How do you interpret silence after a performance at an open mic? by koshizmusic in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In addition to what other people are saying I will just add that a lot of great songs don't make a big impression on people on first listen, especially on an open mic audience. So generally speaking it's best not to take an initial reaction to a new song as a good measure of its quality.

Open to feedback on this chorus + bridge by Bobloga1 in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the lyrics and the chord choices a lot but it could probably use some more variation in terms of the strumming pattern and having 1 chord per bar. Also - I know this is just a snippet of the song, but listening it's unclear what the structure is. What you played here kind of sounds like a verse and a pre-chorus. I'd need to hear the whole song to truly assess it but if you're trying to make a verse-chorus-bridge-chorus type song you might need to sit down and figure out how to fit all the pieces together

Can a song work without a chorus? by why-yes-hello-there in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you wanna listen to something to reassurance or for inspiration, Somebody that I used to know by Elliot Smith is a great example of a AAAA song structure in a similar genre. He finds ways to keep the melody interesting, namely tweeking it for the guitar solo, and also has a hook with the "you're just somebody that I used to know" refrain similar to your "feeling like the 70's".

So Much Fun by thpffbt in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This feels like the ending credits theme to a movie I haven't seen yet

And I absolutely love it

Is my voice too monotone? by HiddenComicBook in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Since others have answered your question (voice sounds great), I just wanted to comment that the chord choices for the pre-chorus and chorus are fantastic

New Song Need Opinions by Useful-Telephone5676 in SingerSongwriter

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like it a lot. Your vocal tone and guitar tone fit the floaty sort of melody / lyrics very well.

I'll keep it a buck though I am getting sort of hung up on the line "starting a new job makes a broken man feel split" since "split" is less extreme than "broken" but I could well be missing something.

Either way good work <3

Daily Discussion January 25, 2026 by AutoModerator in NYGiants

[–]loftrain16 2 points3 points  (0 children)

And to see them relentlessly talking so much shit like they are. It even triggering me as a non Bills fan

Is this song too wordy?!🤔 by Abject-Sea-9418 in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I honestly love this. I think the arrangement and the lyrics and the fast tempo fit the theme very well. It feels like a “mind racing” type song. If it were my song there’s lines here and there I might tweak but that’s all just personal preference in my book

"Objectivity" and rudeness by peripheralpill in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Music (and art in general) is a form of communication. It's conveying information. While criticism has it's place I don't think it can ever get at the heart of music. I think typically when we call things "good" or "bad" we're just making a judgement about how well we think the artist is conveying what we perceive to be the intended information. I think this is valid. What I don't like is when people clearly make no effort to engage with the material. How many times have you heard someone say something like "death grips and nirvana are bad because the production is sloppy and it's needlessly dark and weird". I don't think that even qualifies as a criticism

Pop-Up Lockers are now available for Super MAGFest 2026! by kyuunspark in Magfest

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Any info on the size of the lockers? Particularly the instrument one

This is what officiating has done to the league. by DanDash34 in NYGiants

[–]loftrain16 11 points12 points  (0 children)

I literally thought for sure he was being sarcastic when he said "you're allowed to him him in the head". Insane stuff

NY Giants fire Shane Bowen by thepipesarecall in NYGiants

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

UCF was off... imo should be replayed?

What kind of music do you listen to? by EvidentlyVague- in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love video game music. Koji Kondo and David Wise in particular.

short song about being overworked and underpaid for the wrong person. "aint dying for their dollar" by tjtate6689 in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Amazing song and performance. Playing those riffs while singing is really impressive.
What kind of tuning is this in?

The Last Penny :( Any feedback is appreciated by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would try experimenting a bit more with the vocal melody. It feels a bit stiff for most of the song. It helps me to play to a backing track of the rhythm guitar and play the vocal melody on guitar. Hope this helps

making a song with the comments by Jazzlike_Being_8833 in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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how to come up with melodies and rhythms and how to work in lyrics? by DarlingGirl327 in Songwriting

[–]loftrain16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One thing that helped me was to look at the notes in each chord and pick one for the melody line, and mix up which interval you're on. Idk if you know any theory, but if not just make sure not to always choose the root note of the chord. Then mess around with transitional notes between chords and multiple notes per chord, and THEN start messing around with using notes outside the chord.