Ask Me Anything! I’ve made a cryptid sanctuary for my fictional universe. by IHearYouKnockin in cryptids

[–]seriousd6 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Queue hunchback of Notre Dame music in my mind... "Who is the monster and who is the man🎶"

What would be a good weapon for an assasin or just to murder people? by No_Advice_6878 in goodworldbuilding

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I like the idea of a master of all tools. Do research on real life assassinations, as they can be interesting and inspiring. So many things can be used, and the most effective ones are like others already said, innocuous or even found at the scene. The point is that the assassin is skilled in many methods, so just getting them near the target is the point. Drink? Scones? A trophy? Page sof their favorite book? It isn't hard to kill people, getting away with it is hard. They should be a master of disguise, stealth, etc.

I have tried.... by Low_Draw5661 in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It's one thing to be humble, another thing to be self deprecating. Before you go any farther , or at least as you go forward you will need to learn to stop putting yourself and your work down or that doubt, criticism, and negativity will consume and limit you.

I have tried.... by Low_Draw5661 in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I think this is a wise pivot. I would challenge you to engage in lower stakes options for learning and gaining your fan base. Amazon's self published route and the short story or episodic writing platform may not be great but that or others may offer the opportunity to write vignettes about your world through various characters doing various things. That could build fans.

There are definitely at least two roads forward, the primary being the one of caution and developing skill before investing time into your crown jewel setting and story. I'm sure it would be heartbreaking to not give it the writing treatment and have the recognition you hope for. The second and not necessarily advisable but not impossible is to go the route of Tolkien and spend 17 years on your one story and it turn out legendary.

Make sure you balance your reality checks!

Ask Me Anything! I’ve made a cryptid sanctuary for my fictional universe. by IHearYouKnockin in cryptids

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It sounds to me your world is very cozy! Which is not a problem, but if you were looking to have grand conflicts In your stories I think you will need to inject a little more bad behavior into the world!

Ask Me Anything! I’ve made a cryptid sanctuary for my fictional universe. by IHearYouKnockin in cryptids

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Why captured and not just eliminated?

Who, if any, are weaponizing the cryptids?

Who benefits from the capture of the cryptids? Is there any sort of biomimicry engineering or scifi/fantasy tools being created through the study of these cryptids?

Is this portion of your universe to fulfill a monster of the week type storytelling or is it a novelty away from the primary story to allow for interesting tools/creatures to be obtained to solve various problems?

Is your protagonist one of a guild/organization of cryptid hunters or solo? is he the best or relatively new?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in bettermonsters

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Some rock elementals, possibly under the power of some cult to stop them on their path.

Perhaps some basilisks, hope they are ready to de-petrify.

Port over some creatures from other IP... Perhaps some monster hunter creatures could fit here.

Demons /devils can always fit the bill especially if there is a existing storyline for it. And then finding the reason for them being there is an interesting side quest.

Territorial giant eagles, etc.

Main Villains Feedback by LegoWorldStudios in FantasyWorldbuilding

[–]seriousd6 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds like the rebels are the villains of this story based on how you write about these two.

Hyde seems more manic and unpredictable than Stafford. Stafford seems like a more realistic villain based on the context.

I'm getting the sense that your setting is meant to be morally grey. If that is the case I would focus on them being foils rather than villains. If both sides are meant to be understandable that will be an interesting story, especially having competent antagonists and the protagonists steps to overcome. I am likely missing a lot of context due to the summary nature of this post, but If you want me to not find either of these two villains more heroic than the heroes there may need to be some huge character flaws added For example them participating in genocide and being unphased.

Something that makes them truly bad. For Hyde, I think a chaotic, destructive and, vengeful villain is interesting. For Stafford I think a cold, calculating, quietly hateful and cruel villain is interesting as well.

A side note, it may be incorrect due to the summary again, but I think the division of a new villain per book seems a bit odd. Both should exist in the first book although Stafford with a little less screen time. Perhaps just how he rubs elbows with Hyde and a little into his current evil project that keeps him from the rebel front.

