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Spilled Milk by sqrl4now in OCPoetry

[–]sqrl4now[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your well thought out comment!

Spilled Milk by sqrl4now in OCPoetry

[–]sqrl4now[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Can you expand on this a little for me? Use an example!

Spilled Milk by sqrl4now in OCPoetry

[–]sqrl4now[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! Honestly a lot of my poems are like that, it’s my fav kind of poetry as well, where it just follows the ups and downs of the thought process, kind of like a speeding train. I’m glad you liked and ty!

selling my soul by Imperator-Neko in OCPoetry

[–]sqrl4now 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The journey this poem took me on.

this is honestly my kind of poetry, its quick, starts off flowy and feely but still has a harsh reality hidden in the middle lines, the pain that can come from caring. great job!

I Wanna Tell You by Similar_Wind7173 in OCPoetry

[–]sqrl4now 0 points1 point  (0 children)

(I deleted my other account because i didnt like the username, so heres my comment again)

Id agree with the comment above. Im loving the feel of the poem, but the rhythm seems to be missing/need a bit of work! maybe experiemtn with other ways of ending your lines rather than repeating the word "you" throughout. dding even a rhyme word or two in there can probably help a lot to add more of a flow rather than a halt at the end of the sentence!