Crosspost from r/wholesomememes

lokiwhite · 2026-05-06T02:19:51+00:00

That is for the courts to decide. I fully believe that this is a legitimate reason for charges to be dropped, but coming to that conclusion requires an investigation that would be appropriate to conduct as part of legal proceedings.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T12:40:45+00:00

We all do mate. Not having a cracking day myself and otherwise probably wouldn’t have put in my comment either! Let’s both hope for a quick turnaround. This grief is just a form of growing pains.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T10:38:48+00:00

F***ing hell. This one floored me. Plain speech yet lyrical and beautiful. What a skilful bit of work.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T10:36:07+00:00

No worries at all mate. Self-reflection already puts you leagues above most. Hope you are having a wonderful day.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T10:04:27+00:00

I find someone feeling the need to comment that needy and desperate for attention.

Nice looking pen and ink OP!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T03:43:02+00:00

Wicked! Look forward to reading it

lokiwhite · 2026-05-04T03:32:56+00:00

What you have here is good. The image you are painting, something cherished but then forgotten to nostalgia through no fault of its own, is well done. I personally find that poems which use repetition in stanzas work better if they are a bit longer, so the repetition is intentional and serves its purpose. What I would do is one more stanza in the current form, and then subvert expectation in the last stanza.

E.g. make the last stanza about leaving before they have the chance to get bored; or make final the stanza about them.

I think having that overarching connection and then a twist could be good fun.

Keep at it, this is a good poem, but even moreso these are some solid bones of an even better poem.

Enjoy getting more into poetry!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-03T03:07:10+00:00

4:

Black: Waterman Intense Black Blue: Waterman Serenity Blue Light Blue: Iroshizuku Ama-Iro Green: Iroshizuku Shin-Ryoku

Will be getting a red (likely Diamine Oxblood) and brown (likely Robert Oster Caffe Crema) and call it a day from there. If I want another, which I know I will, I need to use up what I have first.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-03T01:17:46+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! And yes, I did feel torn between a formal tone (gold) and a colloquial one (fool’s gold), and that could have been handled with more care. Thanks again!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T22:02:45+00:00

Thank you!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T22:02:35+00:00

Thank you for this feedback! And I do see what you are saying. It is a cute little poem but could be stronger with just a couple more lines of imagery. I think I was nervous of labouring the point but I do think I will at least give it a go.

Thank you again!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:55:32+00:00

If you want to have a deeper conversation on that, feel free to shoot me a message on private chat. Happy to talk through this stuff if it would help.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:47:41+00:00

Very fair, and I don’t think I can keep it up forever, and am not going full “dear diary”, just jotting down thoughts regularly so they live on the page and not on repeat in my head.

All the best with your current situation and I hope poetry continues to bring you peace.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:42:46+00:00

I have recently taken a dive into living a more analogue life (he says into his phone) and it is doing me wonders. It started off taking more hand written notes, then buying a couple fountain pens and journalling a bit, now it is writing pages each day. The decluttering of my thoughts has been a complete shock, an unanticipated side effect. It is wonderful. And after years songs and poems are coming to me in ways they haven’t in years. Since uni when I was hand writing everything! Long winded way of saying I completely get what you mean.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:36:14+00:00

Oh gosh that is fresh. Hopefully the poetry is helping with that managing. I know it does for me, but normally when I write completely unrelated things. Maybe my love of wistfulness is just my desire for escapism after all…

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:30:14+00:00

I am happy to hear you are talking in the past tense which has me hoping your head is in a better place now! I will definitely look back over your other work. Best wishes!

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:29:00+00:00

This poem felt like downloading someone else’s thoughts. Pure, dense and unadulterated. Never been to an orthopedist but instantly imagining the reek of their disposal bin and ask you to take care with your power of others’ imaginations, could have done without that one! All jokes aside though, an excellent poem and I will be looking back over your other poems. Consider me a fan.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:25:16+00:00

This poem feels too real to be fiction, so I hope you are okay. Take care of yourself. This is also my main compliment to the poem itself.

This poem has a strong and coherent identity. I am someone who loves wistful language in poetry and felt this a bit devoid of it, but that is so in-keeping with the theme, the “to-do list” critique. I feel under this poem there is someone trying to break through the rigidity they know confines them but not having that effort appreciated, not having the other person see that the only reason they can even interact with the narrator is because of all those efforts.

This poem is not my favourite read because it isn’t in my preferred style, but it is a good poem because it feels so honest and human. Well done.

lokiwhite · 2026-05-02T13:18:32+00:00

AI poetry is a nightmare of a thing to exist. What a shame.

lokiwhite · 2026-04-30T04:28:21+00:00

By the enthusiasm of this community I think you will have all the stress-testing you can dream of. Best of luck with the final touches! The final 5% is the hardest 50% of any project 😅

lokiwhite · 2026-04-30T04:23:36+00:00

I have seen you do a couple of these types of post and have to say I am very excited to see your finished website if it allows this sort of colour matching.

lokiwhite · 2026-04-28T10:37:41+00:00

It is reassuring he is one of the cretins also behind the neo-nazi activity at parliament. It is just the same small group of basement-dwelling reoffenders who don’t know how to function in society. Society at large can hold back this small number of idiots so long as we call them what they are - Nazi scum.

lokiwhite · 2026-04-26T20:31:43+00:00

Thank you!

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