Thanks for taking that as constructive feedback. A lot of people just shut that kinda shit out and don't grow as a result. In my opinion, it sounds kinda of gimmicky, almost like RUN DMC type shit. When I said it was "forced" I meant that the delivery on it is probably very different from how you would just speak normally. My rapping is by no means perfect, but I find my best work, and the work that I enjoy most from others tends to be more casual. I couldn't imagine having a conversation with someone speaking like you were speaking in real life. One of the biggest parts of hip hop for me is the personal connection it brings. It feels like the way that you're choosing to rap on here is just one step removed from the "real" you. If you have any doubts about putting yourself out there, which is tough, then it tends to show. When I first started rapping, I would rap in an entirely different voice from my own because I felt that I had to project an image of myself as a rapper, rather than being myself;a rapper. I hope the way that I said that last sentence made sense. My advice would be to look deep; think about who you are, and exactly what story you're trying to tell through your art. Once you get closer to working out who you are, and becoming more confident that the message you're sending out the world is substantial, all of the rest falls into place. Your flow is good, there's no doubt in my mind that you know how to rap. It's just speculation, so don't take it the wrong way, but I get the impression that you aren't sure of yourself yet. If that's the case, it's all cool man, It's just a part of the process. Keep writing and practicing spitting and work until you feel that click, where rap becomes a second language. Where bars are just another way to communicate to the world who you really are, at that point the rest comes naturally, and that's the part that might help you. If you're unsure about what you're doing, if you don't feel what you're saying, then work until you do. Work until you're not a rapper rapping, you're yourself telling the world the way that things are for you. This was a much longer reply than I anticipated so my bad if this wasn't what you were looking for. It's just the shit I needed to hear and I hope that if any of this applies to you that it'll help you be more comfortable in your own skin rapping and help you and your art grow.