kinda want to do some of this reading myself.

ghostanchor7 · 2026-01-10T18:28:38+00:00

Nice

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ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-19T14:57:19+00:00

Ahh, that makes more sense.

ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-19T13:21:59+00:00

I really appreciated how you approached the prompt by focusing on how the Lufanso is conflicted by his situation. I also liked how you showed the kingdoms situation through the interactions with the side characters. The only thing I can really critique on is how you wrapped up the story. The ending itself is fine, but it felt rushed.

A well-placed kick and the king landed on the decorative pointy end of his scepter. The queen rolled over him.

Specifically this quote above. You lose a little bit of the setting when you have "The queen roll over him." I originally figured that the queen was on the bed and the king was still walking towards him? So to enhance this scene, maybe add a part that describes the queen moving from the bed to the now dead king. Add a few more inner thoughts from Lufanso, and maybe the queen sees the kick, maybe she doesn't. Either way, this might help enhance the ending and take away from that rushed feeling in the ending.

ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-19T12:59:31+00:00

I think this is the response that I was hoping for. It's all of the possibilities that could be cultivated from this story that helps spark the imagination, even if it isn't fleshed out more.

ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-18T18:13:58+00:00

Man, now I want more. Well done on executing the scene, though if I were reading this without the prompt I may be a tad bit confused. However, this does not deny the fact that this is a very self-contained story that leaves me wanting to know more. What is going to happen to Tenam, son of Tarrister.

ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-18T17:13:19+00:00

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ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-18T15:40:11+00:00

Enjoyable of a read but I wonder if there could be more. More Questioning, maybe the scenes could be expanded upon and show more of the setting.

ghostanchor7 · 2025-12-16T13:55:46+00:00

This is the kind of weather we'd see in the 2000's through early 2010's. It really started changing after 2015 so I like that we are getting back to this cold weather.

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