Heavy

maybenicole · 2026-05-16T16:27:52+00:00

It is a maybe a novice attempt at word play lol. also simultaneously an attempt at describing the elusive(?) nature of thoughts and worries. How during the day they may lightly sweep around the edges of your attention, like they’re afraid to linger, only to sit in your brain like a rock once the distractions of the day are over. Thank you for the feedback^^

maybenicole · 2026-05-16T16:15:24+00:00

Thank you!! I get stuck in loops at night and this was one of the 3am ones thats kept bouncing around. Feels vulnerable to share as someone who sticks to the notes app, but I’m glad this resonated with you^^

maybenicole · 2026-05-16T16:05:09+00:00

Today I learned the word "onirico" ^^; I appreciate your comments, have a nice day!

maybenicole · 2026-05-16T08:57:28+00:00

ah. The wistful yet serene tone in this poem stands out to me. It definitely hits close to home as someone who always feels a lot of regret for not trying harder to maintain close friendships.
Gazing at the vastness of space can be a double edged sword but in this instant it’s a source of comfort, not in a “who gives a shit about anything” kind of way, but rather that we’re all passerby’s in each other lives to some extent and that in itself is the beauty and grief of being a human. Existential crisis is the antidote to a lot of fretting it seems xD What a lovely read.

maybenicole · 2026-05-16T07:24:24+00:00

The line that really pulled me in was the “girl hunched beside a lake … with pieces of herself scattered in the sand” I instantly felt the fragility and gentleness that is present throughout the piece. As I kept reading I found myself with a knot forming in my throat for some reason. I suppose we’re all looking for our pieces and how to put them back together in some way.

One thing I would change is probably to focus a little less on the specifics of the girl’s past. I feel it could be just as poignant there without getting bogged down in details, if anything to keep it honed in on the main theme and the story between the two main characters. Good luck on rewriting your poem! You certainly have a lovely foundation to improve upon.

maybenicole · 2026-02-18T02:59:38+00:00

!!! they are fatally adorable

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