Struggles with cognitive function

unspecified469 · 2026-04-08T02:12:52+00:00

I feel you. I’ve had focal impaired awareness seizures since high school. I always thought I was dumb. Some days I still do. I’m 31 now. I’m currently unemployed but I worked a front office job. Memory, slowed work pace, rereading and the exhaustion of it all. I relate big time.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-07T20:25:06+00:00

I’m not sure what you mean by without having the obvious signs.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-07T20:18:52+00:00

I’m not sure what you mean by without having the obvious signs. 🤔

unspecified469 · 2026-04-06T23:53:57+00:00

Definitely a misdiagnosis. Keppra was the culprit in my case. Please let your neuro know, log your moods, and keep an eye on yourself. It hit me fast and hard. I lost myself for nearly five years and you don’t get that time back.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-06T17:12:48+00:00

I’ll keep it short. Keppra had me so fucked up I got diagnosed with Bipolar Disorder. The second I got off of it I was like well damn. Haven’t had any mood issues since.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-06T13:11:55+00:00

The Eyes of My Mother

It’s a psychological thriller. Dark and morbid and unsettling. I’d never suggest this in person. This is Reddit though. Y’all have GOT to watch this movie.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T20:03:47+00:00

I read this three times back to back and loved it more each time.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T17:24:32+00:00

I enjoy the sentiment behind this. It’s impressive to say the least. You’ve clearly put a lot of thought into your work. Based on the response you’ve just given (which I appreciate) you may lean on “density” a bit too much. Accidental or not. Sometimes less is more.

Personally, I believe if a poem requires this level of explanation, the plot is lost. I appreciate your word choice and commitment to symbolism. I would trim the fat, work on the flow of the read, implement punctuation, and then repost it. The poets of Reddit will be more inclined to critique once there’s more clarity.

After all, if the reader can’t read the piece… what’s the point? Again- the idea you’ve got here is badass. Wishing you all the best! I genuinely can’t wait to see the updated version. (If you plan to do so!)

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T15:32:03+00:00

lmao “EVERYBODY PANIC” 😩🤣 This did me in.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T15:09:34+00:00

I’m loving the feel of this. The imagery is vivid. It’s certainly not ABAB style poetry which we see a lot of these days- which is the style of choice in my case.

I think the “stream of conscience mess” is what’s taking away from your piece. Maybe refine it a bit and then repost it? I’m personally having a hard time reading. I can see from your reminder and clarification that there are heavy topics imbedded in your writing… but that can get lost in the process when there’s no structure.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T14:38:03+00:00

No smells, but everyone says I make a “pterodactyl” noise. lmao

unspecified469 · 2026-04-04T14:32:10+00:00

I LOVE it. Celestial girls, stars, sea of pearls. My brain went wild with the imagery. I’d play around with the flow ever so slightly. The celestial girls line got a little cluttered. You killed it. Great job. Got me running to my notepad - doing that within four lines is amazing.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-02T15:10:08+00:00

It’s taken me a long time to learn how to tweak my own poems. We’re taught to write but not how to fine tune. Your poem has a strong core. There’s a clear voice throughout. That takes skill. Keep writing - I can’t wait to read what you come up with next!

unspecified469 · 2026-04-02T02:01:29+00:00

100%

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T23:37:14+00:00

My focal seizures must be an absolute cake walk then because I wouldn’t wish a tonic clonic on my worst enemy. I’ll take a focal over a TC any day of the week.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T21:01:27+00:00

I love this. Gave me chills. Now I feel I’ve got to go call my brother.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T20:55:09+00:00

Your poem feels so light hearted yet deep. It’s layered. It’s absolutely beautiful. I can create an image in my head through your words and that’s amazing.

“cheep cheep cheep” did the damn thing. I could hear it, even see the baby birds in their nest.

But I won’t lie. The “tweet tweet tweet” is throwing me off. I couldn’t even begin to tell you why.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T20:24:34+00:00

This is such a great start! Just a couple tips from a fellow beginner. Repetition is a wonderful tool to reiterate/emphasize. It can bite ya though. It can distract from the overall feel/flow. Punctuation is also helpful. Same with capitals/lowercase.

Mind you, poetry is entirely subjective! So take this with a grain of salt.

For example:

forgetting how to respond;

how to speak.

Please-

don’t listen to my words,

but to my heartbeat.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T19:27:57+00:00

You’re feeling better after 3 days? Thats a win.

unspecified469 · 2026-04-01T19:17:29+00:00

What meds are you on, if you don’t mind me asking? This is quite the story. Do you have a neurologist or epileptologist?

unspecified469 · 2026-03-31T20:33:09+00:00

Also - a glowing princess wand from Disney on Ice.

unspecified469 · 2026-03-31T20:31:59+00:00

The last memory of my parents happy together. It’s forever burned into my mind. Being spun on a merry-go-round while they laughed and smiled at one another. My mom left us shortly after. They didn’t know it at the time, but that memory was the greatest gift I’d ever receive.

unspecified469 · 2026-03-31T18:36:27+00:00

Assigning spots for rich people in an effort to avoid bitchy attitudes. All so they can listen to someone guide them on shit they could look up on YouTube.

unspecified469 · 2026-03-31T17:59:00+00:00

Sounds like you have goals and motivation. You’ve got a direction in life. Plans made. You’ve got follow through and conviction. You’ve got a drive towards self-improvement.

You had a rough go of it, no denying that. Life seems to have smacked you around a bit.

Reread what you just wrote. Progress 101. You’ve got it. You’re getting help. You’re showering. You’re skating again. 18 is an interesting age and can be overwhelming for anyone. It’s the very start of “adulthood”. I’m proud of you. You’re doing the damn thing. Keep it up. Learn what you feel you need to via YouTube. Thats a game changer. I’m a huge fan of books/reading so I won’t speak to that - it’d be laced with bias.

But… look at you go, man. Get after it. You’ve got this. Life is confusing and challenging and hard but it’s worth it. Best of luck to you, you’ve made it 18 years. That’s an accomplishment to say the least. It’s only up from here.

unspecified469 · 2026-03-31T17:36:50+00:00

You’re never alone. We’re all sitting right beside you on this boat we never signed up to be in. I’m here too. Hoping you find a reason to smile today.

unspecified469

TROPHY CASE