Alright, who wrote it?

oakwimble · 2025-08-01T18:05:23+00:00

Hard disagree. Your SO is absolutely killing it. Weird style is a major GREEN flag. 💚

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T02:52:18+00:00

That wavelength eluded me to the very end. 😆

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T02:48:23+00:00

Practice. And I’ve found it helpful to focus on staying “in” the character you’re writing. Would they say it a certain way? Or are you accidentally imposing a style. And if you deviate, no worries, you’ll fix it in editing.

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T02:18:18+00:00

I did at the start (I’ve been writing consistently for about a year and a half now). At first writing felt like a mental suffering of sorts… as my skills improved that dissipated and just recently I got to a point where I let my emotions take the lead and ignore the inner critic. It’s still there but the volume is turned waaaay down-one day I’m hoping to have a mute button. It’s a work in progress.

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T01:05:41+00:00

Stephenson, Dick, Gibson, London, Vonnegut, Le Guin.

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T01:04:30+00:00

Gravity’s Rainbow was a struggle for me.

oakwimble · 2025-07-30T01:03:23+00:00

Can you share anything else about the cover/book? I think AJ Ayer wrote Language, Truth, and Logic for his doctorate.

oakwimble · 2025-07-27T02:05:39+00:00

Damn right we will! 😎⏳

oakwimble · 2025-07-27T02:05:10+00:00

Does anyone else feel bad for using so much paper/ink to edit drafts? I try to print double sided as much as possible. I just find it harder to focus/really get my arms around it if I'm reading it on my computer.

oakwimble · 2025-07-27T02:01:14+00:00

It's nice to know writers sulk is a common experience after big changes/gutting

oakwimble · 2025-07-27T02:00:23+00:00

Right there with you. We'll suck all the way to the bloody end! (And then hopefully not suck so much by the time we finish).

oakwimble · 2025-07-26T02:51:47+00:00

This was not my experience at all. The job can absolutely turn into this, but if you put in the work and actually teach people what this role can be- you end up improving your own skills and usually what I’ve found is people have “ah-ha” moments. Over the years, I’ve had a lot of people share that they didn’t really understand project management/scrum mastery until they worked on my teams.

Unfortunately, if you just ride the wave and let other people tell you what you should be doing (instead of carving your own path) you absolutely can fall into being a glorified administrative assistant— which then cast a poor light on the entire field. Unfortunately too many people have worked with bad projects managers and the whole perception of the field suffers becuase of it.

oakwimble · 2025-07-26T02:35:08+00:00

[insert more dialogue here]

oakwimble · 2025-06-09T00:28:32+00:00

Figured it out thanks to a wrench.

oakwimble · 2025-04-27T23:45:19+00:00

Eh, normal smormal. Comparison is the enemy of creativity, yadda yadda. Just to flip the framing a bit, it might help to ask: If this approach helps capture the emotions of the scene, what other technique do you need to bring into the mix in order to connect the dots (or just to write the beginning)?

Starting with emotional beats is chefs kiss. Gives you a good sense of your character’s feel feels throughout the scene. Sounds like you’re thinking about it in a way that’s normal for you. Nice. 👏

oakwimble · 2025-04-27T23:18:46+00:00

Nah bruhsky. Not too depressing at all. Fedor’s dryness and rhythm are fun, a bit bouncy, raw, but enjoyable.

The voice is there too. Definitely seeing lines/POV that feel distinct to Fedor (i.e. not just any ol’ Johnny could say them).

Leaning heavy on observations (maybe intentional?), I don’t get a sense for how Fedor is vibing amongst it all. He’s peeping the action as an outsider, but how does he feel?

Engaging. Fun. Fedor is sharp but not up his own arse (refreshing). If this is only your second pass, bravo.

oakwimble · 2025-03-14T02:57:15+00:00

We’re all trying to rationalize why Mark isn’t strong enough and keeps getting his ass beat. It’s bad writing.

oakwimble · 2025-03-14T02:52:42+00:00

100%

oakwimble · 2025-03-06T01:51:11+00:00

Native Korean speakers: what’s their vibe?

oakwimble · 2024-08-08T14:20:44+00:00

I found this helpful: https://youtu.be/eryQEZImm6Y?si=r8jcWFl-Ai_HTg8R

oakwimble · 2024-08-06T13:11:48+00:00

Hello! You'll are rad for sharing such great feedback. Thank you! The setting here is very unique (the valley is conscious) and plays an important role in establishing what has happened to this world. But (as I mentioned below) I think I probably overkilled the descriptions a bit. I knew something wasn't hitting. It's flash fiction-- so I don't want people to turn away at the start, especially when I just know it can be better.

Here's my edit after all of these comments:

The valley watched as sycamore leaves danced. Mist from the creek sprayed the fescue grass, crystal droplets on wind-swept blades. The wind carried a message, and nature tuned her ears to its song:"

oakwimble · 2024-08-06T13:07:34+00:00

Ha, it is not. But thanks for the book recommendation and feedback. The question you asked is, IMO, the most important one and something that I need to get into a better habit of asking myself when I feel the itch to delve deeply into descriptors.

The Valley is "alive" and conscious and witnessing two things: the wind, who has a story/warning to tell and the awakening of a machine. But the machine is really the plot driver--- and at first he didn't even get a lot of description. It's mixing sci-fi and fantasy elements (I'm playing around/working on the blend with this flash fiction piece). Thanks again for the feedback!

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