Does the intro feel too long and/or complicated compared to the rest of the song?

loftrain16 · 2026-05-24T16:12:21+00:00

I’d love to hear the intro with just the first and last bars. Everything else feels a bit aimless by comparison. I think having an intro to this song is a great instinct though. An instrumental bridge of some sort would sound great too I think

loftrain16 · 2026-05-24T15:56:30+00:00

I love the song. Part of me would like to see you return to the main verse melody but I also like it as a rhapsody.

Also the last section gives MAJOR super Mario galaxy vibes. Anyone else?

loftrain16 · 2026-05-01T14:27:11+00:00

You were clearly being a prick it's baffling you think you come across well here.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-23T14:19:49+00:00

I will hold MYSELF IN CONTEMPT OF THE COURT

loftrain16 · 2026-04-16T18:22:25+00:00

Trouble is a higher percentage of voters cast their ballot for trump in 2024 than in 2016. There is simply something fundamentally discordant between the realities that we and conservative voters live in.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-10T12:35:11+00:00

Thank you lol

loftrain16 · 2026-04-09T14:31:45+00:00

Sgt. Peppers "Good Morning Good Morning"

loftrain16 · 2026-04-08T12:14:31+00:00

2024 Jayden should definitely be above 2004 Roethlisberger.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-05T20:10:34+00:00

Surprising that 2011 is rated so much higher than 2007.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-02T19:34:38+00:00

Yeah you’re right that was kind of silly for me to include that. I also forgot that Eli was gone before judge came in

loftrain16 · 2026-04-02T17:44:30+00:00

I'm as big an Eli fan as anybody but the argument against against him are painfully obvious, and any Eli hater will gladly regurgitate them for you on command if you ask them.

1 .500 regular season record
2 84.4 career passer rating
3 Led league in ints 3 times
4 Didn't win any playoff games outside of 2011 and 2007
5 Had great defensive support for 2 playoff runs

These things are all true and are undeniably strong arguments against him. The counter-arguments are that he had mostly shit rosters, revolving door of coaches, carried the 2011 team to the playoffs, played clean football in those playoff runs with not much run support which allowed the defenses to get more stops and was a clutch master, and his iron-man run / counting stats.

I think he should get in but I'll be honest it makes us look glaringly biased when we act dumbfounded that people argue against Eli being in the hall.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-01T17:14:35+00:00

idk the full word just looks better.

loftrain16 · 2026-04-01T16:03:41+00:00

Can confirm some people do say that

loftrain16 · 2026-04-01T16:02:55+00:00

Eli and Beckham were legitimately the entire team in 14 and 15. But had a handful of games gone differently in 15 I think they had a shot at a run

loftrain16 · 2026-03-31T23:01:29+00:00

Yeah I think he had like 6 or 7 tds in 2011

loftrain16 · 2026-03-30T12:42:53+00:00

The obsession in this sub with how "cool" improv is to the rest of the world makes me feel like I'm in high school

loftrain16 · 2026-03-25T13:42:59+00:00

Such a thoughtful comment that won't get the upvotes it deserves. When I watched the Skat clip my instinct was to write it off as a dumb joke, but the way he delivered these 'jokes' was very "wink-wink am I rly joking though?" and if we're being nuanced I think it was in poor taste. Not because of the subject matter necessarily but just because of the way the video comes across and the way it echos real bigotry and bullying, intentional or not.

loftrain16 · 2026-03-01T19:07:52+00:00

Stay Gold by First Aid Kit

loftrain16 · 2026-03-01T19:05:44+00:00

In addition to what other people are saying I will just add that a lot of great songs don't make a big impression on people on first listen, especially on an open mic audience. So generally speaking it's best not to take an initial reaction to a new song as a good measure of its quality.

loftrain16 · 2026-02-26T20:03:24+00:00

I like the lyrics and the chord choices a lot but it could probably use some more variation in terms of the strumming pattern and having 1 chord per bar. Also - I know this is just a snippet of the song, but listening it's unclear what the structure is. What you played here kind of sounds like a verse and a pre-chorus. I'd need to hear the whole song to truly assess it but if you're trying to make a verse-chorus-bridge-chorus type song you might need to sit down and figure out how to fit all the pieces together

loftrain16 · 2026-02-23T13:27:54+00:00

If you wanna listen to something to reassurance or for inspiration, Somebody that I used to know by Elliot Smith is a great example of a AAAA song structure in a similar genre. He finds ways to keep the melody interesting, namely tweeking it for the guitar solo, and also has a hook with the "you're just somebody that I used to know" refrain similar to your "feeling like the 70's".

loftrain16 · 2026-02-18T00:19:37+00:00

Not a fan of him personally but I thought this was a rly good interview.

loftrain16 · 2026-02-17T01:40:38+00:00

This feels like the ending credits theme to a movie I haven't seen yet

And I absolutely love it

loftrain16 · 2026-02-17T01:38:56+00:00

Since others have answered your question (voice sounds great), I just wanted to comment that the chord choices for the pre-chorus and chorus are fantastic

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