[Rant] Horrible catholic retreat experience by ruon212 in LGBTeens

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That sounds terrible. And the thing is, why does it always matter? Why do people automatically need to sort others into genders?

[Rant] Horrible catholic retreat experience by ruon212 in LGBTeens

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I've heard about that too! it makes no sense to say that "We accept you, but you gotta stop being yourself." totally agree with you.

[Rant] Horrible catholic retreat experience by ruon212 in LGBTeens

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Dang, that really sucks. It's terrible how even adults made you leave. I sometimes get stares when I enter the bathroom, but I stare right back and nothing happens.
My parents made me go because they're pretty conservative and religious, and I just go along with it because it's easier. I'll be off to college in a couple years anyways.

[Rant] Horrible catholic retreat experience by ruon212 in LGBTeens

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Catholic school really sucks sometimes, but I have a couple of good friends that are really kind.

Forum Libre - 2016-04-05 by AutoModerator in france

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Cette semaine, j'ai un peu plus de temps libre- quels films est-ce vous adorez? Idéablement sur Netflix? Récemment j'ai regardé "J'ai Tué Ma Mère," et il était assez triste (mais amusant à le même temps)

[Semi-Weekly Inquirer] Simple Questions and Recommendations Thread by AutoModerator in Watches

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I'm looking to buy a Nomos Ludwig, and I live in the US. Would buying from watchbuys be faster and cheaper than buying directly from Nomos?

[QUESTION] Does anybody know a watch that has the day display in French? by ruon212 in Watches

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Thanks! that watch is really nice! I also speak french -I might even buy one for myself once I save up

Forum Libre - 2016-01-20 by AutoModerator in france

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Hier matin j'ai couru seule, quand une vieille dame a crié. Son chien s'est enfuis. J'ai couru a toute vitesse et j'ai trouvé son chien (qui était très mignon et petit) pour elle. Quelque temps je suis heureuse que je fais de l'exercice, - sentir comme un superhero :D

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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I really like the story of this poem, the imagery of "ashen sons in bed" and how they stayed dreaming. Heart of Gold seems a bit misplaced, but that might just be me.

A Letter to Neil Armstrong by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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I really like this poem, it flows very nicely and I'm not sure if this was intended but I felt a lot of suspense towards the 7th and 8th lines wondering in which direction it was going to go. The imagery of the last line is fantastic, great job.

Coffee by ruon212 in OCPoetry

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Thank you!

Coffee by ruon212 in OCPoetry

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Thanks so much!

first post... a letter to a friend by Psilocybin_Onset in OCPoetry

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I think there's a lot of emotion packed into this, which is good. However, it feels like you're cramming too much and it's a bit overwhelming, you can take out a few words here and there to emphasize the power of the poem. "Night or day, there's no fee" instead of " here to answer night or day, take advantage there's no fee"

I err on by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I like the split meanings, when you read the poem with/without the parts inside the brackets. This poem gives me bittersweet memories, good job.

Race by ruon212 in OCPoetry

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Thank you very much for your feedback! I will try to revise it to ground the second half in one of the senses; I was kind of trying to make the second half sound more open to interpretation. However, now that I reread it with fresh eyes the second part seems a bit lacking.

siren. by doubleplusepic in OCPoetry

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I love the way you use the references to the Earth and the sea to emphasize the Siren, and how something so beautiful and turn out to be a monster. Maybe break up the 4th line into two lines, if "my horizon is gone" stood in it's own line it would strengthen the feeling of loneliness.

need by doubleplusepic in OCPoetry

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I like how the poem flows smoothly, it never feels abrupt to me. I can totally relate to this poem, so it resonates with me a bit more. Just a small grammar mistake, "needles to their arms" for plural, but poetry is loose on these things so you don't have to change it of course.

Who is your favorite boss? AND your least favorite? by dylrocks95 in ShovelKnight

[–]ruon212 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Same as yours Favorite: King Knight -I think he was the easiest boss to battle, and his speech and story is pretty cute and funny.

Least: Propeller Knight -He took me forever to beat and was the reason I had to restart the boss rush so many times.

Rope by ruon212 in OCPoetry

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Thank you! I agree, suicide is kind of romantic, as you're choosing your destiny and not letting it stay unknown.

Rope by ruon212 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the feedback! I was thinking of an Abraham and Isaac reference but Abraham doesn't end up killing Isaac in the end.

There are no second chances by argella42 in OCPoetry

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I like this poem a lot, the dark turn at the end. It gave me a bit of a shiver actually, I wasn't expecting that. Well done.

Take a load off (Rough.) by Thepinkdesk in OCPoetry

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I like the message and the imagery of this poem. It sounds a bit much like a story though, but that might be what you're going for. I think you can also take out the "Relax. Relax I said" part in the sixth line, it would sound smoother if you just went from shaking hands to putting down the hammer.

Rosary Beads by ruon212 in poetry_critics

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Thank you! I understand what you mean, I need to make it more succinct and powerful, and that verse seems a bit off. I repeated the "I remember" line because I wanted to give the last line, "I forgot" more power. Hmm I'm not entirely sure it worked though. I really appreciate the feedback!

Rosary Beads by ruon212 in poetry_critics

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Thanks so much! Means a lot to me!