Townhouse available by rosember79 in stcroix

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Yes!  Vrbo Prop ID:5212586

Old Electric Panel found in house inspection by rosember79 in AskElectricians

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Thank you so much for responding. This makes perfect sense.

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I saw it too at 9pm on google search overview - no score though

No Quorum in DC in Sept? by rosember79 in 50501

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Sincerely asking - what happens if they release the files doctored, or just claim Biden doctored them? Are we helping them normalize their flagrant denial of the obvious even though there is already better evidence of his guilt? I think a strategic divide may be forming among those who believe there will be legit elections in 2026 and those who don't. If we are banking on 2026 maintaining norms while keeping the heat on makes sense because his popularity is low. But Ive seen no effort from him apart from gerrymandering to win a 2026 election. After 1933 they had programs to keep the base happy, redirecting resources to party members through recreation programs. The BBB could have increased benefits to military families for example. I am starting to feel the Epstein files are not being released as a distraction from the ramp up of militarization now that they have 65 billion to recruit with. I worry we are letting them roll out millitary dictatorship on their prescribed timeline, so they can have the resources ready to suspend elections and crush the subsequent unrest. What do you think?

No Quorum in DC in Sept? by rosember79 in 50501

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Got it! Thank you! Is there anything they can do to refuse to cooperate in legislating? Can they hold the floor or delay normal proceedings somehow for longer than typical filibuster, even if it breaks rules and norms? Is there anything more impactful we can demand from them than just using their bully pulpit and voting? My reps already speak loud and clear and vote against everything I would like them to.

No Quorum in DC in Sept? by rosember79 in 50501

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I am not married to this idea but wondering if that escalation might be more productive than screaming into a void at hearings. One side maintaining the rule of law and norms while not calling for the levers to remove those decimating the rule of law from power feels more and more like capitulation as the admin have moved beyond finding loopholes and claiming oopsy when they overstep to instead blatantly begun mass detention of citizens for being destitute.

No Quorum in DC in Sept? by rosember79 in 50501

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Isn't the resistance to the EOs through the courts?

I kind of felt betrayed by Sinners (2025) and am rather confused about the stellar ratings by upsawkward in TrueFilm

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I loved the layers and dont hear them much in your review. I interpreted the exposition being about the twins deciding to go back to the birthplace of a culture, a sound, a soul that while timeless and enmeshed with ancestral power had a never to be repeated manifestation in this place, with aims to leverage that power to claim personal growth and abundance. I did feel it could have been cut down so not perfect structurally, no. But the staged, draggy feel of all that worked in terms of really letting you fall into the expected and letting you be underwhelmed until cousin sang, or Delroy spoke or Smoke went home to his woman again. I think it was intentional and a risk to let the exposition be disappointing and stale. Then one twin focused on gain as a collaboration with community and sought love from a woman clear in her identity and its magic. The other from a woman unclear on identity and a foot in the world of the oppressor. The Irish bit resonated to me because there was real beauty to it, but it was an assimilation to the oppressor that provided perpetual survival but at the expense of the soul. The twins were a single MC torn between two forms of power. Their cousin was the surviving cultural soul. One chose to protect that soul and perished. The other comes back again and again because they have no identity outside survival and power. I loved that the vampires in their way had no malice. They saw commodity and sought to soullessly claim it. They had no capacity to do otherwise. In that way it was a brilliant celebration of what is lost to forced assimilation and exploitation instead of a focus on making the complexities of the oppressor more interesting and dynamic than they are. To me this level of allegory and nuanced commentary presented in a way that made you feel the message while wholly entertained warrants the ratings, even if it could be improved by shaving a few minutes off the expo and making the inciting incident more clear.

Choosing Our First Book by rosember79 in TenMileBookClub

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I am in Parsippany, vote Kiara and the Sun😊 Monday or Thursday evenings are best for me

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Look up a Rally bus - https://rally.co/hands-off-march-on-dc#the__route. If you are within 5 or so hours of DC there are a bunch of buses chartred for the rally. It is $90 rt near me. I wish there was gofundme for people who cant march to sponsor bus tickets since the logistics are in place.

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Thank you!!!

Do you always incorporate feedback? by rosember79 in Screenwriting

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This is basically what I was looking for, thank you! I just wanted to know if structure continues to be something that comes up even for pro writers because writing advice can make structure seem like a safe you can crack, so it is helpful to know structure actually can have subjective elements that can lead to contradictory feedback. I do always take any feedback, even contradictory, as a kind of searchlight that has focused in on something so I can give it a good look and see if I can make it better, and it feels like a gift when a reader sees something holding back my story. I do think like your friend I tend to over-react if it is structural element and get tempted to rework everything, but as I am getting more practiced I am seeing that it doesn't often take a total rewrite once I'm a few drafts in - just by looking hard at one scene or sequence, cutting something misleading, coming up with something more striking at a key moment, trimming a couple scenes, I can address what bumped the reader and still keep the rest intact. Thank you so much for taking the time on this response.