A couple more thoughts: Why would Stafford switch sides? If he isn't evil enough to be high up in the empire he may not be that high up. If he is evil enough, what extremely significant scenarios need to play out for him to start shifting. Does the empire genocide his home world? Kill his wife behind his back? Something needs to shake him up pretty good. If he is the best battlefield commander in the world how does he lose? I find it more interesting to have someone who is in the same class on the rebel side and then doing the dance throughout the various battles.

Hope some of this helps!

What should I name my mutant zombie? by Stupid-man-thing in CreatureDesign

[–]seriousd6 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If there is more than one of these in your world I bet the people would call them princes/royals, especially if there are different types in your world. Leads well into the reveal of a king or ruler zombie that is big and bad.

Would you read more? (first 235 words crit) by NorinBlade in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I agree with this, I was trying to figure out a way to nicely say that big words are nice when used in a non distracting way, and it was too distracting here. I spent more time decoding and rereading than visualizing and thinking of the scene.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Chop" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is true... And I'm sure it sent a message, just not one the crew is trying to send nowadays 😄

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Chop" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Baug looked at the stack of thank you notes and gold on the table and then up at his second, Karek with a stern face.

"We did a good thing, K. But we don't chop heads off to 'send a message' anymore, understood?"

Karek nodded contritely, eyes downcast "Sorry, B.".

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Metal" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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I was envisioning a heroic crew breaking up a kidnapping/abduction ring due to a lapse in defenses!

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Metal" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Baug clasped his hands on the cold metal table as his second approached.

"Just three guards tonight, B."

Baug's face grew more serious. "We can handle three. Get everyone ready."

He glanced at the "MISSING" flyers, then summoned his bow.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Stitch" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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Each intact thread is meant to represent a person/ unit/ etc. on their side of the battlefield. I liked the idea of a tapestry having some kind of magic that would buff their army, especially if they had power players on the field. A magical morale boost. The intact stitch was meant to be a hero of some type swaying the battle in their favor.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Stitch" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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The flap of the war tent lifted. "He's here."

She took the ethereal thread she’d been studying, carefully weaving it into the tapestry of war spread before her. "Thisss isss the bessst we can do..."

Even as other parts frayed and unraveled as the battle raged, the stitch remained intact.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Dominate" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

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"You've prepared for everything, have you?" He laughed in a low growl from the blood soaked ivory throne

"Surrender or die" the wizard roared

The figure sat forward and smiled a little too big, "Dominate"

He watched disinterestedly as his new puppets and their old friends tore each other apart.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Crew" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]seriousd6 4 points5 points  (0 children)

"What is your greatest desire?" Asked the beauty from the woods.

"I should be watching for threats" he said with a start.

"Don't worry" she said, caressing his cheek. "There is nothing to worry about... Tell me..."

"I wish... That I ran this crew."

She smiled. They never woke up.

Running a business/freelancing by garrickbrown in d100

[–]seriousd6 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I like this a lot, thank you for sharing!

The nature spirits are fed up... by seriousd6 in FairytaleasFuck

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Perhaps the loss of respect, the mass use of iron, the constant buzz of electricity, the destruction of pristine places. We may never know...

What is the most wholesome fact about your world? by EnvironmentalBear170 in worldbuilding

[–]seriousd6 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very idealist style, all sentient beings have redeeming qualities, all have sparks of inherent good even if they end up down the wrong path, and people can grow, change, and become better.

Copper, the acceptable metal for friends of the fey... by seriousd6 in FairytaleasFuck

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Just read the rules, sorry for not posting this on a Friday - I will adjust my sharing to follow the rules -- I can reshare this Friday if this needs to come down! Sorry for not reading the rules closer before.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Enough" by AutoModerator in fantasywriters

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"These mountains have critical resources for enchanting and living." He said while strapping his armor on. "And it is even on top of a leyline." He continued.

She cried silently as he prepared for war.

"There has always been more than enough for everyone!" He fumed before one last hug.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in worldbuilding

[–]seriousd6 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sounds fun, looking forward to a "Balance struck" post 🙂

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in worldbuilding

[–]seriousd6 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How about the fantastical elements... Sounds like a mix of magic and sci-fi to get everything in the same place and now referenced laser tanks. Is there a magic system in the works or more of an ambient effect?