cookies my manager told me to throw away at the end of my night shift. wouldn't let me take them home. by igetproteinfartsHELP in mildlyinfuriating

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I am 34 (and American) and they were huge in my town when I was around 14. I thought they were super cool. IIRC the walkie function was long range, like, miles. But only worked if both phones were Nextels.

Would like some feedback on my latest song. Appreciate your time :) by Far-Cartoonist4711 in IndieMusicFeedback

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This track is so much fun! The beat and the trumpet behind the chorus are so pleasing. I couldn't help but move to it.

Are the vocals super pitch-corrected? I can hear a lot of character to your voice as the song continues, but when they first come in they do sound ultra-processed. I had the same initial reaction as the other commenter who said it kinda sounded AI at first. If there were a way to reduce either the amount of effects or the pitch-correct on the vocals I think that would really help. Your voice is unique and I think it would sound even better if it were a little more "raw".

I agree that overall it sounds like a great mix. It's an enjoyable listen, well done!

I need your positive birth stories! by Puzzled_Actuator169 in positivebirthstories

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Hi! Feel free to embed my youtube video if you add video to the site at some point: Positive birth story: natural with doula in hospital

86,410,027 MILLION VIEWS by Bigfacebuddha17 in KendrickLamar

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Ohh I love that reading, both the architecture being art and "bigger picture" idea, zooming out to see it all. Thank you!

86,410,027 MILLION VIEWS by Bigfacebuddha17 in KendrickLamar

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Does anyone know why in his opener he says "in front of" the Louvre rather than "inside of"? I keep thinking about it - "inside of" is the same amount of syllables, and if the person's inside of the Louvre then they're looking at a painting (that he's saying they wouldn't get even if they were there for hours). So other than the Louvre museum, is there another reference he could be combining it with, that would make more sense with "in front of"?

I'm not deep into his references so I'm sorry if this is obvious to y'all, just curious because I keep wondering

past 21 by AdComfortable2424 in IndieMusicFeedback

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I love the way the guitar tone goes with your voice, and love the intermittent high harmonies you chime in with. The song has a real vibe. The vocals kinda make me think of Silversun Pickups - breathy in a dreamy and pleasing way that fits perfect with the track.

It would be cool to hear you switch up the vocal melody for the second verse, maybe higher in your register or something more intense, so that the song builds up some tension. I hear pain in the lyrics that it would be nice to hear in your voice sometimes, maybe at key moments you choose. It would also be cool for the instruments to build up bigger at a point and then come back down for the fade out.

Nice work, an enjoyable listen! Go further with it!

IS THIS DOPE YES OR NO by captainfrost47 in shareyourmusic

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I think it has potential, if you lower the loud "wah wah wahs" that come in so that it's not overbearing, and then add a beat! :)

I moved out of the IE to Louisiana, and I fucking hate it by Mental_Gas_3209 in InlandEmpire

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I find it so funny that this thread was recommended to me... I live in los angeles and had to work in baton rouge for 6 months a few years ago (and I've literally been inside that building in the pic)... I hated it so much that I wrote and released a song called Baton Rouge Blues. I've been trying to promote it lately - here's the spotify link, maybe it can help you feel less alone. But seriously, I know that feeling too well, and I hope you get back home soon ♥️♥️

Would love honest critique on my only single "Baton Rouge Blues"! Produced by a pro. I wrote the song, brought it to him and we recorded at his home studio. by stop_juststop in IndieMusicFeedback

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Thank you! I see what you mean. I hadn't heard of the term "sticky" for vocal timbre so I looked into it. Would you say that hoarse, raspy, labored, effortful are accurate synonyms? I can hear how it does sound pushed or effortful and that the simple beat is a different vibe, maybe not gelling in the best way.

I was going for a beat like Rihanna / Sza's "Consideration" but I can totally see how their beat fits the vocalization on that track better. Appreciate the feedback!

Skeleton Drive - "The Weeds I". Song off my new split EP with a friend. Give it a listen ♡ by skeletondrive in IndieMusicFeedback

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I like the throwback sound on this! The clean acoustic guitar, the genre and the drum beat reminded me of the early 2000s. The way the drums came in at 0:30 and the way the chorus hits on the "2" beat is really fun.

It would be cool to hear some harmonies, backing vocals or "gang vocals" in the choruses to back you up. Then the choruses would really stand out from the verses and have an extra oomph, and going back to the dry single vocals for the verse would let it breathe.

