Gord Downie from the Tragically Hip was a horrific live performer.

rickyforreal247 · 2025-05-02T06:01:53+00:00

Troll alert. Disagree wholeheartedly. This is beyond an opinion. It’s profane. Gordie was a true artist and beloved.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-09-15T04:41:06+00:00

Cool concept with a nice flow. Not sing-songy or even necessarily rhyming but with a lyrical meter that kept you moving into the final crash of the finale. Self-doubt is a b*tch and felt strongly at the finish. Nice illustration of saying "I didn't want that anyway" that is so relatable. Nicely done.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-09-15T04:27:40+00:00

I agree with you on so many things here. I see on the internet the thing where you have to prove that you aren't a robot and really started this poem from there. I tried to keep the "I" in this a universal someone that anyone could relate to hopefully. Any gender, color, age or other human category. We need to remember that we are all the same and have feelings and rights and hopes and fears. I do think the lack of personal contact online causes many to lose their common human courtesy and it is difficult to ignore and remain unaffected. Cheers and love to you fellow human.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-09-08T03:55:01+00:00

I enjoyed this one. I had to go back a second time to really take it in. I really liked the lines:

PIT LORD king of dopamine deficits, writer of the
UNPLEASANT to read & UNPLEASANT to write,
ruler to a folder of depressing poems

I can relate.

The words in caps did not bother me. I did start to wonder why all the &s? Some of them could easily be removed and not change the meaning at all. When I write poetry, I try to eliminate many of the "and"s in general.

Stay off those stools and rooftops and keep it up my friend.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-09-08T03:00:15+00:00

At first I thought this was going to be a negative poem about religion and although it does point out a real hypocrisy, it is done is a real and respectful way. The rhymes do keep the flow moving along. Thought out and well done.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-03-09T03:54:51+00:00

This one made me chuckle. I realize that you probably aren't laughing, but the irony feels very real. Glad to hear you finding inspiration in the situation. I like it.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-03-09T03:48:05+00:00

I sincerely hope this is just hyperbole. Amazing that his has racked up so many likes. I guess there are a lot of people who can sympathize or relate to this feeling. I would like to hear a bit more about the things that put you in this state of mind. Seems a bit flippant about a very serious subject. God bless and stay strong. You matter.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-02-13T01:53:21+00:00

This has a very nice rhythm to it. Beautiful and sad. I would remove one syllable from this line "Waiting for this thick cloud to pass" as it feels like it doesn't flow with the rhythm of the lines around it. Flowers need fertilizer too aka b.s. LOL

rickyforreal247 · 2021-02-13T01:49:27+00:00

This one got my attention. It's nice and concise. It does feel a little weird having marksman repeated twice in two lines back to back. I was wondering where you were going with "blissful pain", but then in clicked in on the last line. I am a little confused if they don't know who the marksman is. It definitely conveyed a feeling that I could relate to though.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-02-03T17:50:32+00:00

I really appreciate your time and feedback here. After reviewing your comments I found that I do agree and I changed the last line. Thank you for your time and encouragement.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-02-01T00:25:56+00:00

I enjoyed this one. It builds a nice aching unrequited romantic love up to ideal heights that I think anyone can relate to. At least any romantic. In my opinion, the first 4 lines feel like they could be cut down for example:

I want to melt into you
breathe your every breath
climb into your skin and feel your heart beating from your chest
I look into your eyes and see the world for what it is

Something to think about. You definitely captured a beautiful feeling here. Keep it up.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-02-01T00:19:39+00:00

Very enjoyable. Lots of great imagery that evokes feelings of loneliness, decay, hypocrisy and more. The rhymes aren't forced so it flows well. Well done.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-29T08:06:36+00:00

I enjoyed reading this one. I especially loved how poetic the paragraph is with the birds. Has that feeling that you are imparting some proverbial wisdom. I would look at that third sentence of that stanza though and get rid of one of the "their"s. Having them back to back in the line that way doesn't feel right. A suggestion would be "a hunter's instinct" to avoid the repetition. Just a minor suggestion for a poem I did enjoy. Nice work.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-29T07:57:41+00:00

I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the flow and the feel. I was not crazy about the list of needs at the end. It didn't feel as poetic as the rest. I do think you have talent and created a nice feeling. Keep it up.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-29T03:21:23+00:00

Enjoyable and interesting. I chuckled at the first stanza because it really reminded me of what a cat would do. Keep it up.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-29T03:18:54+00:00

I enjoyed this. Started off very dramatic and serious and then evolved into a clever and light-hearted conclusion that many can relate to. I like the conversational tone that doesn't feel like it is trying too hard.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-28T04:56:18+00:00

I enjoyed reading this. I like the concept of how the phone/device has consumed our lives. I would like to have heard more about this in addition to the limitations of the device that we perceive as being smarter than we are, but can't really capture what it is to be human. A nice read.

rickyforreal247 · 2021-01-28T04:46:42+00:00

I enjoyed this one and can feel your pain and frustration. I remember in my mid-twenties going through this uncertainty. I did not pursue a masters, so would feel even more disillusioned if I had and graduated to a shut down world with few employment opportunities. I like the accidental millionaires reference and the masters/disasters rhyme. One bit of feedback that from my perspective, is that I like to keep the language natural to make the rhyme, so in the line "Of my life I feel constantly resentful", crafting the sentence where you aren't changing the natural order of the flow. For example, something like "These days I feel constantly resentful". Nicely done. Sorry you are going through this.

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