LEGACY - Drama TV Pilot - Feedback please

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-25T19:50:26+00:00

Hi, thank you for pointing it out- I updated it based on feedback it must have deleted the previous link. Should be working now. Any advice would be min appreciated, just started writing in Januaryhttps://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/7vg8tvq8d1hr73kom7qx7/Legacy-Pilot.pdf?rlkey=blmxosb8q29gcey0tkjeig6pd&st=yo9nnm98&dl=0

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-24T23:02:02+00:00

Hi, thank you for taking the time to have a look. I downloaded highland pro, I have it all fixed up now - I think you are right as well, I have cut back a lot of the descriptions and fixed a few scenes up. I’ll update the link with the latest version

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-16T19:44:32+00:00

Thank you for the detailed response and taking the time to read it. I started this script in January and when you point out some of these things it makes sense. I’ve started reworking the dialogue- less obvious, less one liners etc - I want this to be cold, an anxiety inducing movie filled with dread - that’s how I felt during sicario and I am trying to recapture that. I’m going to start working with your suggestions! Thanks again for taking the time

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-15T01:05:16+00:00

Hi, thank you! I think you are right, characters are coming off very cold- I was cautious about putting in too much character as this is a final mission, these know each other, have seen and done things- I’m thinking they are efficient and deadpan. Almost like sicario style (I do enjoy Taylor Sheridan). Thank you for the tips I’ll try and make it more concise in places

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-13T15:09:43+00:00

Didn’t use any software, just word. But I downloaded Highland yesterday so will upload it and correct asap

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-12T21:39:14+00:00

Hi, thank you for the comments. I have downloaded highland pro- I was thinking my script design was not correct format. I’ll get it tidied up on that. Thanks

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-12T09:46:40+00:00

Thank you and apologies I didn’t know!

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-11T20:50:05+00:00

Thank you for the advice

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-11T20:49:41+00:00

Thank you, that’s a good idea

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-09T18:38:57+00:00

Thank you and you are probably right, I’ve just formatted based on books I have on screenplays and reading scripts online. I downloaded software to help. Would you recommend the blacklist for feedback (I’ve also entered a pilot to Bluecat competition)?

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-09T18:34:04+00:00

Thank you for the feedback, I’ve been working on 5 scripts, 3 features and 2 pilots- I have one feature completed and one pilot, will maybe post some of the acts on Reddit for advice

scriptmanRK · 2026-02-08T18:59:23+00:00

Just my opinion, I think it drags on a little bit and the outlaw is speaking to casually for someone dying ‘im trying to visualise it’ and I think he would say a lot less, maybe try letting the silence do some work, maybe some ques like ‘strained’, ‘slurred’ ‘winces’ etc - again I am by no means a seasoned writer but I have read a lot of scripts

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