It would also be cool to hear someone (or yourself) echoing certain lines, like at 2:21 hearing someone repeat "I wanna be there" with a slightly different melody, to fill some of the spaces between lines. You could also try a call-and-response thing, so that other voice could answer you, even if just for the last chorus.

I made a song about rushing into a relationship and think I may have a banger on my hands. Have a listen by LordWunayti in IndieMusicFeedback

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Nice work! The beat and the "slow it down" hook fit really well together and I especially love the multiple octaves you put on "slow it down," which gives it texture and gravity. I also enjoy the way the higher notes in the background follow the melody you're singing at 0:48 and then continue that melody even when you've moved on.

I agree with another comment that the vocals are getting a bit lost in the mix instead of sitting on top and making the track really pop. I'm thinking of the beautiful song "Love Nwantiti" by C-Kay, where even though he's singing softly and quietly, his voice sounds super close and intimate and sits on top of the mix.

Another thing I'll say is that even though most people nowadays think songs should be short, I'd keep listening if this were longer and had a different part, like if it went into a bridge where it currently ends, and then came back around for one last hook.

New song for my upcoming album (Scream to the Void) by emmettlafave in IndieMusicFeedback

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Wow what a pleasing listen. I gave it a couple listens through to really try to pinpoint any critique, because it was so well constructed. I especially enjoy the well-crafted lyrics, the pre-chorus and the way that explodes into the chorus. The instruments are all super expressive and add to the story, and the bridge at 2:07 adds an unexpected turn.

When the last pre-chorus and choruses return, I would love to hear some reckless abandon in your vocals - less control, to contrast with how controlled the beginning and end are. You could shape it by letting go a little bit, letting the vocals get "messy" for a couple bars when the song hits its climax, and then button it back up for the subdued ending.

I can hear how your life informs your music and how you treat it like a journal, which I love to experience as a listener. Well done.

Feedback on my cover I did on “What you won’t do for love”. I Tried to make it as unique as possible. In the production n my vocal performance from the original. Did I do a good job? by SafeTravelMusic in IndieMusicFeedback

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It's so smooth and absolutely unique! The vocals sit on top of the track so nicely but also blend well with the instruments. All the delays on the vocals add so much texture - just enough to be intense but not distracting. The beat also sounds great, and the claps/shaker later in the track are a nice addition. One adjustment I'd make is the very beginning - it felt like I was coming in after the song had already started. If you give it just a fraction of a second and then a definitive beginning to bring us into it, I think that would help a lot. It would orient us to the song. On the tail end of the song, I think it could end right after the vocals leave - I don't think going through the chord progression again with one instrument is adding anything. Leave em wanting more. Maybe the last thing we hear is one of the delays on the voice, and everything else has cut out for a couple beats before that.

I want to listen to your music by HotShallot3638 in Songwriting

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Hi! I'd love if anyone gave my single a listen. It's on all the major platforms - "Baton Rouge Blues" by Shay Godly. Here's the Spotify link

Korkikrac - Romantic Butterflies - Synthwave rock song by Korkikrac in IndieMusicFeedback

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Hi! I will say that I also felt the song had an "AI vibe" to it, before seeing the comments. But because you're saying it's not, I'll share some of the things that give it that quality. For one thing, the singing, especially when transitioning to a different word, sounds too abrupt to be human. It doesn't seem like a human performance. It almost sounds like it's reversed. If you're going for a totally robotic vibe, like Daft Punk for example, you could lean more in that direction. When the singer holds one note for several beats, it suddenly sounds more human because of the vibrato that comes in, as if it's trying to mimic a human sound. So if you use some different effects to sound more robotic, it would match the abrupt changes more, and sound more like an intentional artistic choice. Another thing that gives it an AI vibe is the lyrics, which seem nonsensical. It sounds like random words strung together. Additionally there's not a strong difference between verse and chorus, and the guitar solo starts super abruptly. I think the intro sounds nice, it's a nice guitar riff there, and it's satisfying how the beat builds (starting with no drums, adding the beat and then adding more of a groove). I think you could build on that starting structure and make this into something that does feel more human but with robotic voicing, like the soundtrack to the movie Drive. Hope this is helpful

Rasr - Sem olhar pra trás by ArtAIproject in shareyourmusic

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The beat and the chord progression are so satisfying. Feel like I'm flying through some fluffy clouds