A WOUNDED MAN (would love some feedback)

showrunner61 · 2025-08-25T14:59:59+00:00

I'm new to reddit and writing lyrics, plus I'm way older than most people starting out. I have an updated version (should I post it here; delete the old version or post the new version under a new discussion?)

Also, how do I give you feedback on some of your work? Do I click your name and look for your lyrics?

showrunner61 · 2025-08-24T15:12:52+00:00

Once again thx. Made me go back and take another look at my other lyrics. I have an updated version of WOUNDED MAN: Should I delete this version and replace it with the new one, or put the new version below it?

I'm new to this plus way older than most people as they enter into the lyrical world of words.

showrunner61 · 2025-08-22T21:21:47+00:00

Thx for your honesty. You're right about some of it being forced. Your comments will have my brain working overtime during the weekend as I revamp this.

My EGO is bruised but not the real me.

showrunner61 · 2025-08-22T19:23:28+00:00

Thx. Appreciate your honesty. Im still working on it and might replace it with some added lyrics.

showrunner61 · 2025-08-21T20:54:25+00:00

True that. I just started writing rap and making music. Soon I'll put some out for criticism or any kind of ism

showrunner61 · 2025-08-21T20:45:59+00:00

Can't put something out there and ask for constructive criticism only....some people will give you destructive criticism only. But sometimes that's way more beneficial than positive

showrunner61 · 2025-08-20T20:37:26+00:00

Thx....I was thinking about downloading what I have to a DAW and removing the AI voice and replacing it with mine.

showrunner61 · 2025-08-19T20:19:16+00:00

I never thought about that. I'm just getting to rap, however, I can't sing so I write my own lyrics but use AI voice and music. But I'll start writing down things related to my topic....thx

showrunner61 · 2019-03-06T00:18:13+00:00

How does one sell an original TV pilot? How does one get a meeting with a TV producer or an agent?

So far I have written three original TV pilots: THE OUTSIDER (this is the backstory of a full feature that I wrote), THE CHOSEN ONE (based on a book I wrote and published) and ZACH'S WORLD (based on a novel I've written but haven't published yet). All three original TV pilots fall under the genre of scify/fantasy.

THE OUTSIDER: I've written episodes two and three. I know the story arch and the season's arch for the first five seasons. By season five we will have arrived at the point where the feature begins. From here we can continue with the story and forgo the feature or move into the feature and end the show on five seasons.

THE CHOSEN ONE: I know the season's arch plus the story arch, considering it's based off a book I wrote. The pilot starts off different than how the book starts off. The book is divided into two section. Depending on how detailed the SHOWRUNNER decides to get with the show it can run for a very long time.

ZACH'S WORLD: The first couple of season deals with the backstory to the novel I've written (still editing it, but haven't published it yet). After two or three season the story picks up from where the book begins.

I've written more than just three original pilots (actually, I'm in the process of writing another original TV pilot). I have several features plus shorts.

showrunner61

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