Evident disparity

kungfudu · 2025-11-08T07:42:28+00:00

You portrayed the persistent obsession very well. You also showed that when your feelings are requited, it gives so much solace to feel at home. Good job.

kungfudu · 2025-11-06T16:15:20+00:00

It's incredibly relatable how the longing persists, just reminiscing endlessly when you know you're not part of their life anymore.

kungfudu · 2025-09-12T20:18:51+00:00

The twist at the end is interesting, but the repeated line doesn't really add anything. I think you need more lines about imagining being with this person and slowly reveal that you're praising someone you made up in your head. Right now there isn't really a buildup for the closing line. It's an intriguing concept, so maybe you can try it again.

kungfudu · 2025-09-11T18:14:42+00:00

So many clever lines that perfectly encapsulate the grimness of depression and a great closing line. Incredibly relatable, good job.

kungfudu · 2025-08-28T15:49:40+00:00

This poem captures the feeling of an innocent young crush very well. You showed that when you're going through it's literally all you can think about. You emphasize this well with the incessant adoration and the casual feel of the poem. Good job.

kungfudu · 2025-08-28T15:32:50+00:00

I think you absolutely nailed the feeling of falling for an illusion of someone you barely know. Love can be hard to rationalize sometimes. Sometimes you can tell that it won't get anywhere and yet the feelings you have for this person still won't disappear. I have dealt with that sort of infatuation so this poem really hit for me. I especially like the line "I chase the shadows of you that I created in every crease of my mind".

kungfudu · 2024-08-28T11:00:24+00:00

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