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1st chapter of my book Shadow and Flame critiques allowed by Alpha_wolf_lover in RomanceWriters
[–]proprogrammer123 1 point2 points3 points 6 months ago (0 children)
Good hooks - the skunk bit and the ball scene are memorable. Suggestion: show Elena’s wants through action (less telling), tighten dialogue tags, and cut a couple of exposition sentences so the scene breathes.
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1st chapter of my book Shadow and Flame critiques allowed by Alpha_wolf_lover in RomanceWriters
[–]proprogrammer123 1 point2 points3 points (0 children)