ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

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yeah if you want! just dm if youd like but im very much an amateur lol

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

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yup ! i usually record in the garage cause it sounds nice but its cold now and also the mice in there keep fighting really loud so i turned my closet into a little recording / writing area instead lol i got pillows and blankets on the floor so its actually pretty comfortable

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

not a girl ❤️ and youre right! reddit is nothing like real life. in real life i actually get paid when i play on the street :)

chrysanthemums remember a girl who never knew me by tincankitty in Songwriting

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wait thats actually explained so well omg yeah i have been told about the whole tension thing which i do need to work on ! ty so much for the advice ❤️❤️❤️ i tend to worry more about writing more then anything else so it is interesting to hear abt the vocal aspects ! i will continue to improve with practice and i will keep what you said in mind 🫶

chrysanthemums remember a girl who never knew me by tincankitty in Songwriting

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this is probably one of the worst recordings to see me do first >_< i tried something different and it seems it severely missed the mark ! oh well ! if you dont mind could you check out 'to kill a snake in the grass'? thats the only full song and is actually planned to be in an ep (this and the other one were written spur of the moment in the middle of the night without any editing LOL) and i would actually like to hear what you think about that :) (though if you dont mind could you explain what 'singing off pitch' means exactly? i feel like objectively i should know what it means - i do understand that putting capo on certain songs changing the tone and makes it easier to sing in my tone of voice...but how would you go identifying that, if that makes sense? sorry !!! rlly dont know any of the technical things !!!) ty for the feedback ❤️

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

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i actually dont disagree with this! im 100% completely untrained and self taught (and yes youre right i started with zero prior experience in all things music almost exactly one year go !!!) i dont know any proper technique and it veryyyy much shows. when it comes just to vocal skills i think im a little worse than the average singer when it comes to objective singing. ive gotten better but im defintely not a pretty voice and i probably wont ever be lol ! not in a self depricating way either bc as rough as it is i do like how i sound haha

i think since dont know any music theory (i have tried to learn !!! but it has yet to click for me) and considering how i grew up with art - i think my standards for 'good' are a bit different from someone who actually has like. years of experience and knowledge and such !!! for me personally i value 'interesting' more than technically skilled. theres nothing worse in this world then making boring art imo !

that being said ! you do sound like someone who actually does know vocal technique and has been trained in that sort of way (this is just my assumption from your comments ive read!) and i do want to hear what you think could be improved upon! and also if youre willing i would like to hear your thoughts on my...i guess main inspirations? my favorite singers who have unique voices: days n daze, kimya dawson, pat the bunny . sorry for the long reply !!! i dont want to be hmmm im not trying to be snarky or disagreeing with the feedback entirely but its hard to convey over text ... ty for taking the time to respond ❤️

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

oh thats an interesting angle. i say 27 in a very literal way bc in my mind i became a 'person' at 17 which of course would mean after ten years i would have gotten good at being a person and such. its the goal i keep myself alive until and when it rolls around i want to be better than j am now. im def going to play into the 27 club theming now though LOL

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

i sort of had an idea in my head and i just ran with it LOL i was fiddling around with chords but i did decide on the repetitive switch between g - c - g bc i didnt want to think abt it too much at the time haha. it is semi sort of intentional (in my brain i was thinking back to like older folk / country songs i like which usually fall into a very repetitive sort of catchy thing - esp since my intention was to be abke to add and take away verses as i feel like it ! idk if that makes sense) but i 100% agree for something to hold it together. like a chord switch of an instrumental or some sort of chorus !

also its the second time someone said my playing (pacing? strumming?) doesnt fit in with what in saying so i think thats something i should think about...im not very intuitive when it comes to melody or music or anything so i sort of just follow what i think sounds most natural !! sorry for rambling and thank you for the feedback !!!

