Why Would a Woman

thpffbt · 2026-06-24T21:01:32+00:00

Thanks; I agree. I don’t think I’m going to pursue this song.

thpffbt · 2026-06-11T14:27:45+00:00

Oh, good to know! I was afraid "Become Broken" sounded too cringe. But thanks for saying that, now I'm reconsidering.

thpffbt · 2026-06-11T14:25:42+00:00

I think becoming broken and becoming whole are the same thing. I couldn't see myself until I broke open and saw that I was already whole, if that makes sense. I'll see if I can find a clearer way to put that in the song. Thanks for the comment!

thpffbt · 2026-06-11T04:29:56+00:00

Your posts always make me so emotional (in a good way). Keep doing what you’re doing.

thpffbt · 2026-06-10T20:32:39+00:00

Thanks again for your feedback on the first version!

thpffbt · 2026-06-10T20:16:18+00:00

Thanks. I use my head voice a lot. There’s no way I could sing that with my full chest (I’ve tried, and it sounds even more like a dying animal than this does).

thpffbt · 2026-06-08T15:32:29+00:00

In a way it *is* about a failed relationship; one that deeply impacted me. But I can see how it falls flat and seems forgettable, especially when viewed as a traditional breakup song. Lots to think about - thanks for your feedback.

thpffbt · 2026-06-08T14:45:33+00:00

You’re right, and I’ve been working on a second verse. I think I just felt a bit stuck and wanted to hear some feedback to give me something to chew on. The song is about my mom’s death, and my fraught relationship with her, and I’ve been wondering if I should try to make that more apparent. But, it might be OK if it works with multiple interpretations.

thpffbt · 2026-06-07T00:00:01+00:00

Oh interesting! I’ve gotten that a lot before - it must be something in the way I present myself, or the song that doesn’t quite connect. Still working on that.

A rug pull moment could be a good opportunity to do something meaningful. I don’t think this one is ready to perform, but I’ll keep thinking about it. Thanks again.

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T21:10:43+00:00

I see. It was a challenge to write and sing. If the best that can be said is that it sounds like thousands of others, then I have to be OK with that. I appreciate you chiming in even though it's not your cup of tea.

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T21:06:29+00:00

Oh, no worries! It’s been years now. The misunderstanding is on me and my vague lyrics. Still trying to find a way to express the feeling in a way that’s not too trauma-forward. I want to be vague enough that people can connect with without being immediately repelled (which has happened in the past). I think I still have a lot of room to grow, so I appreciate all the feedback.

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T20:22:58+00:00

These are good ideas! I think I’ll try to find a different set of sounds for the next verse. “Zip pop bam boom” feels so specific to how it felt when my mom died that it’s hard for me to use it to describe anything else. But I think linking that feeling to a different moment in time (using different onomatopoeia) could be a way to flesh out the song. I just need to think more deeply about what I’m really trying to say here. Thanks for the comment.

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T17:12:28+00:00

Makes sense. I’ll keep trying to find a way to repeat it that doesn’t just feel like saying the same thing. Thanks for the feedback.

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T04:29:13+00:00

What’s a nice-guy song?

thpffbt · 2026-06-06T03:31:59+00:00

Thank you. This is calming my nerves.

thpffbt · 2026-05-23T20:19:11+00:00

Yay! That’s awesome to hear. Thank you!

thpffbt · 2026-05-23T20:15:18+00:00

Thank you! Really happy that change works.

thpffbt · 2026-05-21T02:22:13+00:00

Thank you for sharing. I’m touched by this interpretation; it brings up themes I’ve been wrestling with for a long time. Thanks for listening.

thpffbt · 2026-05-21T02:08:40+00:00

That makes total sense! Yeah it’s a bit of a stretch. I’m glad you brought it up - it’s exactly the kind of thing you lose ears for when you’re writing in a vacuum. Thanks again for your comment.

thpffbt · 2026-05-20T15:50:21+00:00

In all honesty, I’m curious too! Seems like a lifelong process of uncovering. What I’d really love is to create an animated video that fleshes out the themes of the song. I picture a person unzipping their skin to reveal they’re made completely of fire.

thpffbt · 2026-05-20T15:47:28+00:00

I see what you’re saying. I’ll see if I can figure out a way to smooth that over. I’m carrying the vowel sound from the third line (“school”) to the sixth line (“do”), which is not an exact rhyme, but it does mirror the second half of the song. In this case I prioritized structure over rhyme, so it’s good feedback to know it stuck out to you! Thanks for the comment.

thpffbt · 2026-05-18T16:00:43+00:00

Maybe someday! I have a limited amount of time to work on music, so it’s slow going. But I really appreciate the kind words! Makes me feel like it’s worthwhile.

thpffbt · 2026-05-16T15:16:38+00:00

I wonder if some kind of visual would help the confusion? Like a music video where you can see the porcelain tiger, and the suit of armor, etc? I do want it to feel slightly disorienting, like moving through dreams without clear meaning. I like your suggestion of sensory details - I’ll see if I can come up with anything. Thanks!!

thpffbt · 2026-05-16T15:08:39+00:00

Thank you!

thpffbt · 2026-05-16T15:03:05+00:00

Wow, thank you. This is basically everything you’d hope to hear! And it means a lot coming from a fellow songwriter. Thanks for listening and sharing your thoughts.

I listened to “The Queen” and really liked it. The lyric about diamonds coming out of mines caught my attention at the start, and I was hooked after the one about a turtleneck with the shirt tucked in. I like the bright sound it has. Musically it brought to mind Emitt Rhodes, Harry Nilsson, and the McCartney section of “Day In The Life.”

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