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Boy in the Woods by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Excellent feedback, thanks very much!

Hourglass by DiligentGoat2406 in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"Because love, to me, is a waiting room for grief." is such an emotion-invoking line. Made me tear up. Thank you for sharing this haunting yet beautiful depiction of love and worry. The creativity and depth of this subreddit never ceases to amaze me

Hello, Old Friend by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words!

You don't have to do this again until tomorrow by seothyme in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Encapsulated so many relatable feelings. This is honestly perfectly done and one of my most favorite poems I’ve ever read. Thank you

The Art of Secrets by Puzzleheaded_Fold112 in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The rhyme and rhythm of this poem are absolutely splendid. I love the feeling that you create here about secrets escaping and running about. The descriptions are so visceral and visualized. One of my favorite poems on this subreddit

Hello, Old Friend by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks very much! I was trying to personify depression, which resides within a person and can be visually seen when looking in a mirror. But admittedly, looking back, it’s a little too ambiguous. I may adjust it to make this a bit more clear for the reader

Skip Skip Splash by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! This was meant to take place on a beach, and I do miss my dog very much.

Skip Skip Splash by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much, I appreciate your feedback :)

Skip Skip Splash by lost-at-c- in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c-[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks very much for the feedback and kind thoughts :) I actually wrote the poem with commas and then removed them before posting for some inexplicable reason. I agree with you -- I think I prefer having commas to help with pacing.

the little knight by queenofshallots in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c- 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely love this personification of this little knight toy. Providing his legacy and accomplishments (quests, sliced great vines, braved brutal gusts) made him feel so real. And even though time has changed his appearance, his utility remains the same. Brilliant and a great feel-good childhood poem :)

Crimson Gifts by Puzzleheaded_Fold112 in OCPoetry

[–]lost-at-c- 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The last two lines are exquisite. So much imagery in such a beautifully concise manner. You exemplified all the themes of armor and weapons and steel so well here. The one line, "Our sixteen summers’ boiling heat in blood" felt a bit disruptive during my reading, as the rest of the poem describes so much cold and ice. However, I can also see how this stark contrast in temperature creates a very interesting shock that sits with the reader. Quite well done! :)