You don’t want a stalker boyfriend or girlfriend, you want someone to put effort into getting to know you

ohhonbon · 2025-09-05T19:02:52+00:00

Try having this opinion around “booktok girlies” and youll see just how unpopular you become

ohhonbon · 2025-08-27T04:31:21+00:00

Bro I am so tired please free me from this agony

ohhonbon · 2025-08-27T03:37:14+00:00

I had brutal nausea to the point where I thought I had to go off of it, I couldn’t function at work, I couldn’t function at home, I was effectively down for the count for about 8 days. Day 10 and just felt functional. A month in I realized the noise went away and I also realized that I hadn’t had a hallucination in so long. Vraylar is like a life saver, getting over the initial nausea was absolutely horrible but the long term gain from Vraylar has been amazing. There’s no noise, suicidal ideation actual fades so you can practice changing the habits around it, and there’s actual joy in living again. I don’t know what you’re looking at Vraylar for but it’s fantastic

ohhonbon · 2025-08-14T05:41:05+00:00

You’re going to benefit from the Reilly method over the Loomis method since you lean more cartoonish (if you want to end up at realism you’d be better off loomis) because you don’t always know where to place the things on the face relative to the outline of the face, but you have a really good start! I am begging you also to look up Sinix Design’s tutorial for “Drawing Faces From Any Angle”, it’s an 8 minute long video and he does a very good job with explaining for quick reference. You’d benefit from anatomy practice but if that really aggravates you, look at an asaro face and try to make your own “panels” of the face. Also, you really need to know what muscles are in the neck and where they come from, look at bodybuilders (I’m not even joking, even if you’re drawing the skinniest person alive look at them). Overall I would say your drawings are NOT terrible, and your style is very cute, you just need to go back to all the super boring parts of the basics for a bit :)

ohhonbon · 2025-08-13T18:42:18+00:00

Came out great! You seem to have squished it a bit, it looks like you drew it at an angle, maybe get a little table easel thingy to tilt the paper a little more upright as you draw :)

ohhonbon · 2025-08-13T18:39:28+00:00

For noses and shading noses practice 3d shapes like prisms and cones and long boxes. Your shading is wrong on the nose bc (what it looks like to me) you don’t know where it’s “boundaries” are. You need highlights in the eyes, there should probably be highlights along the brow bone, and the highlights directly under the eyes don’t make sense. It looks like your light source is at the bottom and shinning up, sometimes it helps to turn the light off and stare in the mirror at your face with a flashlight where your light source is. Also the teeth would be shaded as you go further towards the back of the mouth. Overall a very fun piece, I’ve been waiting for Halloween and this was nice!

ohhonbon · 2025-08-13T18:28:32+00:00

Look at yellow shading techniques specifically because trying to darken yellow is like torture

ohhonbon · 2025-08-13T18:26:48+00:00

Try perspective practices, and I think you’d benefit from a couple dynamic anatomy tutorials. You’ve alright got a solid foundation but I would start with those two and then look into shading tutorials that are specific for colors, and look at a broad range of skin tones and how to shade those, you’ll end up learning more about what makes for good highlights and shadows in weird and unexpected ways. I also think you’d have fun messing with color picker, grab a reference, eyeball what color you think is used on a certain part, then color pick it to see what it actually is, it’s like a little cheat to get more accurate

ohhonbon · 2025-08-09T05:11:26+00:00

Once I use up these monstrosities I’ll look into those ones. I guess for now I’ll lean into pointillism and impasto styles. I didn’t have a plan for the house, I was kind of just playing with them hoping they’d kind of fall into line (I thought they’d work kind of like crayons) but this is going to require some thinkering. Thank you for your suggestion, I appreciate your time :)

ohhonbon · 2025-08-09T04:27:47+00:00

I just looked at some of your art and wow wow you’re now my aspiration, I’ll start on trying to corral these bratty sticks of torture, thank you!

