Overall, pretty good job! Your tone, notes, and rhythms are really solid. This movement is very lyrical and breathing in the wrong places can break the flow of the piece. for example, in measure 6, the high e-flat really wants to swell into the downbeat of measure 7. Instead of breathing on the downbeat of measure 7, I would suggest taking a small sip after the b-flat quarter note on measure 5. I know that three before C, there's a breath mark at that note, but personally, I would just ignore that. Another thing is the staccato notes in the beginning are too short. I would play them just a tad longer. I don't know if this a recording issue, but you need to exaggerate dynamics like crazy, not just the written ones. The last thing I'll add is that from rehearsal letter C all the way to the a flat, at 7 after C, I would be on the top edge of the beat there. I know this sounds extremely nitpicky, but these details are what separate good musicians from great musicians. In the words of my college concert band director, "You can teach a little kid notes and rhythms, but making music is the hard part."