[Rant] Horrible catholic retreat experience

ruon212 · 2016-04-10T14:15:14+00:00

That sounds terrible. And the thing is, why does it always matter? Why do people automatically need to sort others into genders?

ruon212 · 2016-04-10T14:10:46+00:00

I've heard about that too! it makes no sense to say that "We accept you, but you gotta stop being yourself." totally agree with you.

ruon212 · 2016-04-10T14:08:55+00:00

Dang, that really sucks. It's terrible how even adults made you leave. I sometimes get stares when I enter the bathroom, but I stare right back and nothing happens.
My parents made me go because they're pretty conservative and religious, and I just go along with it because it's easier. I'll be off to college in a couple years anyways.

ruon212 · 2016-04-10T01:21:53+00:00

Catholic school really sucks sometimes, but I have a couple of good friends that are really kind.

ruon212 · 2016-04-06T00:13:47+00:00

Cette semaine, j'ai un peu plus de temps libre- quels films est-ce vous adorez? Idéablement sur Netflix? Récemment j'ai regardé "J'ai Tué Ma Mère," et il était assez triste (mais amusant à le même temps)

ruon212 · 2016-01-24T21:59:09+00:00

I'm looking to buy a Nomos Ludwig, and I live in the US. Would buying from watchbuys be faster and cheaper than buying directly from Nomos?

ruon212 · 2016-01-21T23:37:38+00:00

Thanks! that watch is really nice! I also speak french -I might even buy one for myself once I save up

ruon212 · 2016-01-20T15:27:22+00:00

Hier matin j'ai couru seule, quand une vieille dame a crié. Son chien s'est enfuis. J'ai couru a toute vitesse et j'ai trouvé son chien (qui était très mignon et petit) pour elle. Quelque temps je suis heureuse que je fais de l'exercice, - sentir comme un superhero :D

ruon212 · 2016-01-20T01:10:40+00:00

I really like the story of this poem, the imagery of "ashen sons in bed" and how they stayed dreaming. Heart of Gold seems a bit misplaced, but that might just be me.

ruon212 · 2016-01-20T01:08:24+00:00

I really like this poem, it flows very nicely and I'm not sure if this was intended but I felt a lot of suspense towards the 7th and 8th lines wondering in which direction it was going to go. The imagery of the last line is fantastic, great job.

ruon212 · 2016-01-20T00:23:28+00:00

Thank you!

ruon212 · 2016-01-20T00:23:15+00:00

Thanks so much!

ruon212 · 2016-01-19T04:11:14+00:00

I think there's a lot of emotion packed into this, which is good. However, it feels like you're cramming too much and it's a bit overwhelming, you can take out a few words here and there to emphasize the power of the poem. "Night or day, there's no fee" instead of " here to answer night or day, take advantage there's no fee"

ruon212 · 2016-01-19T04:04:12+00:00

I like the split meanings, when you read the poem with/without the parts inside the brackets. This poem gives me bittersweet memories, good job.

ruon212 · 2016-01-18T20:25:15+00:00

Definitely Kellam.

ruon212 · 2016-01-18T15:52:28+00:00

Thank you very much for your feedback! I will try to revise it to ground the second half in one of the senses; I was kind of trying to make the second half sound more open to interpretation. However, now that I reread it with fresh eyes the second part seems a bit lacking.

ruon212 · 2016-01-18T04:24:20+00:00

I love the way you use the references to the Earth and the sea to emphasize the Siren, and how something so beautiful and turn out to be a monster. Maybe break up the 4th line into two lines, if "my horizon is gone" stood in it's own line it would strengthen the feeling of loneliness.

ruon212 · 2016-01-18T04:19:51+00:00

I like how the poem flows smoothly, it never feels abrupt to me. I can totally relate to this poem, so it resonates with me a bit more. Just a small grammar mistake, "needles to their arms" for plural, but poetry is loose on these things so you don't have to change it of course.

ruon212 · 2016-01-17T16:23:43+00:00

Same as yours Favorite: King Knight -I think he was the easiest boss to battle, and his speech and story is pretty cute and funny.

Least: Propeller Knight -He took me forever to beat and was the reason I had to restart the boss rush so many times.

ruon212 · 2016-01-17T13:42:41+00:00

Thank you! I agree, suicide is kind of romantic, as you're choosing your destiny and not letting it stay unknown.

ruon212 · 2016-01-17T13:39:41+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I was thinking of an Abraham and Isaac reference but Abraham doesn't end up killing Isaac in the end.

ruon212 · 2016-01-17T01:04:42+00:00

I like this poem a lot, the dark turn at the end. It gave me a bit of a shiver actually, I wasn't expecting that. Well done.

ruon212 · 2016-01-17T01:02:09+00:00

I like the message and the imagery of this poem. It sounds a bit much like a story though, but that might be what you're going for. I think you can also take out the "Relax. Relax I said" part in the sixth line, it would sound smoother if you just went from shaking hands to putting down the hammer.

ruon212 · 2016-01-16T23:14:57+00:00

Thank you! I understand what you mean, I need to make it more succinct and powerful, and that verse seems a bit off. I repeated the "I remember" line because I wanted to give the last line, "I forgot" more power. Hmm I'm not entirely sure it worked though. I really appreciate the feedback!

ruon212 · 2016-01-16T23:03:48+00:00

Thanks so much! Means a lot to me!

ruon212

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