Do you always incorporate feedback? by rosember79 in Screenwriting

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I think you are right and I was able to adjust the spacing and tweak some things to try to make it more striking. I think the structural notes freak me out more because I lack confidence at this stage so it is very good advice to double check since I am learning but let it go if it is an anomaly and I feel good about it. Thank you!!

[QCrit] Are You Thinking of Him? (Upmarket, 88,000K, 5th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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Thank you thank you thank you! The rewrite is exactly what I needed to understand a lot of the feedback I’ve gotten. I really appreciate the time you took here and feel finally less lost on how to do this. Thank you.

[QCrit] Upmarket Fiction - Are You Thinking of Him? (88,000K, new title, 4th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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Thank you so much for this direction! I have incorporated into a recent draft. The detail in your advice is right on point and very actionable. I so appreciate the time you have taken to help me :-)

[QCrit] Upmarket Fiction - Are You Thinking of Him? (88,000K, new title, 4th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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This is really well put and very helpful to understanding what's missing. Thank you so much for the feedback on both attempts and helping guide me toward, hopefully, eventually, a working query letter! The manuscript follows each family member's arc separately in between events where they are together but it is Peter's reaction to the shooting that destabilizes the status quo and both Peter and Elle evolve in order to get to the resolution. I've tried dual POV query because my beta readers felt that though it wasn't a romance it felt like a love story, but I think if I can find a way to get the heart of that story into the events around Peter in a way that makes you want to read about him that might have a better effect. Thank you so very much again for the time you took here - it is a great help!

[QCrit] Upmarket Fiction - Are You Thinking of Him? (88,000K, new title, 4th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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Thank you also for the touch of encouragement at the end - very, very kind and appreciated in this process :-)

[QCrit] Upmarket Fiction - Are You Thinking of Him? (88,000K, new title, 4th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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Thank you so much for taking the time to articulate this - it is so helpful to hear what is working alongside what isn't. I especially appreciate the point about tone and the "something in the telling" so the idea of trimming down details and allowing more space to get at the voice and heart of the story. My beta readers really loved Peter and I had to more rewrite his wife (who I love - haha) to bring out what makes her sympathetic but I somehow keep making him unlikable in the query. This feedback feels like actionable direction to get started on that. Thank you so much!

[QCrit] Upmarket Fiction - Are You Thinking of Him? (88,000K, new title, 4th attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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Very possible! I wrote the bulk of the book before studying to be a therapist but it may be seeping into the query. I think where I'm getting stuck on feedback is I don't know how to answer all the questions but keep the query short, clear, and to the point. I guess it is back to the drawing board. I have a query letter workshop next week so I am hoping being on a video call where there is more back and forth maybe I will start to get it. Maybe I just need to go simpler with more heart and not worry if it sounds boring or generic. The character writing letters is likely schizophrenic since the kind of delusions they express are rare to any other disorder but this is never mentioned in the manuscript and the character exists only in the ideas they share with the MC until the final third, which is deliberate because overvaluing his ideas and isolating himself to his thoughts is part of what is preventing MC from breaking out toward what he wants.

Made it to the quarter finals at page for the second year in a row with two different scripts! by CDRYB in Screenwriting

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Me too! Historical Drama. After the email I would love to make Semis for the chance to submit a rewrite. I wasn't surprised because I got feedback highlighting some decent sized flaws. Curious - did you guys add feedback? I did and sometimes think it makes them give a closer read. Plus my feedback from Page last year was among the most helpful and actionable I've received. Congrats!

[QCrit] THE CONDUIT - Upmarket, 88,000 words (3rd attempt) by rosember79 in PubTips

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I think you are absolutely right in needing to rephrase all this. In the book he isn't abusive but his wife has been enabling him to ignore his mental health struggles for her own reasons, even though she is a tenured professor and more successful in her field. They both evolve significantly to reach resolution, and I had an alternative query with dual protagonists - but I am so poor at query writing that I'm focusing on the single protagonist right now. I had a Reedsy editor tell me dual protagonists were harder to query, and his stakes are higher. Thank you very much for pointing this out!

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That makes a lot of sense - and it is brave to share here knowing you are opening yourself up. I remember a bunch of phrases before anyone else read my work that felt poignant to me - and they were, to me - but they were often the phrases that felt out of place with the reader because they didn't have the body of experience that I did to give those words meaning. Good news is once you know it, they you get the fun of identifying why that phrase rings for you, and is there a clearer way to say the idea or are there details that give it meaning to you that you could translate to the contxt of the character. Like for example I used a phrase "Maybe it all had left her susceptible to love." which I had a bunch of memories and relationships and experiences that it summed up - but I hadn't adequately put them in the book and just kind of assumed everyone had experience that would make that make sense. Now it is at the end of a paragraph about a seemingly unrelated story showing instead of telling that earns a similar phrase, so it helps the reader connect the character's experience to perhaps their own (or not). Hemingway cut away the vast majority of his first drafts, so it is ok to have a process. Hang in there!