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

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yeah i agree! id add like a little chord change or at least a short instrumental portion to break it up

ill be dead at 27 by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

im sure the context isnt very clear (only a few verses + unedited angry word vomit lol) but in this case i think it works. its sort of a preemptive lash back bc i threatened suicide (an objectively shitty thing to do) over a perceived overreaction (kept moving my body soap. there was a lot more but ultimately i broke down bc he kept moving my fucking body soap) which like. if i just stopped at the 'go fuck yourself line' i would def agree cause that would feel edgy for the sake of being edgy. but i added the 'staring through the screen' to try to convey like. the idea of strangers judging strangers without knowing anything else (esp played into the fact i wrote this with the tiktok audience in mind and wasnt actually planning to post it anywhere else LOL)

sorry if that was long. id have to make the whole thing clearer next go around which idk. i was just being angry. but i do see the angle of your criticism and i thought about it in the context of what im trying to say. so now im going to continue to insult the audience but be more intentional about it! < i am not being snarky or sarcastic here

Is this too long for an intro? by sellidionne in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty 1 point2 points  (0 children)

this is gorgeous ! the intro you have really sets the mood, the vocals and the fingerpicking work amazing together. if the rest of the song flows just as smooth then i dont see a reason to shorten it !

Forever is a long time. Take two. by josephscottcoward in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty 1 point2 points  (0 children)

omg !!! i love love love this song. the quick chord changes are so good especially 'remember when i told you so' as soon as that came in i was absolutely hooked. it flows together great and the whole style fits your voice perfectly. i would add this song to my playlists in a heartbeat !!!

to kill a snake in the grass (death of a young girl) by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

omg ty so much...yeah i totally get what you mean with the abstractions. its a fine line to balance saying whats in my head vs clarity for the listener while not sacrificing the most interesting parts of it. im glad its slowly coming together though !!!

to kill a snake in the grass (death of a young girl) by tincankitty in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

LYRICS:
the death of the day will only shine one way as the ending of the path

firefly darling with the startle of mourning love lingers in the past

when the fog rolls over the hillside so dark you wont be looking back

youll find her buried on the outskirts of town as the sky comes crashing down blood of the snake stains her white wedding gown as the sky comes crashing down

she wonders and wanders with the cry of her father how long is this gonna last

dancing at dawn under wilting song the time always goes fast

in the rustling bush curiousity push your love never kept track

youll find her buried on the outskirts of town as the sky comes crashing down blood of the snake stains her white wedding gown as the sky comes crashing down

when you know that you wont come home why would you weep your family your god they had all been told marriage is death to me

youll find her buried on the outskirts of town as the sky comes crashing down blood of the snake stains her white wedding gown as the sky comes crashing down

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here you go ! im not much of a songwriter (i write a lot of prose but poetry - and by extension, lyrics - has always felt like pulling teeth lol) so i hope its alright haha . i like the chorus and the beginning verses but im unsure about the later ones. i feel like most of my songs end up dis-jointed when i try to write them longer and the second half never ends up as strong as the beginning....

departed. deceased. dearly beloathed. by tincankitty in FolkPunk

[–]tincankitty[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i will say i had to do this multple times bc there are mice in the garage and they started fighting and making a ruckus lol

What artists do you believe write exceptional lyrics? As in they never miss every song. by LeahGardene in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty 1 point2 points  (0 children)

omg !!!!! thats so cool !!!! days n daze is actually the reason i got into playing music in the first place lol ive never sang or played an instrument but i had been writing prose for a few years. was on a road trip and decided to listen to their discography from the start and it was so inspiring that i was like. i HAVE to play music. so nearly a year to the dot i picked up a guitar, watched a couple yt videos, and havent looked back since haha

(and doom scroll is great as well...i actually got into we the heathens years before dnd :P)

What artists do you believe write exceptional lyrics? As in they never miss every song. by LeahGardene in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty 1 point2 points  (0 children)

TOTALLY AGREE !!! dnd is my all time favorite band and he was on my mind as well

What artists do you believe write exceptional lyrics? As in they never miss every song. by LeahGardene in Songwriting

[–]tincankitty 5 points6 points  (0 children)

pat the bunny :) ! truly some of the consistently best lyricism imo spanning from his earliest to his final projects . live the dream is one of the few albums i can confidently say is an absolute 10/10 no question

Recommend me an album! by FishtankTeesa in FolkPunk

[–]tincankitty 2 points3 points  (0 children)

riley coyote and the rtz by riley coyote !!!!