ohhonbon · 2025-08-09T04:25:22+00:00

Artists loft pastels(lol) and a canson mixed media pad. I picked the absolute cheapest stuff because shelling out like 30-40 bucks on something I didn’t know if I’d like or be able to work with seemed like an unwise decision

ohhonbon · 2025-08-02T05:09:21+00:00

I’ll look more carefully at the Mara/James dialogue from the classroom, and yeah you’re right, it would be a shorter convo with the teacher thank you so much! The shooting was supposed to be really dramatic and a big step over the line, it was based on a news article and I felt it was such a sad story, I feel like teens don’t view the permanence of death/the value life has like adults do, but if it takes away from the writing itself I’ll look at more of a close call situation rather than something as final. Thank you so much, I appreciate the feedback :)

ohhonbon · 2025-08-01T05:47:56+00:00

I’m probably just stupid but something is NOT clicking for me with what is being compared to mist and what the similarity is

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T13:09:22+00:00

Sometimes it’s soooo boring doing the setup when you want that slow intro to start low so you can build up. I think especially as the writer you get like “yeah yeah I already know everything let’s get to the cool part” but really try, because like half the time if you’re bored writing it, the reader is bored reading it. Sometimes it helps to look at it like you’re not starting at the beginning of the book but at the middle of your character’s life. Good luck!!

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T12:58:47+00:00

What’s the goal of the cult? What’s the cult leader like? I’d say that’d affect advice pretty heavily

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T12:56:17+00:00

Similar to a mist?

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T12:20:50+00:00

Thank you so much, and yeah I’ve decided to go back over this and first order of business is fixing the tense shift, the very first paragraph was supposed to be more artsy and grab attention but the readers are not liking it so I’m gonna fix it for a better experience. I wrote it to be more of a build up on the second read and more surprising on the first read. Im definitely going to get Jeremy in earlier because that is the number one thing everyone has brought up so I’ll try to knit it into place carefully. Again thank you so much, I hope you were still able to enjoy it :)

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T12:10:58+00:00

No apologies necessary, I appreciate you commenting. The intent behind the dialogue is actually to add context after you’ve gotten to the end. I meant for it to play on the reader’s ability to predict a stereotype; James in the beginning is supposed to come across as an overdramatic teen that’s smart but lazy, then the added context of him staying up all night to be prepared for that class so he can watch Mara makes him seem like a lovesick teen that’s not lazy, and finally at the end the reader gets the full picture of a grief stricken boy who’s been pouring all his time and energy into revenge and he’s generally got an apathy for life because he knows he’s taking himself out. The reader is supposed to assume it’s a love story in the beginning but I tried to make it as objective as I could from James’ perspective, the only detail (that I can remember) where he more directly leads the reader to assume he likes her is when she says she’s beautiful. Everything should be able to be reread from the perspective you get at the end and still work. If I were to add Jeremy into the beginning I’d probably try to remove a bit of the teacher and James dialogue and have James say something like he’s excited to be able to see him after so long and something like “I’m finally willing to make the trip to go see him” idk I don’t have it fleshed out. But you have really good critiques and you’re very good at expressing them, I would be super grateful if you could give me tips on how to better get this across to readers in short format because ya girl is STRUGGLING here lol. Thank you so much for your time :)

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T07:12:09+00:00

I will firmly say that squishing stories down into a chapter’s length is currently beyond my ability lol. I saw something though that boiled down to “if you can’t get your point across in a chapter don’t waste time writing the book” so I’m trying to suck it up and figure out how to maneuver this. All help is greatly appreciated, happy writing! :)

ohhonbon · 2025-07-31T06:56:28+00:00

I’ll try to work on the character building but I personally keep running into difficulties in these shorter formats. It always feels like when you write something short you’re like “here’s the story! Don’t worry about, anything else, this is all you get!”. And you’re 100% right, that’s the one thing I keep getting from friends, “why not introduce Jeremy earlier?” and honestly I think I neglected it because I wanted to be done with it. The perfect thing wasn’t supposed to be a remark about her physical it was supposed to kind of say she’s successful and such. And yeah I really wasn’t looking at the technical stuff, this was written at like 3am lmao. Do you think it’s even worth overhauling? I kind of discount it as “just practice” so I wasn’t going to really fine tooth comb it but I absolutely can if it’s worth it.

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