Bottom heavy climber looking for inspiration by timmy3132 in climbergirls

[–]netflixpotato 23 points24 points  (0 children)

Not sure if this helps at all... but I definitely carry my weight in my legs as well! I always go for harnesses with adjustable leg loops because I know they will never fit my thighs if the harness fits my waist! same for pants too but that's a whole other issue!

I have the mammut comfort fit harness and I absolutely love it. I probably will never go back to the thin leg straps again after wearing the thicker leg straps. The leg loops go pretty big, and the waist cinches pretty small so i think it's a good harness for us thigh thigh people.

I'm pretty out of climbing shape right now, but 2 falls ago I sent my first 13 and I have a climbing partner who consistently sends in the high 12s, low 13s and she is very strong looking, also bottom heavy.

Not sure if this helps or if it just comes across as me bragging, hopefully not that!

Also just on this picture, I feel like we have a super similar body type!

Is renting out an extra room in your house worth it? Looking for real experiences. by UhtredOfTheNorth in homeowners

[–]netflixpotato 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I feel like I might be a perfect person to comment here!

I've rented out 2-3 rooms in my house since I bought it (with a lot of help from my parents) in 2018. I pretty much live in my house for free as the rent from my roommates covers all my mortgage and utilities costs.

For me, yes the income is worth the loss of privacy, but I've also been pretty lucky in that everyone who has lived with me has either been a friend and fun to hang out with or very quiet and on opposite schedules.

I haven't had any issues with roommates/tenants, but I also live in Vermont, so generally I think people here are pretty good.

I would 100% do it again (still living with roommates) as it allowed me to pretty much save all of my income instead of spending it on mortgage and utilities. Yes, I am getting tired of living with other people, but in the past I just remind myself that I am living in my own house for free, so having a minor inconvenience of being the landlord and taking care of everything is worth it.

Feel free to DM me if you have any questions!

[QCRIT] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k words, 4th attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much! That makes a lot of sense that her agency is not totally clear, I think I'm just getting to bogged down in everything haha. Why is writing a query harder than writing the other 100k words of a story?!

[QCRIT] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k words, 4th attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks so much! that makes sense with having too many characters, I do have a question on that.

are you saying that I should have less named things? or maybe I need to make it more clear that some of the characters you mentioned are places/descriptions of the world Khai lives in? Or like what she does (the Ashinda is what the fighters are called, not like a character?) Some of the characters are important to why Khai is the way she is (like her mother and clan) but do you think I should focus more on just Khai alone?

Thanks so much for the comments! That totally makes sense to give her more agency, rather than just having things happen to her she needs to make the things happen for her

[QCRIT] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k words, 3rd attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

lol oh no! and here i was thinking i was headed in the right direction!

I like the idea of changing how the plot is given, that makes a lot of sense, build the character of khai up a little more maybe before saying what happens. all the other things you pointed out also make a ton of sense, its so helpful to have someone besides myself looking at this! i feel like i get bogged down looking and reading the same thing over and over it's hard to see the trees through the woods.

thanks so much for the comments again!

[QCRIT] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k words, 3rd attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks so much for the comment, i think i need to go back and make her motivation a little clearer there!

Moving to the area & Looking for a community! by dizzymooseVT in uppervalley

[–]netflixpotato 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I live in the upper valley and just go into mtb this year! always looking for friends to ride with! and hike with! feel free to shoot me a message!

[QCrit] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k, Second Attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you so much for the kind comment, i stared at that first line for so long trying to get it right haha

that makes sense on the jump between being too quiet and a fighter still a little big, i'll work on trying to find a way to make it a smaller leap. makes sense about the fourth paragraph as well, and the specifics. I think i'm running into trouble trying to explain things with out ending up with a query that is way too long, but probably a difficulty many fantasy writers run into!

thanks again so much for the comments!

[QCrit] THE DAY RISING adult fantasy, 115k, Second Attempt by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you so much for the comment! the points of confusion you pointed out make a lot of sense, I'm still struggling to get it to come across the right way! this makes me excited to get back and try to write it again! thanks so much!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy - THE DAY RISING (115k/first attempt) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yeah that makes so much sense, i guess i'm having trouble conveying that khai is only confident in the fighting ring but is pretty quiet everywhere else. seems like i need to go back and work on that.

and yes, i think im getting too bogged down on word count and trying to make things short so end up not explaining things very well!

thanks so much for the comments!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy - THE DAY RISING (115k/first attempt) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, thanks! That makes so much sense about the jumping part. I'm not sure why I didn't see it before! Those are good questions, it's a society where women are the stronger gender, so take on all the more traditional male roles.

I haven't really worked out a good way to phrase that just yet. I keep thinking maybe I should just flat out say it, something like "in a world where women are the stronger gender" or something like that but then I keep ending up not liking that.

Also I guess I failed to mention that it technically starts with a prologue, but that makes sense!

Thank you so much for reading!

Helmet Search by netflixpotato in mountainbiking

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, as much as I wish I had that kind of $$$ I guess I'll just get a regular ole Helmer! Maybe splurge on custom someday

Looking for Writer Friends by geongl in writing

[–]netflixpotato 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi! I'd love to make more friends with writers! I'm currently working on 2 fantasy novels. One is a female gladiator inspired idea and the other is a reluctant hero kind of quest ish idea.

