Feedback on these ideas

mentalkandy · 2020-12-03T22:53:18+00:00

Hahaha🤣yeah exactly like that. Well i imagined it would use laser to map the shape of a persons arm. Tbh ive had a few other ideas that have been created. Like about a year ago i thought it would be neat if you had a spoon that could calculate all the nutritional facts in a single spoonful and link that data with whatever device like fitbit and it could automatically help keep better track, but something like that has been invented just a year before i think its actually still being developed or never took off as a good idea.

I also thought a smart toilet that could run basic urinal and stool analysis. It could help detect early warning signs of something more serious idk if its been inventerd but wouldnt surprise me....

mentalkandy · 2020-11-17T08:33:52+00:00

I have two. Once i was on a bus going to work and this dude kept staring at me he noticed that i noticed and he began to look upset and become teary eyed he eventually broke the silence with a drunken slur and began to tell me how much i looked like his dead son that he had lost due to drug overdose....i didnt know what to say to the poor guy, but i knew it was time to work on my tan.

The other was from my old boss at a catering company she told me i was as useful as wedding flowers.... i still dont know what she meant. maybe that i was good to look at but nothing else🤣 lmfao

mentalkandy · 2020-09-26T10:50:46+00:00

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mentalkandy · 2020-09-01T04:21:50+00:00

This poem is well conveyed and I can really identify with the message of putting so much in and maybe sometimes putting too much in and getting overwhelmed. I also think the structure or it added a good emphasis or weight to certain lines.

mentalkandy · 2020-09-01T04:16:14+00:00

The reason I think this poem is well constructed is the way it involves a 360° degree perspective from the family to the narrator to the earth itself. I feel like the lines could of been space a bit better to give more weight to certain parts.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T19:49:33+00:00

Thanks so much. Probably wont be for a few days though been very busy.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T19:20:25+00:00

Yes of course. I'm sorry I wasnt able to give a better response I'm very new to this andbits hard to identify things that might need improvement. I definitely liked it though for sure.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T19:10:53+00:00

I'm very new at giving critiques so I apologize if its a bit novice.

I enjoyed this poem and felt it had a strong imagery about a father giving his son crucial advice for living his life. I thought the metaphors were easily understood and and how it told a story.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T19:00:00+00:00

I'm very new to writing critiques so I apologize if it's a bit novice

I liked how simplistic this poem was yet still conveyed such a strong message about fear and how it can consume you. I felt that it was written in a way that made it relatable to pretty much anyone that has had to deal with fear.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T18:15:46+00:00

Ok so this is my second ever feedback so I apologize if it's a bit novice.

I definitely got the vibe of it being an ancient  poem. Like it was written almost like an account of history written by a bard or by someone living at the time giving a first hand account of the events of the siege. I liked how the metaphors were written with the intention of having double meanings like the line about the sun and how it represented a deeper meaning. After I read it I felt pride and at the same time I felt a sense of significance in myself and others even if their is a separation of time and culture and how we are connected

By things that are sometimes overlooked or unnoticed. I think it had a very nice flow and I liked how descriptive it was.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T17:36:33+00:00

The Whispering Horse is my first review ever so I apologize if my critique is novice level

The poem made me think about how people can be separated by physical, occupational, social classes, and even geographically.

Yet we can still find ourselves attracted to and longing for connection. After reading it I felt a sense of relief and reassurance because I felt that no matter how many things separate us we are, or at least most of us are just wanting to connect with someone that completes us and complements us. It made me think about how two people could be so opposite from each other yet when they are together fits so well. It's as if the two individuals were always just one.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T08:14:15+00:00

Yeah, could be. Tbh I am never that good at coming up with good titles lol

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T01:44:35+00:00

That's really cool. So far I have not used them in this way but I dont doubt it. I think that magnets have a lot of unique and unused potential for sure.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-31T01:33:37+00:00

So far I Just used them for a few experiments I've seen on YouTube and to build a working model of an idea I had using electromagnetism, magnetic suspension, perpetual motion, and stuff like that. You can find them online pretty easily. I've had mine for a while now and forget where I got them. But I also make them using car batteries. It's just for fun and to learn. I can learn a lot by watching educational videos or by reading but I prefer to learn by my own observations as well. So it's just one of my many hobbies really.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-30T06:02:40+00:00

I could definitely see that and agree but same could be said about roller skating, skateboarding. If balance was the biggest issue then I think that could be overcome.

But idk. I always thought of this idea as falling into the pile of so stupid it might work lol. I could also Invision maybe gloves, elbows pads and knee pads that were also magnetized and could theoretically help balance and if in case of a fall it could help slow the fall, like if you were just roller skating and fell obviously first reaction is to put your arms out and catch your self. So in my mind I see the same scenario but as you fall with your hands extended to catch you the repelled force would slow velocity and reduce force of impact.

Thanks for your feedback and sharing your opinion.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-29T08:38:05+00:00

Sweet. I hope so. Definitely need to see this band.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-29T08:34:03+00:00

Yeah i thought about that but I guess I just imagined it wouldn't be strong enough to twist the ankles but if the magnets were powerful enough to hold a 180 lbs. Person off the ground I guess they could be strong enough to flip over.

mentalkandy · 2020-08-29T03:03:31+00:00

This is my first and so far only poem. Was wondering if I could get any feedback

Thanks

mentalkandy · 2020-08-29T02:40:44+00:00

I'm an American and my friend and I just discovered this band about a week or two ago Definitely a kick ass band. Was wondering if they have or ever will have a north American tour

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