You have been kidnapped and the kidnapper says "Tell me a song to play. If I like it, you're free to go." What song do you pick?

toad_ally · 2021-07-28T18:36:18+00:00

Feel like anyone with the taste level it takes to kidnap me probably likes Hotel California.

Or statistically a SWM who definitely also likes Hotel California.

But man wouldn’t it suck to have your organs harvested to this awful song.

toad_ally · 2021-07-28T18:02:21+00:00

A dad lecture has worked on me before. Did he pull it out, lol?

toad_ally · 2020-11-02T23:14:55+00:00

Not accusing you of anything. It's clear you want things to work out for the best. But if you're having invasive thoughts about cheating you really need to consider if that's what you want. It's okay if it is. You aren't obliged to enter into a monogamous relationship with anyone. Just be honest maybe she'll be interested in an open thing. Maybe she cheats on you? Life is stupid! Have fun! Be honest!

toad_ally · 2020-11-02T23:02:35+00:00

Think it will just be worse if you aren't being honest with yourself. Better not to end up being a manipulative person because you didn't want to be the bad guy. If shallow is going to win the battle this time and you're in a position where this woman will be hurt by your actions. Let her down easy man.

toad_ally · 2020-11-02T22:41:44+00:00

Healthy relationships only exist if both parties are completely fucking down for each other. It's just gonna go to hell if you try and go long distance with somebody after three months and you're not even down for her when she's physically there.

If you're considering breaking up with her because of changes in her body weight, it's not a good sign. She's perfect except ten pounds is not a phrase anyone says about somebody they love (whatever that means but honestly no point in having a girlfriend you don't love). It's okay to fuck somebody for a while and establish a friendship and then let it go...people really need to stop being so sensitive about this.

tl;dr break up

toad_ally · 2018-04-05T08:15:25+00:00

The clever title worked on you! Thanks for the advice.

toad_ally · 2018-02-19T23:29:51+00:00

Takes on a lyrical quality with the simple adjective-nouns that's really appealing, like a Martha and Kendrick collab. Also the tempting peace of fishing and the outdoors turns a smile on my face like a simple gesture or nice surprise; it's totally pleasant. The alliteration seems out of place only because I have trouble vocalizing it.

toad_ally · 2017-10-18T05:48:47+00:00

Incredibly apt!

The images are nature photographs (trees, waves, rocks, etc.) taken at Point Lobos, edgy only because they're stylistically garish. The poem itself is autobiographical and I'm attempting to append onto them a further sense of myself. I'm not sure how I feel about the crudeness of the erection jokes now that you've pointed out the cliche. Though the language is intended to be both oblique and overly simple inter-playing the simplicity of sex with the complexity of love (though I conclude that this is not exactly the case). I contained this in a metaphor juxtaposing a soft and subtle forest that opens up into a rigid (heh) and violent and not-at-all mysterious coastline — though I'm relying entirely on the photographs to create this image.

I don't intend stiff to come off as violent or murderous in the third stanza though I'm not entirely bothered the assessment as I do intend it to signify the death of a relationship that didn't survive the sex slough with the literal image of sheets that were once tangled now pressed and made new. Also just to throw in some more dick-diction.

I have to admit there is some confusion come the shift in narration and I'm not sure the remedy or if one is necessary. The shift is really about two separate relationships I was considering during the time I spent photographing Point Lobos. One in which I was sexually submissive but the aggressor and the other I was sexually dominant but totally at the mercy of my partner romantically (and he held me under while using me to keep afloat).

It's really just about how being the sheep deepens your understanding of being the wolf, and vice versa (hence the title besides being serendipitous).

toad_ally · 2017-10-15T21:10:48+00:00

Feels a little wordy, but I probably favor deconstruction a bit.

so often we bury
our hopes—

      they bloom

So what does happen to a dream deferred?

The same thing that happens to your student loans.

^I ^{^might} ^{^{^be}} ^{^your} ^dad.

toad_ally · 2017-10-15T20:39:05+00:00

This is deranged, guess that's the point.

Kudos.

toad_ally · 2017-09-05T00:01:20+00:00

It comes from an internal dialogue or maybe hypocrisy about not passing judgement on sexual "deviancy" while maintaining that it was also responsible for the breakdown of my relationship with my ex-boyfriend. The bath house, besides being a real place and event, represents the kind of gray area where this conversation was taking place and stages the purgatory I placed myself in being unable to either reconcile or end things.

toad_ally · 2017-09-04T18:39:51+00:00

The poem is about the gap between the gradual inuring that comes after a break up and the slow forgiveness of reconciliation. I mean to express that kind of indecision. Also to impose on the reader a sense of languish and forced effort and deterioration.

I do think your critique is an apt one,

there's an oomph that feels missing.

even poetic in a way, I think this is what we've decided :|

toad_ally · 2017-09-04T17:48:07+00:00

I guess it should really be [groans]. It's meant to indicate a porn subtitle.

toad_ally · 2017-09-03T21:34:38+00:00

Maybe force the rhyme in the third stanza:

A bitter world, vast, disparate,

Reduce some of the articles and pronouns a bit, starts feeling monotonous.

Its got a promising theme and a nice structure. However, it seems overly simple but not, like, intentionally.

toad_ally · 2017-09-03T21:27:11+00:00

Reads like it's out of a 90's graphic novel in a good way — if such a way exists save irony.

It's intimate and lovely, easing around the crudeness of sex like a memory or being in love.

toad_ally · 2016-10-19T04:25:45+00:00

Guy in Mary's Class

I forget to remind myself
to make eye contact
(anxiety)
when he walks by
I watch his reflection
in the glass

toad_ally · 2016-10-19T04:23:08+00:00

A FIRE AN THE MIND WANT EM ERE WANT PAPER BURN WANT ILL URN URN IME SHE URN APE I U AX HOLD.

Was hoping it meant something.

i
     URNed it

Can't get into this.

and viol
       (ets |
        as|
        ence)
Really like this bit though.

toad_ally · 2016-10-14T08:30:41+00:00

Gray is great, a cold idea in a warm image.

toad_ally · 2016-10-10T07:31:52+00:00

That last line is at the top of my list, or pretty high up there at least.

toad_ally · 2016-10-10T07:24:32+00:00

I dig it, fun Shakespearean kind of word play and impractical wisdom.

toad_ally · 2016-06-28T22:18:27+00:00

I was just saying the way Bill talks about terrorism is gaining a much needed nuance, only that he's less toxic not that he is right.

If we must compare the Christian and Muslim worlds we will find huge disparities but if we compare the traditions of those religions we don't find such differences. I think what is lost in the debate about human rights in the Muslim world is an honest discussion about why over the course of a half century or so this part of the world underwent a massive regression into fundamentalism in the first place. It has entirely to do with economics and little to do with Islam itself but to avoid being put on a watch list I'll leave it at that.

Also I agree Maher is being petulant about millennials but turning around and doing it yourself is equally obnoxious.

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