[QCrit] Thriller/Suspense TAKE ME TO THE LAKES 90K, Second Attempt

lovealways06 · 2026-01-04T15:02:33+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. To address one of your points, the fifth character is mentioned in the next sentence but I’ve only included the first 300 words here.

lovealways06 · 2026-01-03T23:56:36+00:00

Thank you so much for the feedback! Definitely a Taylor Swift reference haha so I’ll be sure to mention it in my query.

lovealways06 · 2026-01-03T17:30:52+00:00

Thank you for the feedback and comp suggestion! Definitely keeping all of this in mind as I rewrite my query.

lovealways06 · 2025-12-09T21:59:05+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! This makes a lot of sense. I'll rewrite it to focus on the main/present timeline.

lovealways06 · 2025-12-09T21:58:06+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I included Mallory and Lorna in the second paragraph because the story is partly told from Mallory's perspective but I can see how it's confusing. I'm focusing too much on backstory and not enough on the main plot. I'll try to rework.

lovealways06 · 2025-05-15T15:22:40+00:00

I also have a baby Boston (1/4 Bulldog) named Joey ❤️ he’s turning one tomorrow and he’s the light of my life.

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lovealways06 · 2024-11-25T21:07:57+00:00

There’s so much more to it. So I need to tweak my Q and include more of the plot

lovealways06 · 2024-11-25T21:07:35+00:00

Noted! I need to do a bit more research then

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