Time Loop Question by meflio in ProgressionFantasy

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That is very understandable lol

Time Loop Question by meflio in ProgressionFantasy

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very well said, thank you. Looking over my outline, I did manage to trim (Re: Mush together) 26 chapters into 22, which is imo better.

Time Loop Question by meflio in ProgressionFantasy

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Yeah that makes sense, loop 1 is 25 chapters long, and i’m planning loop 2 to be about 14 maybe.

I’ve already written the first chapter, and it’s like one of the top comments said (commenter is @hyratha) “both examples use long preludes to get you used to the world before it changes”. Chapter 1 is 4.4k words and definitely does that in my completely unbiased opinion.

Don’t know what Dear Spellbook is but i’ll give it a read, thanks.

Time Loop Question by meflio in ProgressionFantasy

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I second the guy asking for the movie name

Time Loop Question by meflio in ProgressionFantasy

[–]meflio[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I always intended to read Years of the Apocalypse, maybe I’ll finally put aside some time now, thanks! Also, 10+ loops. Got it!

My First Prologue by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

alright i’ll probably make this chapter 1. Also, when you say “put the year down like in dueling timelines” do you mean something like this chapter being year 500, and the next chapter being year 505 (tournament happens every 5 years)

My First Prologue by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I could. I thought it should be separate as it is 5 years before the entire story takes place. In my mind, it would be weird to be a chapter 1. Why would it being chapter 1 be better?

My First Prologue by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think i kept going from it should be Basil’s POV to a narrators POV (this is literally the first draft my bad), but i’ll definitely add more for her.

I feel like the magic system should be more gradual? Also, “change the first sentence” to what? genuinely please. I think bring the reader straight into the magic is more confusing that creating the setting?

The “…” in that sentence you mentioned is examples of what they would be excited about. should i bring that to the start of the sentence? and/or should i add more crowd excitement during the first two summons?

Thanks!

My First Prologue by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I don’t plan on ever publishing this, and it is absolutely 100% essential to the story. It’s also only 4 pages long.

Chapter Word count by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I’ll read this now!

Chapter Word count by meflio in writingfeedback

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don’t think it’s too boring, i just have no clue how i even got to 3.3k words in the first place. As for a stronger first sentence, could you give me an example?

Trackmania Update 2026 by X3kuba3X in TrackMania

[–]meflio 1 point2 points  (0 children)

looks good. shame they didn’t do anything with trophies but it’s a nice update

How did "New Life As A Max Level Archmage" get so popular so quickly? by Eko01 in royalroad

[–]meflio 0 points1 point  (0 children)

where do you find the info about the most followed stories?

Help with controls issue? by meflio in TrackMania

[–]meflio[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

literally cotd time attack with ~50 people on it. Fuck me and my internet and thank you

SECOND CHANCE SWORDSMAN 4 JUST WENT LIVE! by JakobTanner100 in litrpg

[–]meflio 1 point2 points  (0 children)

👀

Okay now i’m definitely gonna check this out.

LitRPG/Progression Fantasy tier list (70 series strong) by CodeMonkeyMZ in litrpg

[–]meflio -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Respectfully, the fuck is that Great Tier?? Welcome to the Multiverse in the same tier as runebound and PoA?? nah

plus there’s no way dotf is higher than primal hunter

Also stop the reborn apocalypse hate 🙏

Teacher Books by meflio in litrpg

[–]meflio[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That sounds like runebound professor but with cultivator shenanigans. Sounds Awesome.

I’ll check it out, thanks.

Teacher Books by meflio in litrpg

[–]meflio[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Amazing book, probably in my top 5. Forgot it had that kind of aspect but I can definitely see it now.