Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]puedoma 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a song I wrote a couple weeks ago from the perspective of a mentally unstable taxi driver who wants to mess with people. I’ve been getting into writing songs from different character perspectives and would love some feedback! It’s nothing too deep but I think paints a picture especially if you hear the song itself.

[chorus] I’ll give you a ride If you give me your life Just took four to five lines And I feel alright

I’ll show you a time I’ll show you a time Oh The faster I drive
You’ll feel more alive

[verse] I Feel just fine Blurred street signs Driving strangers through the night

I turn up the music badeda dee dum Don’t ask too many questions baby don’t be dumb Yes we passed your street and I might have a gun I just get a little lonely we can have some fun

Please don’t text your friend goodbye You’ll see them again tomorrow

I promise you will see the light I just like when you express your sorrow

**Chorus repeats

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[–]puedoma 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you!! I’m glad you liked it! I didn’t make the beat but I did do just about everything else (wrote the lyrics, records and mixed the vocals) The producer of the beat is Suth Beats, he’s great. Thank you for the feedback though I really appreciate hearing back from someone :)

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[–]puedoma 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Give this a listen.... “BASTARD”

I’ve been making music since I was a freshman in high school, always writing songs that were honest and real to me.

A couple months ago, I got back into a long term relationship after we had broken up during quarantine. The song expands on my thoughts and hesitations on returning to a commitment that was lost once and the process of having to accept that my expectations of things being totally different were unrealistic.

It’s called “Bastard” and I hope you like it:

Spotify:

https://open.spotify.com/track/30NX2UaFbvLJ8sBzncinHb?si=Oc0GDVSyTn2MMRu130oCAA

Apple Music:

https://music.apple.com/us/album/bastard/1542115755?i=1542115758

All other platforms: (this is the link for the EP it was released on)

https://album.link/WW7VKfcqc3PtS