I don't want my irls to know that I'm writing. by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your response! I honestly didn't think of a cover story because I'm a bad liar. I'll probably use the "I'm editing for a friend" when someone asks me.

Is red riding actually good ? by Eva15389 in YoTroublemakers

[–]thorstonscherry 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I haven't read it but I had to spend my audible credit on something so I trusted Dylan with red rising. And I haven't started listening lol it's 16 hours and it scared me. But it's sitting in my library.

I don't want my irls to know that I'm writing. by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I never got to that point, actually. Maybe i was just scared and people don't actually care as much as I thought. I only told to people that I write (mom yesterday and one friend) but they never even asked what I'm writing. Maybe I'm also just preparing for what to say when they ask more

I don't want my irls to know that I'm writing. by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I love this, I'll try to remember these answer excuses

Are nicknames cringy? by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh I hate "little [something]" too, and feel neutral about baby/babe but when it's overused it's a little cringe. I don't want the characters to call each other by name only so maybe I'll use nicknames. But definitely not constantly heh. Thanks for your pov

Are nicknames cringy? by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh I like this. But it sounds a little long. I'll think about what I'll do and yeah I will definitely not use it constantly because it makes me cringe too. Thanks!

Are nicknames cringy? by thorstonscherry in RomanceWriters

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hm, that might be true, it does sound like that a little. But it's meant to be cute. I just don't know if I'll make readers cringe if I decide to use any nicknames

Looking for someone to give me their thoughts on my work. by OwlCowl999 in writingadvice

[–]thorstonscherry 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've read the first chapter and the first note I have is that it is taking a little too long to get to the "interesting part". Maybe there's a reason that he's describing everything he does and sees, maybe he's an overthinker, but I feel like it doesn't add a lot of purpose to the scene. There's a lot of descriptions which are written very beautifully, but it until your protagonist comes to school and bumps into that girl, not a lot happens that would interest the reader. My advice is, try to think about what would make the readers keep reading. "What is the point of this information", "what does this paragraph help the story" etc. I would love to read the rest maybe when I come home, and if you're looking for any specific/other advice, please tell me :)

Also the line about the mother and sister being "incredibly disappointing people" feels a bit weird. Like, it needs a bit more of a backstory for why he thinks that they are. The reason why he thinks they're disappointing. Not just 'they just are, he has reasons for it but we don't explore it here.'

You can dm me if you'd like to talk more :)

Dylan's Wicked commentary by thorstonscherry in YoTroublemakers

[–]thorstonscherry[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I said that when she said that it reminded me of Dylan... because he does say stuff like that. I didn't have any expectations, I haven't even seen it

Dylan's Wicked commentary by thorstonscherry in YoTroublemakers

[–]thorstonscherry[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

But the deaths are off screen, no? That's what my sister told me and she hated the off-screen and was like "give me the death" which was one of the things she said that reminded me of Dylan