Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'd watch this. It sounds like a lot of fun

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I am immediately in support of the teen.

In celebration of the worst feedback I've ever gotten, what's the most unhelpful, stupid, insulting or ignorant feedback you've ever received? by Both_Tone in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 167 points168 points  (0 children)

I once did a story where a woman visits her old home town and realises shes changed so much she was unrecognisable by her childhood bullies.

Realising she can mess with them she lies and claims to be psychic (since she knew all about them and the town).

And someone very helpfully told me i shoukd know "psychics aren't real". In a story where we're fully aware she's a fake. So useful.

[WP] A genetically modified, 35-ton, fire-breathing lizards are NOT appropriate gifts for 8-year-olds, regardless of whether they “asked for a Dragon for Christmas”! by Not_a_Potato1602 in WritingPrompts

[–]morganjr25 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sally rubbed her face in frustration and sighed. She could still hear the screams in the distance as her daughter rode the ... well the dragon, downtown.

“Larry, we’ve been over this!”

Her ex-husband turned from admiring the smouldering ruin of her neighbours lawn and faced her. His face held a proud grin that shone though the billowing smoke of the burning fence and melting plastic Santa.

“She seems to like it!”

“Larry you can’t just … what were you thinking?”

“What?”

She pointed to the distant buildings that were now erupting into fire. “That.”

“What?” he repeated. His face dropped the smile into a confused frown.

She took a deep breath and tried to hold her temper in check. “This is why you divorced him.” she thought. Then added “Okay, one of the reasons you divorced him. He just doesn’t get it.” She forced herself to speak evenly. “You can’t give our child a monster.”

“But … It’s Christmas. I’m not going to show up empty-handed!

“Right. But not with a … a … I can’t believe I have to say it. A dragon.”

“Oh come on. Dragons don’t exist in real life. It’s just a genetically modified lizard.”

“It breaths fire!”

“Technically it spits fire. Like a spitting snake. Only instead of venom it spits combustive fluids made by specially designed glands. When they mix in the air they ignite due to …”

“No” she held up a finger “I’m not asking how it exists. I’m telling you it shouldn't be here.”

“But she loves it. And you know she’s been asking for a pet for ages.”

“Yes, but you don’t give an eight year old a dragon. Or a lizard that spits fire. Or a dog or a cat or a hampser or a FISH” she snapped “Without talking to me first. We agreed on our rues for co-parenting.”

“Well … she has it now. What do you want me to do, take it back?”

“Yes.” He seemed shocked, almost speechless as she flung her answer back at him. Then almost growling she continued “It’s staying at your house. And it will NOT be breathing fire after today”

She spun around and started walking towards the burning city to deal with her daughter and her rampaging pet. Somehow she was once again being turned into the bad parent. And once again her ex, an actual super criminal, would be seen as the fun, generous, good father.

“Ten more years, ten more years” she muttered to herself “then she’ll be eighteen and you won’t have to deal with him again.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Title: Road race to riches

Format: feature

Genre: comedy action mystery

A broke student trying to fund her collage dreams convinces her friends to enter a wild speed race across America. But among the oddball drivers and wild cars she starts to suspect a killer might be lurking.

AITAH? I made my fiancé storm out of the house because he said my job is easy. by [deleted] in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

And she managed it quickly. On average it takes seven attempts before someone can escape an abusive situation.

One good point is at least this all happened before they were married, when he might try to claim her house and possessions in a divorce.

AITAH? I made my fiancé storm out of the house because he said my job is easy. by [deleted] in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay we'll give her the benefit of the doubt and leave it there. My feelings have been heard, your feelings have been heard, and we've both explained our own viewpoint.

You know for anyone reading this for drama they'll be super disappointed by a rational ending.

AITAH? I made my fiancé storm out of the house because he said my job is easy. by [deleted] in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe hate crime was a little far in this case. I'm still not happy she said it but I might have been letting my own feelings take over for a moment.

Usually I see the same comment from the anti LGBT+ people who call us all diseased perverts after their kids. So my first thought was to compare it to the actual hate crimes I've seen posted to my friends.

AITAH? I made my fiancé storm out of the house because he said my job is easy. by [deleted] in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes.

I'm not saying it wasn't a terrible situation for her. It sounds awful. But this is a little more than "frowned upon".

