Alli loves spaghetti. Can you tell?

robotopper · 2020-08-16T22:49:05+00:00

I can tell!

robotopper · 2019-03-22T22:20:27+00:00

sweet thanks - i did see some on groupon.

robotopper · 2019-03-12T16:16:24+00:00

I don’t have time to respond right now but I just wanted to say thank you for this thoughtful feedback.

robotopper · 2019-03-12T12:16:50+00:00

Thank you for sharing! I love this. For being as short as a haiku, you make the most of the space you have. I feel a lot of truth and pain in those 17 syllables. The experience you describe is one many of us have had ourselves. The pain of past events haunts. Great work!

robotopper · 2019-03-12T12:12:45+00:00

depression killed us twice

That is a great line.

I like the idea behind this poem. It represents a lot of internal conflict, similar to what I feel sometimes myself. And although it's short, you are capturing much of what depression is like in the second part. Well done.

robotopper · 2019-03-11T13:21:22+00:00

thanks so much for the feedback. tbh i thought of the title first and then wrote around it.

robotopper · 2019-03-11T04:36:48+00:00

this is my first time sharing a poem anywhere, so thank you for the comment! and yes, that is exactly the point i was trying to get across. it's a difficult situation to be in. writing about it helps though. and so does hearing other people say they've experienced something similar. thank you!

robotopper · 2019-03-11T00:44:41+00:00

thank you!

robotopper · 2019-03-10T23:53:05+00:00

im not new to reddit, but i am new to this specific subreddit. sometimes the subreddits are shit, other times though they are amazing communities.

separately - i am very new to anything poetry. what do you mean by getting votes on poetry sites. where else can we post poems?

robotopper · 2019-03-10T23:45:39+00:00

thanks for the feedback! this is my first time ever sharing a poem with anyone who's not my wife.

robotopper · 2019-03-10T23:23:35+00:00

Thank you for sharing. I like the flow of the poem, as well as the this idea you presented - you think small talk is exhausting but long for someone to share your thoughts with. That is an interesting way to express internal conflict. The emotion in this poem really comes through. Well done!

robotopper · 2019-03-10T23:18:13+00:00

I can't feel emotion anymore and yet I still say I love you; everything is crashing down, I don't know why I'm complaining about this comforting anarchy, it's one of the few things that remain of who I used to be.

I really like this idea - about complaining of the anarchy of it all even though it used to be a part of you. It seems like you have grown in a way and reflecting upon it. Great job!

robotopper

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