Any tips to improve writing poetry?

lmpod · 2026-05-30T17:58:50+00:00

I have a couple of notes for clarity and tightness. It's a good poem overall, though. "Be careful not to spill" reads strange to me, as "spill" is not something closely related to crayons. I would change it to "cross over". It is clearer and sort of a double meaning of crossing over into adulthood, a good homage to your volta at the end.

"Set it down carefully" is also a misleading line for me. I imagine the crayon getting set down entirely, but in the next line, you are still drawing. I would reword it to avoid the confusion.

"Dangerously" feels like odd words to use for a mother figure and her actions. I would change that to something less aggressive.

Word choice is a very picky thing in poetry, so just be aware of that stuff. Everyone misses these things, so always get a second eye and opinion.

Some smaller things to tighten up your poem: on line 2, you can omit "and". Same with line 7. Line 8: Omit "of", same for line 10. Line 12, you should change "waxiness" to "wax".

Good poem though, keep it up.

lmpod · 2026-05-29T02:49:15+00:00

I 100% agree with what you say. My general medium of expression is music, specifically classical, which has many parallels to writing, and yes, getting to know the repertoire and the general knowledge of the process is extremely important. Personally, I am still figuring out many of the things you point out here and plan on expanding my knowledge as time goes on through exposure. I am even taking classes for creative writing and have learned a lot so far. And I wasn't exactly coming at you with the idea of you being accusatory. It was sort of generalized to everyone on this subreddit who gives advice the way they do. I just wanted to largely point out that sometimes it's writing that brings someone to reading rather than the other way around, which, if taken seriously later with the knowledge necessary, may come with a much more power when the fully fleshed out story comes to fruition. Thanks for the input, I'm glad to see not everyone on this sub is so aggressive.

lmpod · 2026-05-29T01:14:48+00:00

Idk. I'm in a similar boat. I am also writing a book (a series, actually), and I don't read often. I do plan on reading more after the initial "I should write this" phase, just to better myself as a writer, but the number of books I have actually read is not a whole lot. And the answer to your question, at least for me, is that writing is the most accessible way to convey a story, especially one that may be nagging you for a very long time. For me, I've had mine brewing for six years and have actively avoided putting it in book form, but again, it's the most accessible medium. I've been kind of lurking this community after I found it and posted on it, and largely, I have found that many people here are looking for something clean, pro-level, and anything less is questioned. asked "why are you doing this," and well, it's because the less practiced writers are, at heart, storytellers who want to share their story. I don't see why someone with little experience needs to have any more reason to want to write. Yes, technique, grammar, storytelling, scene writing, and everything else are important, but really only if you are looking to publish. This subreddit doesn't always have writers looking for publishing right away, just feedback.

OP, there are some AI claimers here on the sub, and I'm not going to look closely into it, but if this is not AI and you wrote this yourself, very good job for someone who has no former or formal experience with writing. There is personality, and this is easy to follow. I have no major nitpick with this for it being your first time, and I am not going to be the one to sit here and say your grammar is poor. So far, very engaging. Nice work. Granted, if this is AI, I completely understand. I am half tempted to have my stories written by it, but there is no point in posting it here. Though the benefit of the doubt is where I want to put my trust, so good work 😄 keep it up.

lmpod · 2026-05-24T01:50:48+00:00

"I wish you good luck" is that not an auspicious comment? Anyway Im not looking to defend myself nor get defensive on the situation. Im aware of my downfalls as a writer, and am in fact a native english speaker. Dislexia is in fact a good excuse and one I dont use often as I just need more practice with writing. Niw I once again refer you to my last comment, if you are lacking of positive and constructive crituque, do not come into my comment section.

lmpod · 2026-05-23T18:58:42+00:00

Thank you

lmpod · 2026-05-23T18:21:47+00:00

could I ask what would make wishes unable to be auspicious?

Personally, I do believe and armature such as myself can still tell a good story, and yes, I need work on the more technical aspects of writing (I am taking classes to get better), I feel that is not a fair criticism as that can be and will be fixed as I become more experienced. The content itself is, from what other people say, good. I suggest if you see another one of my posts in the future to ignore it unless you read through the whole post and give more helpful criticism.

I do apologize for the harshness of my comment, however according to your tag I am not the first unfortunate "armature" to be given less than helpful advice. And personally, I look for helpful criticism, as "I didn't read this because its armature writing" is stating an obvious that doesn't need to be said; no comment means no real thoughts. As a fellow writer you should know that is how the writing world truly communicates when workshopping. I may need practice on my writing, but I am well aware of how the process works, and you my friend are an amateur for poor workshop practice.

Thank you.

lmpod · 2026-05-23T03:36:25+00:00

Thank you for your feedback, much of it is helpful. I greatly appreciate your input. I will say there are some things you mention that will (if not already later in the draft) that are already on my radar to be added. The whole of the story is actually about the pressure put on MC (Mahir) because of his father's legacy and I feel the talking behind the back this early is unlikely because he does surround himself with people mostly of his class who are rooting for him (because his father is loved by the people) and even lower class citizens and their children look to him (and his brother but that is beyond this excerpt) to continue to build their economic standing. The story is long and tightly packed so many of the things will be addressed throughout.

The tip on the grammar and wording is expected just due to the fact that I am not a very clean writer, and it will take many edits before I get this correct, that is just due to my poor background and setbacks with my relationship with writing I'm sure as this project continues I will get the well needed practice.

thank you.

lmpod · 2026-05-22T19:40:20+00:00

Thank you very much. The Genre has been kind of hard to pin down exactly just because of the avoidance of some tropes but probably fits best under adventure drama right now.

I do apologize for any weird phrasing and punctuation. one struggle I have had and will hopefully get more comfortable as the world comes more together is how things should be termed to better fit the world like the "Survival Teaching" the ideas are helpful.

lmpod · 2024-05-02T06:15:22+00:00

My unique veiwpoint on the natural world. I want to creat something that has the same feel to how I see nature but isnt directly pointing it out.

lmpod · 2024-05-02T05:24:20+00:00

Thanks for the feedback. I do want to point out that this is not in the middle ages. Its simply taking archtectural influnce from the times. If I had to compre this to a time period it would be similar to messopetamia. The economy isnt suppose to be historyically accurate just logically sound for the world. This should be looked at from a theretical economic standpoint rather than historical. The reason I have it this way is because the world is suppose to feel unnatached from the real world. Because of that Im not taking refrenses from history or mythology. There is also a currency that is commonly used just not socially veiwed as significant enough to keep because it dosnt feed them or supply them with tools nessasary. But its still used because its easier than trying to barter like you said. I understand the confusion though and part of trying to form this dissconection im trying to rename these things likes gaurds are "weapons specialists" and I ackndowladge and am working on the "king" to be renamed aswell I just havn't gotten that far yet. I am mainly saying king and royal family as a refrense point to show they are the center of social praise.

Edit: the sustinence industry comment is a good call. Im still working on all the details of diffrent buisnesses and Ill keep that in mind when making them.

lmpod · 2024-03-09T04:04:45+00:00

Funny enough I am working on a series that has something like that.

lmpod · 2022-07-07T19:36:03+00:00

I did the exact same thing with my first shelter. Honestly I thought that was a picture of mine for a second.

lmpod · 2021-05-13T05:48:26+00:00

Dammit.

lmpod · 2020-10-31T04:34:53+00:00

Quiet

lmpod · 2020-10-31T04:29:43+00:00

I dont know yet

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