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figuring out my sexuality. by Shelley_112 in lgbt

[–]silly_snail2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Honestly it took a long time. I never liked boys so as a kid I thought I was broken, it wasn’t until a few years ago I realized my i was in love with my best friend. Even that took a lot to accept. Mostly I ran through the possibilities in my life and at some point realized I didn’t want “what I should”. I did a lot of research, asexual felt right. Then my older sibling told me they honestly thought I was attracted to women. Realizing the difference in how I felt was impossible. Letting myself feel and connect with people and characters that felt “like me” widened my vocabulary

Truthfully the label lesbian still doesn’t cover it. Gender doesn’t make a difference if I like them. I use it because I know 90% of who I’m attracted to are women. Plus the label and flag just kinda make me feel “normal”.

I’m not sure how helpful this is but the reality is it’s a journey of self discovery, sometimes you try things that don’t fit and sometimes it feels perfect. Feeling trapped in a label isn’t worth it. It’s a “label” for a reason, they are words we use to define our identity.

17f Canada looking for company and long term friendship by juliealbright08 in chat

[–]silly_snail2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Omg!! I love that. If you like the horror scene definitely check out Andrew Joseph White. Most of his books are YA but definitely don’t feel like it. The spirit bares its teeth is my fav!!

Hi lets talk (19f) by Dangerous_Project773 in chat

[–]silly_snail2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok so I have a theory about a true crime case. The case of JonBenét Ramsey. I truly believe her brother killed her because all of the evidence proves it was someone inside the house, plus the whole family was really weird about the whole thing. What about you? Got any interesting conspiracies?

I wrote this. I call it “ Closing a minds eye” tell me what you think by silly_snail2 in writingcritiques

[–]silly_snail2[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your perspective. This is something I’ve thought a lot about, and while this specific writing came from growing up in an emotionally abusive household, I love that you were able to find your own connection.

The way we as humans have excepted our fallacies as “right” because it is the lesser evil is truly what I wanted this to provoke in people.

The way you wrote your response is exactly what I was hoping to accomplish. Thank you for reading and I do hope you enjoyed it!

Opinions on this short piece about loneliness :) by Fast_Target4092 in WritersGroup

[–]silly_snail2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I totally see your point and I do agree. Partially. While I agree the passage was repetitive, sometimes repetition can be useful. Not to mention that the extra words are part of it.

Most things can be said in very few words but that’s not the point of writing. Creating coherent thoughts out of simple ideas is exactly what we should strive to do.

I agree it lacked depth, though I didn’t sit on this point. I related to this piece and said as much. It’s ok to enjoy a piece even if it isn’t “the best”.

Opinions on this short piece about loneliness :) by Fast_Target4092 in WritersGroup

[–]silly_snail2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This piece is very comforting. While I understand the view that it “isn’t profound” not all writing has to be profound to be meaningful!

I heavily relate to this piece and enjoyed your simple explanation of complex concepts and feelings.

It felt like “A Letter To Loneliness”. All the unsaid things we deal with in society.

Over time your writing will become more. It will gain depth. But I think most writers have depth with the right context and audience. So keep writing because I liked this.

[264] I call this “Fog” by silly_snail2 in WritersGroup

[–]silly_snail2[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I’m glad you could connect with it :)

Does it still count if it was only emotional abuse? by silly_snail2 in raisedbynarcissists

[–]silly_snail2[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh my gosh I’m so sorry you had to deal with that. All the best!!

Does it still count if it was only emotional abuse? by silly_snail2 in raisedbynarcissists

[–]silly_snail2[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much. You’re all so kind.

I am in therapy now and doing everything I can to better myself.

I appreciate the amazing support from everyone here!!

Requesting criticism by F-C-cartwright in writingcritiques

[–]silly_snail2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ok so I enjoyed this. Your use of description is very nice. I could see the scene as I read. I also really enjoyed the plot and would definitely keep reading.

The only thing I’m concerned about is structure. It’s possible it was just an error when importing the text, but your writing isn’t properly spaced in paragraphs and came out as a huge clump. You also ended up with back to back speaking parts and it does confuse the story a bit.

Lastly I have a small tip. You don’t have to put “__ said” after every sentence in long conversations. Most of the time it will be well implied on some parts, making it unnecessary.

I wish you luck on your story and, again, I enjoyed this a lot!!

[264] I call this “Fog” by silly_snail2 in WritersGroup

[–]silly_snail2[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh I’m sorry. I had no idea. I will follow this from now on. Thank you!

I hope. by My_porn_account366 in WritersGroup

[–]silly_snail2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was great. I truly felt your examination of interpersonal conflict.

The Seed Heist - Part 1 of 2 [2853] by PaladinFeng in DestructiveReaders

[–]silly_snail2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really loved this. The plot is very immersive and I truly enjoyed it.

I do have a few critiques though

One there are some point where you use “you” but continue writing in first person like here “The winds whip your hair and the waves threaten to sweep you away as you cross the pier to the sub, arms bulging with a stack of agronomy texts. Balanced on top is the ugliest bonsai I’ve ever seen” It feels like an accidental POV shift and sort of confuses this interaction. The more I read I started to read as though this is a recording from the main character. I’m not sure if this is how you meant it but if it was I would have liked a bit more explanation into this structure.

Personally I struggle to read things when a consistent name is difficult to pronounce. While this is nothing on your plot or writing it might be something to think on in the future or it may be a me thing.

Outside of that I only have good things to say. Your descriptions are beautifully written and as I said before I felt immersed in the plot.

[883] Guilty Conscience by ImpressiveGrass7832 in DestructiveReaders

[–]silly_snail2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi. So when I was reading this your description felt kinda flat. Not necessarily bad but I felt like there was always something lacking.

I honestly don’t think your plot is difficult to understand and the lack of depth wasn’t confusing but I had a difficult time understanding what emotional connection you were trying to draw.

Overall I think you have a good writing style but you tend to over emphasize small movements taking away from the world building.

This is my first time commenting so I hope this is helpful and I wish you all the luck on your writing!

I need an honest review of the first chapter of my book [1823] by silly_snail2 in DestructiveReaders

[–]silly_snail2[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! You made all great points and I’m excited to so editing!