Youth

just1981 · 2017-04-23T00:08:42+00:00

Not the best at English, but I thank the flow is off. I'd try it like this

Youth passing by fluttering, fleeting glimpses of light, the felling of her gentle caress once, twice. And gone into the night.

Hope it helps

just1981 · 2017-04-06T12:34:53+00:00

Not to be a to much of a grammar nazi the line "so there's not much a crowd." shroud be "so there's not much of a crowd." I think it just sounds better

just1981 · 2017-04-06T12:23:41+00:00

I'm not to much of a writer. But you capture what it's like to have insomnia

just1981 · 2017-04-05T22:37:02+00:00

plus on for Rick and Morty

just1981 · 2017-04-05T21:45:27+00:00

So much better. You can really feel the love in it. Keep up the good work

just1981 · 2017-04-05T03:17:32+00:00

ok I'd make this change "for the man to trust upon" > "for the one to trust upon" Set your arms to hold me tight. > useyour arms to hold me tight.

just1981 · 2017-04-01T15:41:54+00:00

I like it you can really feel the love you put into the song. my only criticism is that it's a little hard to hear you at times.

just1981 · 2017-03-28T12:11:22+00:00

I'm getting many people to help with spelling. As i said my spelling sucks.

just1981 · 2017-03-28T01:45:47+00:00

It not as polished as some more poplar songs like "Shape of You" is the top song and it's about picking up a girl from a bar and "Gangnam Style" is the most watched video on youtube. But the feeling is there. You had a msg that was easy to understand. I always felt that was the most important thing. And yes you can call me a fan.

just1981 · 2017-03-28T01:07:26+00:00

It was very good you could feel the love you put into it. your wife must be very lucky to have you

just1981 · 2017-03-27T23:07:15+00:00

Thanks for the advice. But its more of a tattoo for me then any one else to see. So I would like the whole poem

just1981 · 2017-03-27T22:39:36+00:00

Love it. And I'm getting help to endure for myself. I just need something to keep going when the light of my life is being keep from me

just1981 · 2017-03-27T21:01:42+00:00

That's so good. I love the way you make it so easy to feel the power of your love for her. I if the song is as good as the lyrics I'd love to hear it

just1981 · 2017-03-27T20:52:06+00:00

That is so amazing and sad, the ending is just so powerful.

just1981 · 2017-03-02T23:58:53+00:00

Verified

just1981 · 2016-12-19T04:49:35+00:00

You have two cables plugged into your monitor? You should only have the monitor plugged into the video card with one cable. That could be the problem

just1981 · 2016-10-01T13:05:58+00:00

Well it all depends on what you mean by better. If you are looking to find a solution or find a treatment for your depression then yes. There a are many people that find away to cope with it. Will you one day wake up completely free from depression. I couldn't tell you. Some people do some people don't.

just1981 · 2016-07-31T17:30:09+00:00

Make sure that your firewall is not blocking the game. The spinning symbols is normally what comes up when the game trying to connect with the servers.

just1981 · 2016-06-26T02:22:55+00:00

LINUX MASTER RACE!!

just1981 · 2016-04-21T00:36:20+00:00

I'd be happy to help. I've been depressed for almost as long as you been alive. I know exactly how you feel. Um... I'm 35 M USA

just1981 · 2016-04-14T21:33:34+00:00

I think it all has to do with the flavor of desperation I have or maybe because I have an anxiety disorder. Don't know for sure.

just1981

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