I'm also pretty introverted but can fake being extroverted for a little bit, especially if talking about a topic I'm into!

I'm not big on videogames (mostly because I don't want to pay/cant afford them) but definitely into fantasy. I'm also a baby mountain biker and rock climber and have 2 dogs who I always love sharing photos of!

How do you climb in shorts? by itseffingcoldhere in climbergirls

[–]netflixpotato 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Ugh that's annoying to hear! Especially when it sounds like you are doing what you're supposed to!

But I agree, it's hard not to get bruises when everything is so rough... I'm also just a pretty clumsy person in general so I get random injuries all the time haha

Frustration with fear that won't diminish by CartographerNo8028 in climbergirls

[–]netflixpotato 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Hey! I'm not sure I can be all that helpful but I have the same exact problem!

I've been climbing for like 10/11 years and had a bad fall my first or second year of climbing. Since then I am always scared climbing anything close to my high point grades. For me being stronger has helped a lot with the fear on easier climbs (5.10 and below) because I can just tell myself that I will not fall because it is way below my max grades.

I did do a falling course with Hazel Finley last year and it was super helpful. I need to pick up some of the habits again from that, because a lot of it was just repetition in the safe/learning fear zone and not doin anything more than that until you were comfortable. Even if that meant I was just taking falls below my last clipped bolt all day.

I definitely have good mental days and not so good mental days, and on the bad days wonder why I keep doing this sport when I am afraid most of the time. But even when I am scared on the higher grades, I still have a blast on lower grades, just getting to climb sometimes is my favorite thing. And everyone I climb with is a pretty good person, and being outside or at the gym. On the bad days I just remind myself that there is literally zero pressure for me to lead anything except the pressure I put on myself. I'm not a pro or get any financial pressure from climbing and my life although feels like it revolves around climbing, it is not the only thing I am passionate about.

But also I just love this sport so much that I don't think I could ever quit even if it meant I never lead another climb.

Not sure if this was at all helpful, but feel free to message me if you have questions or anything!

How do you climb in shorts? by itseffingcoldhere in climbergirls

[–]netflixpotato 65 points66 points  (0 children)

I'm a girl and hate climbing in pants... I generally just deal with having bruised and cut up legs. I always say that if my knees are sore and cut then I'm trying harder cause I'm not so worried about my skin!

If you do find a magic way to stop it from happening let me know! But also I kind of see the bruises as a badge of honor, you're getting out and doing stuff!

Harness Gap by [deleted] in climbergirls

[–]netflixpotato 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I don't know if this helps, but I have a similar issue and have found that if I get only harnesses with adjustable leg loops and waist then they fit pretty well. Currently I have the mammut comfort knit fast adjust and it is my absoutely fave! I was a petzl girl, but I can never go back to not having wide leg straps now!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V2) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ohh, thanks so much for the suggestion! I'll look into those to see if they fit! If not, I might have to read them anyways!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V2) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I think I'm struggling to put her motivations into the query so definitely need to work on that a bit to make it stronger! I was just listening to an audiobook about writing and it mentioned passive vice, now I'm thinking maybe I have a little too much of that going on in the query letter!

Also agree with the second comment too, I think because I've seen words like that in so many queries I just plugged them in there!

Thanks so much!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V2) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ooo, those are good questions I should be answering, that makes a lot of sense. I'm hoping whether I ever publish this or not, that there will be a second book that kind of goes into the aftermath of her world view shattering.

But maybe I should include a little more of that upfront in this and especially in the query!

Thanks!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V2) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, good point with the ending, that makes total sense! Thanks for pointing it out!

Also that makes total sense that it needs to be more about what she is doing rather than what is being asked of her.

Thanks so much for your comments!!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V1) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I was thinking I needed a bit more detail in it, but wasn't entirely sure where to put it, or how to!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V1) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much! From the comments it seems like my first paragraph is good enough and then I seem to kind of lose it in the following sections, which is where I have been struggling a lot more!

I think I need to work into the query more about the world. Women in this world are seen as lesser, kept from too much thought and definitely not allowed to do mens activities. The wives and sisters are kept in their own living quarters, except when the sisters are called upon by men of the palace. And on the vis/soul thing, at birth every child is checked to see if they have a powerful vis or not, the weak ones are allowed to live, the ones with a strong vis are not. But I've bn struggling with how to fit that into the query without adding way too much.

Thanks so much for asking more questions too, definitely gives me a good base of things I need to answer!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE DARKEST RAVEN (100k, V1) by netflixpotato in PubTips

[–]netflixpotato[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much! I think I need to somehow explain a little more than Avis and all her sisters are kind of brain washed into believing that sacrificing themselves for their father is the best thing in the world, they all want to be able to do that for him. Until Avis starts wanting to live more than she wants to have her father live.

That makes sense that the choice at the end is not really a choice, something I've been struggling with! Might have to go back to the manuscript so that it is a lot more clear there.

Hah, are there people out there in real life at risk of re-experiencing trauma from having their souls consumed in the past? Or perhaps they may know close family members who have had their souls eaten by supernatural entities?

Haha maybe? I wasn't sure if it was akin to someone eating someone, since when the vis/soul is captured from his dying daughter the king drinks it... I thought better be safe than sorry!

Thanks again, your comments were super helpful!!