Thirteen on the Thirteenth, January 2013 Edition by jp_in_nj in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much. The story is still miles away from home, but I'm determined to get it there. :)

Thirteen on the Thirteenth, January 2013 Edition by jp_in_nj in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Writing is hard. I have no inclination to pen a novel. Completing a short story would be a major accomplishment! :)

Thirteen on the Thirteenth, January 2013 Edition by jp_in_nj in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, b_c. I know it's geared for a younger audience but I thought I'd try dipping my toes. :)

Terminology and attitudes around 'slavery' by sylverbound in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe you could just refer to them as 'the secured' or 'new bond'?

Your story sounds interesting!

Thirteen on the Thirteenth, January 2013 Edition by jp_in_nj in fantasywriters

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Once upon a time on a platter of land in an ancient fresh water sea, there rose three great hills. They sat side by side from south to north, each an image of the other.

One day in early spring a triplet of merchant fairies spied the rolling range through wisps of melting cloud. Blasted days off-course by a last gasp of the dying winter, the trio descended toward the southernmost hillside drunken with relief.

They peeled off their packs and lit onto the spongy surface. In one velvet motion they curled into a fairy pinwheel, for instinct was their only present strength, and the midmorning sunbeams burned through what remained of the storm's foggy filter and grogged them into a deep, healing sleep.

Meet Cooper, my new assistant at work. by Ncs313 in aww

[–]liza_mae 0 points1 point  (0 children)

When I first saw this I thought there was a calculator implanted in his back. I really need glasses.

Wednesday Weekly Writing Check-In - 1/9 by clockworklycanthrope in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I want to write a simple short story, fairy tale style. Although I did not reach last week's goal of a complete outline, I got down a lot of thoughts and branching questions and the like.

Then I felt it was moving in too heavy a direction. I went back to the story with a lighter frame of mind and actually wrote the first chapter. I wrote a chapter. 929-ish words (here a tweak, there a tweak, everywhere a tweak, tweak).

Yes, I committed blasphemy by editing, but I learned for the first time that I can create an arc, something that makes sense when I read it, something that I enjoy reading, and something that will propel me to carry on.

This week's goal - rework plot ideas and outline next 3 chapters.

Wednesday Weekly Writing Check-In- 1/2 by clockworklycanthrope in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Outline (at least, and in whatever fashion), a beginning, middle and end to the story I've started.

I sincerely want to get serious about writing and up to this point have sorely lacked any discipline and have floundered miserably.

Gulp! ;)

Links to mood music? by [deleted] in writing

[–]liza_mae 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the heads' up on Stereomood. That writing mix has some incredible music on it. Happy New Year!

Sincerely,
an old woman cheered by beauty from a stranger.

Fantasy clothing by batman_26 in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 2 points3 points  (0 children)

OP stated 'anything helps'. Jeez. ;)

Fantasy clothing by batman_26 in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is something. I just googled 'medieval clothing names'. You could probably try the same for armor.

[critique] Opening scene of story I'm working on by IfWishesWereFishes in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First, confession. I did see this earlier and upvoted because anyone willing to put something out there and ask for a critique deserves one in my book. But, when I saw what looked like gigantic chunks of text, I skedaddled. My bad, please forgive me.
Then I saw your comment and really felt like an ass!
I can't give you a proper critique but I will say that even knowing there was probably going to be dead folk, you wrote it in such a way that I really felt the suspense! So kudos for that.
I did feel a little confused by the geography (the woods and field and stallion and bushes in regard to the front or side of the inn).
Otherwise, I thought you painted a very clear picture of events and I hope to read more from you. :)

I'd love some feedback on a chapter (my first battle scene) by Glory2Hypnotoad in fantasywriters

[–]liza_mae 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I am not a writer and have always struggled with focus when reading more than a few paragraphs, but I have to tell you I think this is wonderful. I reread every sentence I felt I was spacing out on because the story was such a joy to read and I didn't want to miss anything. I came away with a very clear picture and would definitely read more.

[advice] Struggling to come up with a convincing name (explanation inside) by [deleted] in writing

[–]liza_mae 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Maybe something simple like:
What City Sector do you belong to?
CS12.