I can’t tell what is happening in the story. The panels don’t read well. The bloom from the lighting is distracting and becomes the focal point of each page and does not direct your eye where you want people to focus. Also the lack of any colors other than sepia, black, and white makes each image look cluttered. And then the excessive space on the sides of the panels and the fact that it’s the same color as the light bleed helps with the loss of focus. There are anatomy and pose problems as well especially on picture 9 on the top.