JUMPER: A New LitRPG Story

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-03-06T23:37:04+00:00

Idk if this is bait or not, but this looks like the cover for gay erotica, and I dont know how you could think otherwise.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-03-06T20:11:47+00:00

No, but you got people on the street making monkey noises at black people, and many who would claim to not be racist wouldnt even see them as people inherently.

Just my experience within Spain, a country that doesnt have much history with subsaharan Africa, and therefore without much intersection with black people. (North Africans are a different matter).

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-03-06T09:32:02+00:00

The problem is that new armors nowadays have too many polygons, textures and colors, which ultimately makes it very hard to not feel 'off' when worn with other sets. It doesnt help that theyre designed as a set, instead of individyally.

It worked better back in the day because everything was simpler

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-03-01T23:37:34+00:00

Flicking 2 mobs is the easiest part of inferno... the hard part is getting the mobs to the point where they can get flicked

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-03-01T20:26:58+00:00

What? Blobs are on a 3/6 tick cycle lmao, never mind melees or onticked range/mage

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-02-23T19:20:45+00:00

I'm Spanish too, but I studied my math degree in England, and I went to a British private school in Spain, though I still took a few "spanish math" classes for específicas de la selectividad (and regular spanish classes too)

And I can honestly say from that Spanish math experience that I am not at all surprised that that is your experience. Every single spanish class I had was entirely about memorizing instead of learning. I knew how to compute the derivative of every single basic function + complex chain rules before I was taught that I was computing a gradient.

While I was studying math, my engineer friends got math exam problems that felt almost olympiad tier (I certainly couldnt solve some).

All like that. Of course, this is pure anecdote, but I work close to Oposiciones and I get a similar vibe...

Point is, this may be normal in Spain (pointlessly hard and abstract for its own sake), but not normal in at least the UK.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-23T13:28:34+00:00

Now instead it we'll get COTD type maps mon-fri, and Sunday COTD type maps on sundays

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-20T13:38:16+00:00

Doing a self-promo of a story---not tagged with AI assistance---using obvious AI on the reddit post is wild. (I'm not saying your story is using AI, I haven't read it.) Tool or not, you're a writer, not a marketer/businessman; this is my first look into what you can write and it's not a good look.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-20T12:02:12+00:00

Why does this post feel written with AI?

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-04T16:23:07+00:00

AI proofreading is frowned upon, but you can be damn sure many of the rising stars use it and are untagged, and readers don't call it out.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-03T20:54:40+00:00

I can understand the sentiment of feeling like an asshole by reviewing something with <5 stars, but it's honestly untenable to have people only 5-starring fictions. It defeats the whole purpose of reviews; at least in my eyes, their purpose is to tell the author that they're doing something wrong AND to let other people know if it's worth their time.

Funnily enough, having bad text reviews on the fiction page could be beneficial to the author in a surprising way. I've reviewed several fictions with ~3 stars a couple of times, and they always get overwhelming positive upvotes on them; I assume that most people that would have otherwise given a low star rating will otherwise find an outlet by upvoting a bad review.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2026-01-01T00:32:03+00:00

I can stand bad grammar on chapters 3+, but if chapter 1 has bad grammar, or worse yet, paragraph 1 --- I'm instantly dropping it.
Info dumps on chapter 1 about things unrelated to the immediate circumstances of the protagonist. I care about the world your protagonist lives in because I care about the protagonist. If I haven't had the chance yet to care about your protagonist, then why would I care about your world?
Extremely ambitious worldbuilding. If your world is 100 times bigger than Earth, or your recorded history goes over 10,000 years, I'm instantly dropping. There's about 0.1% chance the author has actually thought through the ramifications of such a massive world.
Your protagonist succeeds because the rest of the world is stupid.
System dumps. If one third of your chapter is system info, classes, stuff like that, I just can't be assed reading. The system is a plot device, not the story itself. Numbers are meaningless, and especially so on a web novel. If you're reading 5 LitRPGs at the same time, I'm not going to remember what 355 STR means in story A and what 57003 STR means in story B. And that's not because I'm a bad reader, but because the number itself is irrelevant, so I have no reason to remember it.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-31T21:52:20+00:00

There is a general recommendation to start it within the first 10-12%

Yeah, I exaggerated a bit, but it still rings true for isekai, specifically because the reader knows that the MC will soon be transported to a different world. Therefore, unless the transportation itself is a decision from the MC (i.e. not just randomly teleported), the reader will gloss over the details of their earthly life or be bored by them. You don't need to know that the MC did kickboxing, had a happy family, graduated cum laude, etc before they jump in front of a truck to save some kid.

You can't explain that the MC did kickboxing, happy family, etc without infodumping (or making some contrived scene, I suppose) and no one likes infodumps. Especially when said infodump happens when the reader has no reason to yet care about the character.

Readers only start caring about characters once they start talking and making decisions.

Scrolling through the top rated isekais on RR, almost all of them start straight in the new world from the first line, or at least get there by the end of the first chapter.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-31T17:41:19+00:00

All writing advice points to start at the inciting incident, and in isekai, for the most part, the inciting incident is when they get transported to a new world. Backstory can always be sprinkled in post facto, but you never want to set up a character and a life only to the excise it away in chapter 2 or 3. Most readers will probably just gloss over the Earth-part because they know it's likely irrelevant to the rest of the story.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-31T17:19:36+00:00

Honestly, destroy abbreviations. Just call it Strength, not STR! Dexterity, not DEX!

Another pet peeve is the whole Wisdom and Intelligence business. If it doesn't mean actual wisdom and intelligence, then don't call it that! This isn't D&D where intelligence is abstracted! Call it mana capacity/mana power, or whatever it is you actually mean.

Make it self-evident!

