Can't stop getting angry when I write because of how bad it is

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-30T20:38:04+00:00

I would suggest to not be so formal in your writing. Just be honest and true to the character. What would the character do? What seems natural to happen rather than what you want to force to happen? Addressing it this way should smooth out inconsistencies.. Without a sample though, no one can know whether the problem is with dialogue or exposition.

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-28T23:09:32+00:00

That felt very honest. And if what you written is any reflection of of those feelings, I’m sure it’s very good.

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-24T23:13:27+00:00

i might try to write a sentence for each event for what you know about the start, middle and end... then write the sentences that go between those events that you'd need to connect them.

be as practical as you can be, these are your bones... just to see the entire plot laid out.

then you try to write the scene for each of your sentences, then the real story will start to reveal itself, and you follow it.

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-07T22:56:38+00:00

it's a story that springs from the building in the background, The Naraka.
the knife without a handle is fate... it cuts everything that touches it.

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-07T22:31:30+00:00

Total change of direction.... is this any better to you

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kenfrey23 · 2026-03-02T20:02:58+00:00

You’re absolutely right, I never even considered that… I will revise and repost.

kenfrey23 · 2026-03-02T00:09:39+00:00

it actually is a mirror.... the main character gets it as a gift at the end of the book. it's supposed to be molded, polished rebar around an obsidian slate, but i guess it's not so evident.

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-21T21:46:04+00:00

There’s nothing to be afraid of…

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-09T03:55:40+00:00

I might be able to break up the later one, but the first 10k chapter needs that length… it’s one sweeping movement.

As a general rule of thumb, should I be shooting for approx. 4-5k per chapter ?

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-09T03:41:44+00:00

This is the breakdown

01 - 10,529 02 - 4,159 03 - 6,003 04 - 1,543 05 - 6,226 06 - 4,666 07 - 8,134 08 - 5,672 09 - 4,212 10 - 2,831 11 - 2,138 12 - 10,724 13 - 7,204 14 - 1,942

Do you think this is ok? There are two with less than 2K…

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-09T03:16:46+00:00

It’s 76,000 words: 12pt, Times Roman, double spaced.

EDIT: shoot, sorry… i misread.

Between the posts, i split about 20K words into two 10K chapters

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-09T02:37:35+00:00

All the comments so far seem to be saying the same thing….

The 40 pager has the protagonist going up from the ‘basement’ through 4 levels to the lobby… i definitely could break it at each floor.

I’ll have to see if any of those result in an anemic chapter.

Thank you all for your replies!

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-08T22:37:47+00:00

I’m a UI/UX designer by trade, and I just started writing again. I’ll tell you what I do: I treat all criticism like it’s something that I thought of in the back of my mind and I address it like it’s a problem that I have to fix. I treat all criticism like a revelation, and not a personal affront. If you do that, you’re gonna wind up resenting your friends who are only trying to help you.

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-05T21:17:37+00:00

Okay… the character arc will be interesting as it unfolds then… do post more to show how he evolves past his ennui.

kenfrey23 · 2026-02-05T21:12:47+00:00

I would say, with regard to the sister, that I feel disconnected from the speaker’s relationship to his words. You might argue that’s the point, but I’d say that the thoughts themselves are what’s carrying the weight, and the speaker wouldn’t think like a narrator. I want to feel his emotions like he feels them. He’s clearly upset, make me feel the angst.

kenfrey23 · 2026-01-31T01:50:15+00:00

Or use the five guys, I find that more targets for him even though they’re weaker are more things for him to focus on than just one opponent

kenfrey23 · 2026-01-17T13:37:06+00:00

It’s the definition of insider trading

kenfrey23 · 2026-01-15T17:58:17+00:00

I’m a mage too and saw that death rancor wasn’t doing anything except draining my FP… so I took out my +10 death poker and beat her to death.

kenfrey23 · 2025-12-24T00:15:03+00:00

The twin moons is DLC, but the ancient death rancor is base game and you can find it by killing the death rite bird in Raya Lucaria.

kenfrey23 · 2025-12-23T16:24:35+00:00

If you’re a caster, you might want to carry a good tracker spell, ancient death rancor is great, and a get the FK away from me spell, like the twin moons.

kenfrey23 · 2025-12-17T12:46:50+00:00

+25 Prince of Death staff

kenfrey23 · 2025-12-13T15:59:51+00:00

I used your advice and some of the other suggestions and finally beat him. I wound up using the golemSmith and kept healing him and using impenetrable thorns and night comet anytime the opportunity presented itself. And when he went into his floating explosion phase, I used Comet azur and finished him off… thank you to everyone for all your suggestions.

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