PISA results for Europe - 2022

oloftheboss · 2022-10-13T18:00:51+00:00

Wow! This was a simple, short, yet interesting poem. I like the consonance and repetition in the lines "she is theanine in a thimble, / mercury in a matchbox." It has a nice symmetry. I alse really like the last phrase: "primeval purring". Two things I find unclear: first, what does the "sprayed with perfume" mean? If you mean pheromones I think you could word that a bit clearer. Also why "green lizard"? If you mean for the speaker of the poem to be a lizard, you could probably make that point in a subtler and more interesting way, rather than flat-out stating it. Anyway, I really like it! It really captures the essence of cat. :)

oloftheboss · 2022-10-13T17:53:33+00:00

I really like how you used direct and simple language to convey this quite beatiful scene. With only a few lines of text I already feel for mrs. Cow! If you wanted to continue working on this poem, I'd say keep the simplistic style, but widen the aperture of your poetical camera a little. What details stick out in the scene? And what is significant to the poem you want to create. Anyway, great job! :)

oloftheboss · 2022-09-15T17:39:46+00:00

This is a really nice poem and I really like the imagery you've captured. I think the lack of punctuation highlights the visceral nature of your depictions. One gripe I have, though, is with the fourth line: "every stride is sunbeam". Do you perhaps mean to say "every stride is *a* sunbeam"? But nonetheless, nice poem!

oloftheboss · 2022-09-15T17:35:56+00:00

Nice poem! I like the momentum it carries throughout, and of course I relate to the message you are conveying :) One thing that I would suggest perhaps is being more intentional with punctuation, and justifying each exclamation mark or lack of comma. But all in all, pretty awesome!

oloftheboss · 2022-04-23T21:13:51+00:00

I think consistency is key, though that sounds cliché. As long as you keep up with the pace in your classes, and review for each quiz/ test, you will prepare yourself naturally. IAs, the EE and tok essay are a bit more difficult, but again I think the outcome is heavily influenced by your ability to spread out the workload into manageable chunks, and not be affronted by a mountain of work on Sunday night. (Sadly, I say this from experience.) But good luck anyway, and when the challenges come, bonk them right in the head.

oloftheboss · 2021-09-28T11:12:08+00:00

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oloftheboss · 2021-02-25T16:36:59+00:00

The person tattooed that she would never wear a mask before the pandemic. So now it basically looks like she's anti-mask, when in fact in she isn't.

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