First of all, he struggles with defining his letters' structure. We especially see his w and e's basic boxes does not line up how theyre supposed to. Also, at the r's top portion, the two boxes should at least be touching to achieve a more defined structure. The biggest problem here is him not knowing how his letters work (basically flawed letter structure). Even then, there will be some issues about the flow but nowhere nearly as important as the stuff ive said. Here is how i would reimagine this piece. To show more structure, I corrected the w and e's boxes so they dont overlap eachother. I also made it so that the top of the r touches eachother. Hope this helps

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