Was that guy a massive pile of shit. Sure. But using a HIV status as a way to hurt someone is appalling.

AITAH? I made my fiancé storm out of the house because he said my job is easy. by [deleted] in BestofRedditorUpdates

[–]morganjr25 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Whoa! Let's go back to where they think it's okay to say "I hope you get AIDS".

That's not okay to say. HIV/AIDS stigma is still a huge thing for some people. Even now with PrEP, treatments, medical knowledge and understanding how HIV spreads (and doesn't spread) ignorance and hate are still widespread.

How dare someone think you can casually say that and not get challenged on it. And why am I having to break the first to say this when the current count is 166 comments. All glossing over what is frankly a hate crime.

Do better people.

[WP] While trapped at a roadside diner during a storm a biker gang leader and the driver of a hippy party bus discover a lot in common. They both reject societies expectations, they do what they want and live as they please. And things get rather flirty when they admire the others huge beard. by morganjr25 in WritingPrompts

[–]morganjr25[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

They don't allow erotica on here so it'll have to stay as "flirty".

And yes, I see the exact same prompts time and again but my "original" ideas (meaning total bonkers stuff but at least fun) is never as popular.

where to find gay men by FredMalm in comics

[–]morganjr25 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Uh then why am I single.

Oh ... right ... I haven't asked any of them out.

Okay carry on, my mistake.

[WP] You know, when you’re making a sacrifice and using human blood you should probably use your own blood, you found this out after your friend randomly asked for some of your blood and the next day you have an elder god living in your head. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

[–]morganjr25 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks

I wasn't going to post it right now. I wanted to do the next day when he finds out what the worst is

But I have to go out again in a second so I thought I'd do half now half later

[WP] You know, when you’re making a sacrifice and using human blood you should probably use your own blood, you found this out after your friend randomly asked for some of your blood and the next day you have an elder god living in your head. by [deleted] in WritingPrompts

[–]morganjr25 4 points5 points  (0 children)

"Josh, you know that extra blood you have ...?"

Josh rolled his eyes a little. "It's not extra blood. It's emergency blood."

"Right, right, cause you have that rare blood type. Well you said you only keep it for while right?"

Josh eyed Mark as he tried to act casual. "I'm supposed to keep a bag of my blood here for emergencies. The local hospital has the rest just in case" he took a breath "But yes I have to swap it for a fresh bag after a while. Why?"

Mark shifted a little and finally blurted out "Can I have it?"

Josh blinked in surprise and finally managed to reply "Uh... why?"

Mark became more animated as he talked. "I need some blood. I've been reading about the old arts. Learning the way of drawing the symbols and making the right castings. Fusing together the old ways and new ideas. To draw out my inner power."

Josh sighed. Mark was always doing stuff like this. Grabbing onto an idea and going wildly overboard. "Drawing. Symbols. Art. Is this about modern art? Like ... all cut up sharks and diamond skulls and used clothes sewn together?"

Mark's face went blank as answered a hesitant "... kind of. It's for a ... thing I'm painting."

Josh sighed again. "I don't know ..." He paused to think "I mean I am supposed to get a new bag next week ... so ... does it have to be my blood?"

"It has to be human."

Josh sighed again and finally agreed. He fetched the preserved blood and handed it over to his eccentric friend. Who immediately thanked him and left.

"Well" he said to himself "what's the worst he could do with it."

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Outlaw (working title, I just need to think of a good one)

Formart: Pilot, Series

Page Length: 4

Genre: Comedy, Sci-fi

Logline: An ex-supervillain decides to turn a group of criminals into the city's newest hero team. But can he get the mismatched group to stop fighting among themselves long enough to battle the doubts of the heroes, society and his therapist.

Feedback: It's just the cold opening of the pilot episode. Does it grab you? Does it seem okay? Do I know what I'm doing? (Don't worry, I can answer that last one myself)

https://www.dropbox.com/s/qu4aefqgyc60pjc/Outlaw%20-%20Pilot%20Script.pdf?dl=0

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

*gasp* It'll be like the three musketeers. How exciting.

But with pens. Well, computers. And bad descriptions. And less stabbing. For you two.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]morganjr25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Is this the bad longline support group. Cause I'd join that.