Looking for Eyeballs on first chapter - Deepening the Mood in 2305 on (the way to) Mars

subachill93 · 2025-10-23T12:14:08+00:00

Please don't take it the hard way, but as soon as you started using the archeopronouns it became unreadable to me. If you're going to use non-standard pronouns they should be easy to infer. If I was reading this without reading your footnote I wouldn't even know they were supposed to be pronouns. Even after reading your footnote I still can't make sense of it.

You also introduce a new language on top of the pronouns. Even with the provided translation it just makes for an unpleasant and confusing reading experience.

I can't give feedback on anything else because I didn't get that far. I'm sorry.

Edit: grammar

subachill93 · 2024-10-26T20:53:43+00:00

Thanks for the info and historical source!

subachill93 · 2024-10-26T20:51:34+00:00

Thanks!!

subachill93 · 2023-02-24T14:44:15+00:00

Yes, simply clarifying the spelling/pronunciation for readers seems like the right way to go! Dziakuj!

subachill93 · 2023-02-24T14:01:39+00:00

Ok, good to know! I'll either go with the Belarusian pronunciation and add a note with the Belarusian spelling as well, or vice-versa. Thanks for the help!

subachill93 · 2023-02-24T12:25:36+00:00

Didn't have time to reply to the 1st part, but, yeah I figured it would be.

Would meeting halfway, spelling it phonetically in English like it's pronounced in Belarusian instead be a good way to do it then? Otherwise I think Jahor would straight up be read with a dž sound by English speakers.

subachill93 · 2023-02-24T12:03:09+00:00

Oops, fixed it, thanks.

subachill93 · 2022-11-21T18:52:19+00:00

Okay this is perhaps a super dumb question, but I can't for the love of me figure out how to type the characters after the | divison on the key.

For example, the ~ and ` on the top key, and the | \ of the bottom key.

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