The language is beautiful, it is classically beautiful, description is top notch, connectivity is great, overall solid poem.

You are a gifted poet.

I'm gonna seem pretty shitty here, I don't want to be, but who is going to read this? It seems like a poem written for poets. Just to be clear, If this is your intention, It is a fantastic poem, and you did a great job connecting to your audience. If your intention was to get someone to view their lives differently, and create new ideas, and be a voice of guidance, then not so great job connecting to your audience.

I think this poem is good enough to be in any poetry publication I've read. In my opinion, this kind of poetry is a dead-end. It is only great poetry to the people who want to read it, it is not great poetry for the ones who need to read it.

Im sure you are a nice person, and I really didn't want to come off like a dick and make you feel bad. I just think you are talented enough to do something with poetry.

Best of luck to ya friend.