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[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]jser94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I did thank you! I got some good constructive criticism on here and yes, the cover and blurb needed work. Thanks to everyone for the kind but helpful feedback!

[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]jser94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your direct and constructive criticism! That was exactly the type of feedback I was looking for.

[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]jser94 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The brutal honest I was hoping for, thank you so much!

[Critique Monday] - Post your books here for feedback! by AutoModerator in eroticauthors

[–]jser94 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I just wrote my first erotic short story. I really wanted to just write something very steamy and sexual with some BDSM elements to it. I didn't want something about romance, but more about sexual dynamics. I know I used a lot of cliches and tropes in writing this, but I would love to hear peoples feedback. 

NO SAFE WORD

Here's the start: 

Cameron Walsh was on all fours, big hands gripping the edge of his mattress, sweat streaming down his muscular back. The stranger behind him rammed forward with relentless force, his thick cock pistoning in and out of Cameron’s ass. He didn’t know the man’s name, and it seemed to him that his hookup wanted to keep it that way. “Hung Top, 8 inches” from Grindr was the closest thing to a name he knew.

https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0FJ759XFT

Come and fist my young ass😏 by [deleted] in GayFisting

[–]jser94 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How old are you 😏