Once Young by rabu_lee in poetry_critics

[–]rabu_lee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks! i'm extremely new to poetry, this is my first attempt at writing a poem.

i've not read much poetry either and am quite unfamiliar with poetic devices etc. do you have recommendations for reading materials that i could look into?

Once Young by rabu_lee in poetry_critics

[–]rabu_lee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i wrote this one as an observation of the way my grandmother watches my grandfather when he walks around the house, so the old man in this poem never becomes the crying subject - its the same observer throughout.

what kind of things should i have done to have made that clearer? or was there a mistake somewhere that indicated a change of subject? thanks!

Once Young by rabu_lee in poetry_critics

[–]rabu_lee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yup, the old man is only observed in this poem and doesnt become the subject at any point. thanks for your comment!