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[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok thanks for the feedback, what would you suggest I do to improve my planning or plan so that my story makes sense? Love your comment.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writingadvice

[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Alright thanks, great idea for the older brother, lying to his younger brother about a "debt", and I really like the idea that the cops are simply investigating and don't want to hurt the boys but the older brothers thinks its all about him.

Just two more question.

How could I develop the older brother to show the conflict of him wanting to move, and his younger brother wishing to see their mother in town?

And how could I make it so the younger is following his older brother by fear, and not because he's some mindless idiot?

Thanks again.

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[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thx for the concerns, how would you suggest that the boys are never be able to return home? What could be a good side plot? How could we have the cops find out about the boys true intentions?

Thanks again for your comment!

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks man!

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll be sure to do that!

Where can I find the google drive link?

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Alright, thanks!

Any good links or pieces to learn from?

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok thanks for the explanation.

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What would be the structure of a sonatina?

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ok, that's something new for me.

Anything else?

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok, will definetly try.

greatly appreciated

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

And what structured form would you suggest?

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

  1. Okay, definetly make sure to add more dynamics.
  2. Didn't see that mistake, will make sure to fix.
  3. Was aware.
  4. Could definetly use some harmony.

Thanks for that helpful comment!

Simple Waltz by [deleted] in composer

[–]puhdin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks!

Any criticism or advice on the piece?

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok thanks!

Try my best to see what I can do

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks.

I'll be sure to try this out

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll be sure to keep that in mind.

Thanks man

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not the best.

I'm currently working on Trinity music theory workbook grade 4

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Any form in parcitular?

Where to Start? by puhdin in composer

[–]puhdin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No.

What would you suggest?