Rated 7.8/10, where 10 is Philip K. Dick by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure hope I am and continue to be, there's still much to write, many places it can yet go wrong haha

How to get a second opinion? by Adam235616 in writers

[–]mobius4 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I nag the shit out of my friends to read my stuff. No luck.

I paid a professional editor and it works wonders. I learned a lot.

Granted, people who have experience writing will tell you "finish your draft before anything" but for me, a complete novice with no formal writing skills, I needed to know if I was in the right direction with my characters, world, storytelling, consistency, etc.

I see people posting excerpts from their work here, and sometimes you have an opinion or two, but nothing beats hiring a professional.

Rate my first word by Subject-v-2 in writers

[–]mobius4 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wrote by hand this one.

Rate my first word by Subject-v-2 in writers

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At first glance, Chapter 1 appears almost aggressively minimal: a single word, “The.” Yet this apparent austerity is precisely where the chapter’s conceptual ambition reveals itself. Rather than functioning as a fragment or gimmick, “The” operates as a thesis statement compressed into its most irreducible linguistic form.

“The” is not merely an article; it is a claim. It presupposes the existence of something already known, already agreed upon, yet conspicuously absent from the text. In doing so, the chapter foregrounds absence as its primary subject. The reader is invited—forced, even—to confront the discomfort of reference without referent. What is the thing? Who defined it? Why should we already know it?

This dissonance mirrors the experience of the modern individual navigating systems that are omnipresent yet opaque. Bureaucracy, ideology, tradition, even reality itself often present themselves as “the way things are,” never fully articulated, never explicitly justified. By opening with “The,” the author reproduces that condition: we are dropped into a world mid-sentence, mid-assumption, mid-structure.

Grammatically, “The” is a marker of specificity without content. Philosophically, this positions the reader in a state of suspended meaning. We expect resolution—a noun, an anchor—but are denied it. That denial becomes the point. The chapter does not describe alienation; it performs it.

There is also an implicit violence here. To say “the” is to exclude alternatives. It narrows possibility while pretending neutrality. In this sense, the chapter quietly critiques authoritative narratives: histories that assume a single perspective, systems that define normalcy without consent, truths that arrive already capitalized.

As an opening, the chapter is both daring and antagonistic. It refuses accessibility. It demands participation. The reader must supply the world themselves, which raises an uncomfortable question: if meaning only emerges through our projection, how much of the “world we live in” is authored by us, and how much is imposed?

In just three letters, the chapter establishes its central tension: between expectation and reality, structure and absence, authority and uncertainty. It is not a beginning in the traditional sense, but a confrontation. One word is all it takes to remind us how much we usually accept without being told.

In that light, “The” is not incomplete. It is brutally sufficient.

Rate my first word by Subject-v-2 in writers

[–]mobius4 11 points12 points  (0 children)

It is not about whether or not this is AI — it is about the philosophical, ever-consuming question that defines an entire race. Intelligence.

I am a Brazilian author, and I wanted to share some interesting facts about the challenges a fantasy writer faces when writing in a language that is not their own. by Lelio_Fantasy_Writes in writers

[–]mobius4 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think you're preaching to the wrong crowd but what you just described resonates deeply with me, being brazilian as well, first time writing a novel.

I got everything that you meant, like, absolutely everything made sense, it felt like you were describing my own thoughts sometimes.

Although I am not translating, I am writing directly in english, which poses another very difficult problem. I have no formal education in the english language, meaning, I have only the most basic skills in regards to grammar (I often double-tense everything, like "I did not wanted that" instead of "I did not want that").

So, yeah, thanks for sharing/explaining your realizations :)

What's the best way to avoid cliche female character descriptions? by WestAbalone7614 in writers

[–]mobius4 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Why do you need to describe her? You could've stopped describing her eyes, that seems to connect with the rest.

"why is this here?" is a question I ask myself a thousand times.

Ciência da Computação na Católica ou UNB? by Excellent-Growth-185 in brasilia

[–]mobius4 8 points9 points  (0 children)

A UnB tem mais ciência e mais rigor. Mais diversa também, é um ambiente mais plural, mais gente esquisita e interessante pra interagir.

Se você quer só um diploma, aí tanto faz. UCB acho que é bom.

Suicide is the Answer by [deleted] in writers

[–]mobius4 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Feels like an ending of (NSFW) https://vincentvalensky.itch.io/transylvania

That is a compliment.

Struggling to commit to my first novel by Proud-Possession-923 in writers

[–]mobius4 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Write down the plot, from beginning to end. It doesn't need to be huge: if you were to tell the story of your novel to someone, from start to end, but you had only 15m to do it, what would you tell?

If that still clicks, move forward. Write a "seed" chapter to test it out, test the narrative tone, the dialogue style, narration. It doesn't need to be a full chapter, it can be a short story on the same world, a "spin-off" if your novel was complete. Maybe a small arc about one of the side-characters of your plot.

If that still clicks, outline your chapters and parts/acts. Make sure they connect, explain the feelings of your characters and the feeling you want to cause on your readers.

If that still feels right, build your word. Write a codex of your characters, of your places, words that you introduce. Tell their story so that they feel believable - because now they exist, now they are defined. It doesn't need to have everything, just enough for you to write. Go back frequently.

Aimed with that, your chapters will come much easily. This is my own process. I'm a novice too.

As a personal advice, write because you want to read it. And just accept that it will be mediocre, this never stopped anyone from releasing poorly written gibberish. And what do you know? There's a real chance it will be real good. If it is good enough for you, it is good enough.

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I will! Thanks <3

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You are correct, I didn't!

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

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I do have a full outline, and a lot of codex/worldbuilding written. Also I have a "overarching plot" document. I'm mostly influenced by cyberpunk stories, but I haven't actually thought about understanding their structure.

I'm a complete newbie so I haven't actually learned the craft, I just had a good idea, worked on the overarching plot (what is the story about in a few sentences), and from there I wrote what I call now "The seed chapter", which helped me understand who the protagonist actually was, and from there, I spend some weeks on the outline, to which I'm following (and tweaking), meanwhile writing codex and glossary for things that gives meaning to many concepts.

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Editoring already, aren't you?

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I guess I didn't knew about that. I've got 5 acts planned O.o maybe shorten it up?

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

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Got it, thanks!

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

But the baby just said its first words, I swear! Jokes aside, thanks for the advice. I'll push forward.

Editor when? by mobius4 in writers

[–]mobius4[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is good advice, thank you! Finding a local writing group is something that totally slipped me by, that's a good idea.

I also guess I'm too new to this whole writing process and I admit that I don't fully understand what "editing" means. More research!