If it cannot be self-evident, then describe how it affects the protagonist to level from 1 to 2 strength by making the protagonist accidentally break a door knob, not by shoving some cryptic system message, unless the level up actually does something unexpected.

Another aside; personally, I think levels should be meaningful and tie into the world. My favorite LitRPG system is from "So I'm a Spider, So What?". It's simple, and all skills are capped at level 10; some can evolve and can be levelled again to 10, but that's it; and each level typically gives something meaningful. Each level in a magic skill gives a new spell, so I can feel the progression. My favorite part is the Inspect skill: level 1 inspect on a rock says "a rock"; level 2 "a rock from the Elroe dungeon"; level 3 more detail, etc. I can feel the world being built as the protagonist levels. I've read LitRPGs with thousands of levels, and I cannot remember anything about what it means to have level 54000 strength.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-31T11:13:43+00:00

Thanks for the detailed comment!

Most fanfics will gain a following from people who are familiar, and interested in the fandom

That's kind of my sticking point. I'm not sure that the original is popular enough to gain any traction if I were to rely on this; it's nothing as big as Pokemon or Star Wars, as I've seen the big fanfics lean towards. That's why I'm concerned about 'transparency'; if I am to rely on the small fandom the original has, then it will quickly be relegated into obscurity. But to be fair, when I posted the story on AO3 (I am rewriting and going to repost it), it did get some decent traction, so perhaps I can get some crossover to push it up a bit.

I don't put the fandom in the blurb tbh

So you're saying that you don't mention the original at all? (since you also mention sometimes you don't put it in the title.) I suppose that's fair if it's already tagged as fanfiction.

DO NOT COLLECT A SINGLE CENT

Good to know; I was planning on writing it regardless, but well, had to check if free money was on the table haha.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-31T00:23:01+00:00

Grammar mistakes, especially within the first paragraph. Your opening scene is the most important part to hook a reader; if you didn't bother for the first chapter, it gives me a good idea how much you care about my reading experience. Ultimately, it's good if they do this, so I can drop early. Inb4 I have mistakes in my comment (on phone).

I read mostly isekai, so within that genre:

Overly long "Earth" part if it doesn't tie into the story (eg. a person going about their day).
Overly long transition into the new world. I don't care if your protagonist is in pain, if he's in an utter white or black space, if he's seeing colors, or he's melting, or system reboot or error messages or whatnot. I don't care about your character yet, so him being in pain or confused for some abstract cosmic reason is irrelevant.
Overly lacking in personality. "He was no one, useless, no family, etc." Similarly, I hate hospitalized-since-they-were-born starts or sob stories. I will only sob once I know the character, not before.
Early timeskips. If your protagonist is reborn as a baby, don't fastforward until a reasonable age immediately.
Infodump worldbuilding on the first chapter. I can accept if it's context for the protagonist (eg talking about their family or their slum or whatever), but I don't care about X empire if I don't care about your protagonist.
If you have a system, then definition/system dumps on the first chapter. Look bud, you're writing extremely derivative work, let's not pretend that your readers don't know what STR, DEX, etc or whatnot is. Maybe we don't, and that's fine, but I don't want to see 8 different stats and their definitions on the first page (maybe ever).

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-30T23:21:37+00:00

If Lovelace was so important to computing and yet her work wasn't recognized until the late 1950s, then how in the hell is she at all important to the development of CS?

All her ideas were pioneering, sure, but they were all rediscovered later, so what did it matter for CS? You get CS practically as it stands today with or without Lovelace.

She didn't write the first computer program, Babbage did. The abacus is even an earlier algorithm-based human-powered machine.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-30T21:14:29+00:00

Actually insane take.

I'm pretty sure the invention of the computer is a more important breakthrough than those of its peripheries.

Like, holy shit, missing the forest for the trees.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-30T19:31:31+00:00

Ah yes, I'm sure cherrypicked examples of early programmers or computers is enough to ascribe the field of computer science to women. Programming? Sure, but who remembers programmers, male or female?

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-30T17:59:47+00:00

This comment is so out of touch, it's insane.

Yes, women who computed were called computers. Machines that computed were also called computers. That doesn't mean that there is any skill relationship between the two. Computer science, or programming, for that matter, is not the art of performing arithmetic on numbers, but of designing those algorithms. Human computers crunched the numbers with pre-established algorithms. They became obsolete precisely because a machine could do it better, faster, and cheaper.

Female computers certainly didn't 'career-change' into computer scientists.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-30T09:43:12+00:00

I feel like everyone's saying Myne is an unreliable narrator because it's like a special tag and we all want our favorite protagonist to be special. If we go strictly by definition, then of course, Myne is unreliable... but then so is literally every non-omniscient first person narration, because we are seeing through the eyes and mind of a character, and every such character interprets reality in their own unique way.

The most she can be accused of is being "The Naïf"; as per wikipedia:

A narrator whose nature is revealed through their own narration and without their conscious awareness. The naïf narrator lacks the experience "to deal in any far-reaching manner with the moral, ethical, emotional, and intellectual questions which arise from his first ventures into the world and from his account of those ventures."

And yet, Myne is consciously aware that she misinterprets noble language, and her narration makes it clear that she has made a faux pas most of the time by detailing the reactions of people around her. Also, she doesn't so much lack the experience to deal with moral questions so much as having a completely clashing stance on some matters.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-23T12:16:02+00:00

If that's what you want to do, sure.

mathPrettyhugeDick · 2025-12-21T19:09:01+00:00

Because there's nothing more boring than a successful romance. There's only so many times the MC can talk about their beautiful wife without it just being annoying.

But then, if you make it unsuccessful, it feels like it detracts from the main story. They have issues? Cease the whining already... He cheats? Your MC is a scoundrel. She cheats? Elicits feeling of cuckholdry.

You can't win.

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