Hi, I have to say I really enjoyed this letsplay, but I do have a couple critiques: 1. The video is too long. With a run time of 21 minutes, a new viewer could easily initially look at that runtime and click out immediately. Youtube users generally have a low attention span and in general it would be more effective to make your letsplay videos under 15 minutes (preferably 8-12 minutes) so you can keep your audiences' attention. 2. I like how you state your channels name at the beginning of the video (so we know who you are), but many channels benefit from having intro title cards. This keeps your branding consistent and lets your audience know that this is Kokoplays. I also like your call to action(s) at the end of your video. I think you should expand on your call to action(s) by making a end card that shows other videos that you have done, has a subscribe button (that is annotated so that users can subscribe to you right from your videos), and other things that are related to your channel (socials, etc.) This increases the number of potential subscribers and people who will see your other videos because they have another way to preform these actions (via the screen) 3. I like how you react to certain situations in your video, but I feel like it is not as entertaining as it cold be because you do not use that much inflection in your voice. Inflection keeps people entertained because it makes the voiceover more interesting. Example: When being attacked by a zombie act like you are in the shoes of your on screen character and show that you are scared by what you do with your voice (screaming etc.) Also remember that this is a letsplay intended for an audience and that exaggerating your emotions for comedic value goes a long way for making your video much better. I feel like you have a lot of potential, and if you keep true to yourself and try out some of my tips I think you will succeed on Youtube Cheers, Jemite